Poe Beviin

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NAME: Poe Beviin
FACTION: Independent - Clan Beviin
RANK: Aliit'alor
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 14 (born 1009 ABY)
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 5'10 inches
WEIGHT: 160 pounds
EYES: Dark blue, appears black unless you're close
HAIR: Blonde, almost silver; grown past his shoulders, often worn in a french braid
SKIN: Silk white
CREDITS: Does it matter?
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: His face is pretty bruised up right now
FORCE SENSITIVE: Probably not

STRENGTH: Raised as a Mandalorian, but not quite finished growing.
DEXTERITY: Pretty agile, especially in a fight.
CONSTITUTION: Perfectly healthy.
INTELLIGENCE: Very intelligent. He knows it, too.
WISDOM: He's still young, so he often relies on the advice of those around him. He's not without wisdom, though.
CHARISMA: A gruff diplomat.

SKILLS:
• Proficient at close ranged and hand-to-hand combat
• Critical thinking and problem solving capabilities
• Well versed in Mandalorian military strategy

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
+ Handsome
+ Natural, developed leadership abilities
+ Witty and clever
+ Difficult to anger

+/- Contains his emotions

- Prideful
- Difficulty assessing the emotions of others

GEAR:
Armor
• Wrist rocket launcher
• Repulsor pack
Taskmaster Carbine
Blaster pistol

SHIP:

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A generic barge used mostly to house Poe's companions.

PERSONALITY:
Believes he's owed respect due to his position, and he can feel slighted very easily if one doesn't offer the respect. Poe can be quite easy to converse with; that, combined with his attractiveness, proves that he can be very easy to love. When discussing important matters he can become very serious. The very definition of a gruff diplomat.

BIOGRAPHY:
Born the second son, and fifth child, of Bernez, the leader of Clan Beviin, a good deal has been expected of him. His father was the ultimate patriarch, and dutifully raised each of his children. He did not, however, raise them without preference. Poe's older brother Roparzh, born first among all his siblings, was raised to be his fathers successor. Even if it was not necessarily the Mandalorian tradition, it was Bernez's wish all the same.

The onset of civil war between the Mandalorian clans proved disastrous for Clan Beviin, as it did all clans. It was in these successive wars that Poe would fight his first battles and kill his first men. In the event of these battles, between Poe's fourth kill and his fifth, that his elder brother perished. So too did three of his four elder sisters perish.

Poe persisted where others failed, in part due to skill, in part due to luck, and should one believe in it, in part due to fate. The Mandalorians once knelt to a god, Kad Ha'rangir. Known as the destroyer god, it is who Poe attributed the fates of his siblings. He could not, however, comprehend why his ancestors worshiped such a deity.

As it was, Poe's father, mother, and two of his sisters, one elder and one younger, survived. United, along with Poe's uncle and his family, a Trandoshan family of three, and two other individuals, they escaped the Imperium's raid, and ultimate annihilation, of Mandalorian space. Huddled on a derelict barge, these few, numbering fifteen, was what remained of Clan Beviin.

Not too long after their escape, the number of survivors dropped to fourteen as a sickness spread throughout the members of the clan. Most became ill, and most recovered. Now only Bernez, who Poe and everyone else continue to look to for direction, is ill. Dangerously ill, even if he does his best to hide it.

KILLS:
N/A

BOUNTIES COLLECTED:
N/A

ROLE-PLAYS:

It's Impossible to Learn to Plow by Reading Books

Meeting of the Minds

The Road Not Taken

Opportunities
 
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You're quite right, sir.
 
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14-year olds have all the leadership abilities of a wet noodle. That's really not gonna work, man. :c
 

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Kiiiind of overpowered for a 14 year-old, y'know?
 

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14-year olds have all the leadership abilities of a wet noodle. That's really not gonna work, man. :c

Kiiiind of overpowered for a 14 year-old, y'know?

Yeah, his stats seem a little high in my opinion. I'd either age him up a bit or drop them down significantly. It has been my experience that young teenagers typically don't make the best leaders since they're typically neither charismatic nor wise and since they're not done developing mentally they are often impulsive and easy to anger.

If you want to keep him as is I'd age him up to at least 17.
 

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I know my opinion probably doesn't mean much because I'm new-ish, but he's also very heavy for a child of his age. The average weight for a 14 year old boy is around 112 lbs or so. At 180 lbs, he's even heavier than the average weight of your typical 20 year old male, which tends to be somewhere around 150-160 lbs.

