Tak

[Darth Tak]

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NAME:
Tak Denekyn

FACTION:
Sith

RANK:
Acolyte

ALIGNMENT:
Neutral Evil

SPECIES:
Sith Pureblood (Pure pure, his family has been only with its own kind for a long time, 100%, seriously, no )

AGE:
24

GENDER:
Male

HEIGHT:
about 6'3

WEIGHT:
81kg

EYES:
Blood Red

HAIR:
Brown

SKIN:
Red

CREDITS:
1000

DISTINGUISHING MARKS:
No

FORCE SENSITIVE:
Yes.

HANDED:
Left, like most Sith Purebloods.

MASTER:
Unofficial Master Xanthus, along with Raslekx.

ST: IIIIIIIIII 7
DE: IIIIIIIIII 6
CO: IIIIIIIIII 5
IN: IIIIIIIIIII 9
WI: IIIIIIIIII 6
CH: IIIIIIIIII 9
OV: IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII 39
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STRENGTH:
IIIIIIIIII
8/10: Tak is in good shape, exercising daily. He can hold his body weight for 15 minutes.

DEXTERITY:
IIIIIIIIII
5/10: is quite fast, both in thought and action, But during running, he goes quite fast for a minute then has to rest for a while. Now that I think about it, not that much actually, physically anyway.

CONSTITUTION:
IIIIIIIIII
5/10: He is doing fine, like any good Sith (well, evil Sith).

INTELLIGENCE:
IIIIIIIIIIII
9/10: His intelligence is his favorite part about him. He often uses riddles, jokes and brain games to get his way, He has never lost a riddle contest, but he has got no competition.

WISDOM:
IIIIIIIIII
7/10: In good shape Wisdom-wise.

CHARISMA:
IIIIIIIIII
7/10: He's quite good, better then average.

FORCE POWERS:
Force Push/Pull = 6
Force Sense = 5
Telekinesis = 7
Force Speed = 3
Force Lightning = 6
...Wracking Energy = 3
Pyrokinesis= 4
Force Bellow= 3
Force Fear= 3

APPEARANCE:
Tak looks like your usual haired Pureblood Sith in a black and red Sith Robe.

SKILLS:
Tak is very good at mind games and fighting among others.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Ataru (Intermediate)

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Tak enjoys closing his eyes and thinking, it gets him in better shape with the force, with the thinking, almost like meditation, only he thinks about everything. He cannot stand looking weak.

GEAR:
http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/showthread.php?50570-245-TAK-Lightsaber He also has a tracker device for his family and a small map of sentimental value of .

SHIP:
the Diastima, Tak's ship, is a Fury-Class Imperial Inteceptor, with 4 precision laser cannons and missiles. A beauty, look at it on Wookiepedia. It is painted black and red, mostly black.

DROIDS:
Tak was a rusty B3 battle droid on duty (barely working), a 2-1B Medical Droid, an R9-Series Astromech droid (painted black and red just like every other droid of theirs, called Arnine) and a FLO droid (looks awesome in black'n'red).

PETS:
Two Tusk Cats, one Gold and one (rare mutation) black. One is Djinjer and the black is Sofi.

PERSONALITY:
Tak tries to joke and be funny but never stops until he gets his way. He often uses witty remarks and (clever) insults to try to bring them to the dark side, but even Tak has a bit of both sides. After extensive research Tak found that the original way may have been the best way and for a bit secretly wanted to be a Revanite but he realized that too much bad things has happened to him for balance and they are weak anyway. If you anger Tak, he will keep getting revenge for a while. If you make him think about his past, he might start crying and render useless... OR he will go angry and kill everybody, who knows. He has a gift with making friends. You could say he is eccentric, and if you do/did you are/where correct.

BIOGRAPHY:
For a while, Tak's family had a good grip on Kraysiss Two, being in almost all of the politics, but new clans started to build up. They lived in straw huts and had a lot of meat. The growing clans where growing, This was no problem. Tak was born, and after a normal life, he became 3. By then, Tak's loving Mother, Mitera, bore Tak's father, Patera, male sixtulets. Then when he was 5, female sixtuplets. Tak was the heir of the family and the most treasured. He learnt to fight at 6 and was going to be the hero of the clan when he was older. Tak's clan was completely comprised of Sith Purebloods, as it where a massive taboo to interbreed. They where heavily military based.