Just my two cents though. :)
 

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Oh, what a sick character! Can't wait to see him in action, him and Kevin should team up for a thread as soon as possible! I see you got a Trandoshan side in the family, should prove to be interesting with my Wookiee aunt.

We can roleplay with Sandy since you're coming to the Lost - she was part of Clan Beviin so I'm sure we could spark something around that!

Anyway, glad you're back, hope we can keep your attention this time around!
 

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14-year olds have all the leadership abilities of a wet noodle. That's really not gonna work, man. :c

Concerning his age and any leadership abilities, you're speaking generally and without an understanding of the way I intend to write the character and the group dynamic. So please refrain from saying this character isn't going to work.

Look at the inspirations for this character, both from the Song of Ice and Fire universe:
• Robb Stark, King in the North and the Trident and never lost a battle. Age 14-16.
• King Daeron Targaryan, the Young Dragon, popularly known for conquering Dorne when he was 14 and 15.

Consider the Mandalorian culture and you'll see it makes perfect sense for such a young character to have assumed a leadership role. Consider his upbringing too, and presume that he has some natural leadership abilities, and it makes further sense.

Don't dismiss the character because of his age. Ageism isn't cool, Jiang.

Kiiiind of overpowered for a 14 year-old, y'know?
Yeah, his stats seem a little high in my opinion. I'd either age him up a bit or drop them down significantly. It has been my experience that young teenagers typically don't make the best leaders since they're typically neither charismatic nor wise and since they're not done developing mentally they are often impulsive and easy to anger.

If you want to keep him as is I'd age him up to at least 17.

I wasn't really concerned about the stats, and didn't put A LOT of thought into them. I don't write my characters consulting the stats on the character page. I've never been a fan of the way we use stats in our character pages anyway, although I do admit it provides a general feel for what a character is good at and what he isn't. Read the descriptions, those are what are important and what I keep in mind.

I know my opinion probably doesn't mean much because I'm new-ish, but he's also very heavy for a child of his age. The average weight for a 14 year old boy is around 112 lbs or so. At 180 lbs, he's even heavier than the average weight of your typical 20 year old male, which tends to be somewhere around 150-160 lbs.

Just my two cents though. :)

The weight thing is fair, it made sense at 3 AM but not so much now.

Oh, what a sick character! Can't wait to see him in action, him and Kevin should team up for a thread as soon as possible! I see you got a Trandoshan side in the family, should prove to be interesting with my Wookiee aunt.

We can roleplay with Sandy since you're coming to the Lost - she was part of Clan Beviin so I'm sure we could spark something around that!

Anyway, glad you're back, hope we can keep your attention this time around!

Now that I actually have the character posted.. here's hoping!
 
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Concerning his age and any leadership abilities, you're speaking generally and without an understanding of the way I intend to write the character and the group dynamic. So please refrain from saying this character isn't going to work.

Considering the sarcastic and passive aggressive reply that you had originally made to Silverface's comment, I didn't see anything other than a normal fourteen year old. And the passive aggression is there in this post as well.

Also, the examples you have given, ASOIAF characters, are not the best ones. The characters in ASOIAF are made to be way more mature than real life equivalents, that's not the case in Star Wars. And as far as those characters go, both were dead within a few years of their major accomplishments, so maybe 14 year olds in such leadership roles might not be such a good idea.
 

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Considering the sarcastic and passive aggressive reply that you had originally made to Silverface's comment, I didn't see anything other than a normal fourteen year old. And the passive aggression is there in this post as well.

Also, the examples you have given, ASOIAF characters, are not the best ones. The characters in ASOIAF are made to be way more mature than real life equivalents, that's not the case in Star Wars. And as far as those characters go, both were dead within a few years of their major accomplishments, so maybe 14 year olds in such leadership roles might not be such a good idea.

*coughs* Tween Queen Amidala was a pretty effective leader.
 

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10/10 constitution!? That's like having an immune system of a god, skin as strong as steel, and a never- ending supply of stamina. That's a little OP, especially for a 14 year old. It would be wise to tune that down a little bit.
 

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Considering the sarcastic and passive aggressive reply that you had originally made to Silverface's comment, I didn't see anything other than a normal fourteen year old. And the passive aggression is there in this post as well.

I had not intended to be passive aggressive. If I've given offense to anyone, I do offer my sincere apologies.

Also, the examples you have given, ASOIAF characters, are not the best ones. The characters in ASOIAF are made to be way more mature than real life equivalents, that's not the case in Star Wars. And as far as those characters go, both were dead within a few years of their major accomplishments, so maybe 14 year olds in such leadership roles might not be such a good idea.

As for the maturity of my character, that's really up to my discretion, right? I'm not going to write him as if he's 30, as if he's experienced, as if he's confident in everything he does and doesn't need help. I'm not going to write as if everything he does is a success, either. Again, I implore anyone with reservations about having a 14 year old assuming a leadership position to look into Mandalorian culture.

10/10 constitution!? That's like having an immune system of a god, skin as strong as steel, and a never- ending supply of stamina. That's a little OP, especially for a 14 year old. It would be wise to tune that down a little bit.

You missed where I mentioned I didn't concern myself with the numbers, much. I hadn't put much thought into them. Take the 10/10 as meaning that he's healthy. Not currently battling any illness or injury.

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Meanwhile, I would really appreciate any comments anyone has on the other aspects of Poe.
 
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If you're not going to put a lot of thought into the ability numbers than don't use them. Just use a description, that way you don't confuse people by saying he is 10/10 when he's not. At least not by most people's standards.

And as for his age you can play him as 14, but hardly any adult will take him seriously until he proves himself. And so long as you play him like a realistic 14 year old and not a teenage Gary Stu nobody will care about his age. Right now most people are worried that is what is going to happen it seems. Also Mandalorian culture and society is more of a meritocracy where what you do and what you have done is more important than who your parents were; leaders of the clans are usually the most capable and it's not typically an inherited position. If Poe is the leader then that speaks a lot about the rest of his clan since Poe is barely old enough to have passed his verd'goten and is still a couple of years shy of marrying. It's something you have to keep in mind.
 

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I'll do away with the stats, if that will make things simpler. And yes, I'm aware that's the style of things. I noted that his fathers wish was not traditional in the background section. Poe doesn't just have the position gifted to him, by the way. After his fathers death, there's a duel between Poe and his uncle for the leadership position. Poe wins of course, but because of luck more than anything else. That's an event I'll be exploring, and it's immediate aftermath, in a two part introductory solo thread.
 

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I had not intended to be passive aggressive. If I've given offense to anyone, I do offer my sincere apologies.

No worries. :)

As for the age, if you you want him as a 14 year old then that is alright, it's just that you'll have to convince people IC that he is competent despite being so young. But I guess that challenge could be something that spurs him on. As for the stats, as long as you're not exploiting them they mean jackshit, so even if you let them stay it's no difference. If you're happy with your character and the story you're aiming to build with him then go for it, you're the one writing with him and above everything else you should be happy with it. Best of luck and enjoy! :)
 

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10/10 constitution!? That's like having an immune system of a god, skin as strong as steel, and a never- ending supply of stamina. That's a little OP, especially for a 14 year old. It would be wise to tune that down a little bit.

Where does he state that he doesn't get sick? I don't know if he edited his stats to a literal description instead of numerical stats but having 10/10 constitution can mean that he is highly healthy. It doesn't mean that he can't get sick.

I like the biography. I can't wait to see what you do with the character.
 

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Happy to announce that Poe finally has a theme song! I don't know guys, it just felt right.

Also, I added his first thread to the role-play section, if anyone cares to read it.
 

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14-year olds have all the leadership abilities of a wet noodle. That's really not gonna work, man. :c

Maybe he's justin beiber of the mandalorians?

As for the actual profile:

Eyes could just be described as Near-Black Dark Blue? Hair being "close to silver" makes it sound cliched. Maybe just say Platinium Blonde? Credits, you'd have 1,000. And some would argue it does matter. Bruises aren't really long-lasting, distinguishing marks - so i'm not sure how you want to handle that.

I had a short giggle at 'leader of men'.

Your profile ends with Poe being dangerously ill; so is he perfectly healthy or dangerously ill..?
 
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Eyes could just be described as Near-Black Dark Blue?
I suppose they could be described that way, but nah.

As it is now, with the "appears black unless you're close," writers get a bit more to work with.

Hair being "close to silver" makes it sound cliched.
Does it? I don't think so.

Maybe just say Platinium Blonde?
Why not just say "blonde, almost silver," like it does now?

Credits, you'd have 1,000. And some would argue it does matter.
I know how many you're allowed to start with.

And I wouldn't.

Bruises aren't really long-lasting, distinguishing marks - so i'm not sure how you want to handle that.
At the moment, he's bruised up. That's important visual information for writers to have, so I included it.

I had a short giggle at 'leader of men'.
Thank you?

Your profile ends with Poe being dangerously ill; so is he perfectly healthy or dangerously ill..?
You read the end wrong, Poe isn't dangerously ill, his father is.
 
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