Beforehand, they where quite Nomadic, moving around all the time and having quite Barbaric houses, but eventally after development, progress and a better understanding of the force (they believed in Force Gods) they moved to a more civilized stage (Celtic-esque) Most enemy clans where weak and stupid and extremely barbaric, but a few with almost-identical philosophies joined together because of this, they had a wide species variation and that made Tak's family hate them, especially when they interbreeded. They where now quite powerful. Then War. For a while, it was completely even, evenly matched, they where even at everything, but then at a key-battle, the Denekynians (Tak) lost, and it went downhill from there. Several losses past, and the Denekyn territory shrunk. To prolong the survival of Denekyn blood, they sent him of on a ship made of what they had at the time, not really knowing where it will go as they where being attacked and they where desperate, it was called... the Diastima! On liftoff, Tak saw his kin being brutally murdered... and he couldn't kill the intruders. He often uses this moment when channeling his hate. His ship was found by a Male Twi'lek Lethan Bounty Hunter by the name of Jiondaz, Before leaving to be Sith (which is what he was convinced to do) he saw Kefali Oura and talked for a bit.

Oura was a Lethan Twi'lek, she wanted to be free from her father and was secretly hiding that she was force-sensitive, so they decided to kill Jiondaz and loot everything. Just like that. Jiondaz was took by surprise and had absolutely no time to react. Tak and Oura packed their bags for where ever Sith where (which was actually Korriban). Here is to a good future.

KILLS:
N/A

BOUNTIES COLLECTED:
N/A

DUELING RING MATCHES:
N/A

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
N/A

ROLE-PLAYS:
Nothingness is Boringness- FINISHED
Staring Glaring and Caring- FLASHBACK
Fear leads to Anger- FINISHED
Black Fire- FINISHED
Through Suburbia, Through Chases- FINISHED
A Return to Abhean-FINISHED
No, no. No, no, No!-CLOSED
A Pureblood at Home, What could go wrong?- CLOSED
Sith Showdown! (Damion vs Tak)- DUEL/FINISHED
Missions
Kill Wolfgang Arcturus- ACTIVE
Lessons/Classes/Training
To Victory for Sith- CLOSED
Pyromania 101- FINISHED
Tutaminis for dummies- ACTIVE
Hunt for Power- ACTIVE
Duels
Damion
Orrin- CANCELLED
Cassus

NPCS OF INTEREST:
Kefali Oura, Tak's Twi'lek girlfriend will be explained in a flashback thread on some kind.

TAK'S HOUSE:
When Tak is not sleeping in his ship, he is home on Korriz (not to be confused with Kraysiss Two) living a good life (except for the whole revenge thing).

KEFALI OURA:
Kefali Oura is the Lethan Twi'lek Girlfriend of Tak WIP.

WHAT RPS HE COULD DO:
Well, I would like him to do fights, talks (with Jedi, persuasion and reasoning), and training.

 

[MasterTyvokka]

Alright, not too bad but there are a few issues that need to be addressed. First since you have listed him as a Sith then the faction will need to be Sith and the rank will need to be acolyte. The stuff for House of Tak you can move to the bio and elaborate on or you can also note up at the top like you did but with something different as rank and faction.

Second. And this is mainly personal preference but I think it would make it a lot neater and easier to read. You don't really need the .5 in his age. The way time works here (which is very linient as long as you account for all events)its not really needed. Also you really don't need to say he is tall after giving his height.

Also his stats (strength etc) you need to elaborate more on these. These stats give other rpers an idea of what your character is like to be around s far as combat wise. Also I these areas your character needs to show some weaknesses or flaws. Also in the strength and weaknesses section you just listed something he likes doing. This needs to be elaborated on some for the same reasons as above.

Finally and this is alo personal preference as it seems as if you have satisfied the 50 word requirement but I like to see some more in the bio. I like to know where your character came from and what he did to become who he is today.

 

[Darth Tak]

done

 

[Marf]

Ok, first of all you should go into detail about his home planet and his house. There are 120 worlds which the Sith race is native to: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Sith_Worlds My own Sith pureblood character was from Rhelg, an obscure planet to which I gave a fan-written profile. Is his family the ruling House of the planet, or of a clan?

Secondly, why would the Empire suddenly kill everyone on the planet? Especially if it was one of the Sith Pureblood worlds, as their species are considered rare and sacred. If it was an ancient Sith world, it would not have just been discovered, having been part of the Empire since the rise of Sadow.

What are the Jedi doing there? You said the planet was attacked by the Empire, then you say it was attacked by the Jedi? The Jedi suddenly attacking a planet deep within Sith space is next to impossible. Also, even if they did, it is highly unlikely that they would recruit pureblood Sith due to their natural alignment to the Dark Side.

 

[Darth Tak]

and done

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Definately the kind of character I would like to duel with Zextripon! Character looks very nice, but one question: Are his Force Powers inherited or learned? Because as far as I know Sith Acolytes shouldn't be able to know advanced abilities like Mind Trick, that power is known by masters.

 

[MasterTyvokka]

I missed it the first time but Sophia is right. Mind trick and the others you have listed there might be able to be used in limited form by a more advanced acolyte but a character can't start with those. The only ones you can start with (and must have a reason as to how your character knows thoze) are the basic telekinesis powers like push, pull, grip.

 

[Darth Tak]

Done done Donity Done.

 

[MasterTyvokka]

Now that you have numbers with your "stats" its easier to tell where your character is at with those. But your characters stats are overpowered, especially for a new character. Take my Sith Master for example. If I numbered his stats his strength would be around 5 (assuming that's average), his dexterity would be 6ish. His intelligence would be around 10 and his wisdom would be around 7. My point is that you need some weakness And usually the very intelligent aren't very strong and vise versa so I recommend deciding what you want your character to be like. Something like wisdom is gained overtime so most young acolytes would have a fairly low wisdom.

 

[Darth Tak]

And done. I AN ERROR

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

By the Force Powers, I did not mean for you to remove them. Keep them, just have the basic powers like Force Push. Everyone makes mistakes, even I do.

 

[Darth Tak]

done

 

[Darth Tak]

I added a tiny bit of info on Oura, but I shall add more later on her.

 

[Nor'baal]

And now I comment.

I like this character :D not seen many sith pure bloods for a while!

 

[Darth Tak]

Thanks, it is appreciated.

 

[Black Noise]

That history :CStern

Ok, first off, we DO have a method for canon planets to be created here. However, unless those canon planets are approved by admins, they may not be even mentioned in RP or character bios. You'll have to remove that section of your bio and all things associated with it. The entire method you have of him coming to the Sith is very, implausible, to me. Proven through IC battles this timeline, pirates and mercenaries have not once bested any Sith convoys in space or land combat. So a random Sith convoy taking a boy from an unapproved canon world with no name getting attacked my space pirates who sell the boy as a slave for a year is not going to work.

Please make changes accordingly, then I will approve you for the Sith.

 

[Darth Tak]

What is the planet creation method? also, it was a small sith ship and a large pirate one.

 

[Black Noise]

What is the planet creation method? also, it was a small sith ship and a large pirate one.

http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?487-Planet-Profiles

Sith convoys don't go in 'small ships' and never go alone. Unless the convoy is moving illegally through Imperium space, in which case a small ship would be the only way. But to say that any Sith transport convoy would only use one ship and go alone is to say that the Sith in general are idiots.

 

[Darth Tak]

How about they where all drunk?

 

[Chairdor]

How about they where all drunk?

Pretty confident on BN's response to this one

[video=youtube;RDXTJa6TrKE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RDXTJa6TrKE[/video]

Only because a Sith ship with a drunk crew if caught would be tortured killed brought back to life and tortured again