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"Gone, cast away in time. Evil yours, now evil mine"
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Name: November Frost
Faction: Sith
Rank: Acolyte
Species: Human
Age: 14
Gender: Male
Height: 5'2"
Weight: 120 Lbs
Eye color: Bright blue, almost Cyan
Hair: Medium length, light grey color
Skin: fair coloring/nearly pale
Credits: 1000
Force Sensitive: Yes

Strength: Frost's strength can be described as average for his age, but below average to other acolytes. scale- 2/10
Dexterity: Due to his small frame and size, Frost is faster and more nimble than those his age, but compared to the other acolytes, he is probably slower. scale- 4/10
Constitution: Frost is quite healthy for a boy his age. However, he doesn't eat as much as he should, which reduces the rate his muscles grow. He cannot seem to eat more than a small amount at a time without getting sick to his stomach. scale- 5/10
Intelligence: When his parents died he was forced to learn the way the world worked on his own. He is bright and adapts quickly to many situations. He is just a kid though and will make more mistakes than his older companions. scale- 7/10
Wisdom: Frost's wisdom is that of one with more experience than others of his age. He has great understanding of the world around him. scale 7/10
Charisma: While Frost's facial expression may come off as creepy, to others it seems cute. His attitude is generally friendly to others, but one wrong can make him hold a grudge. He isn't very charismatic when he hates your guts. 6/10 or 3/10 if he doesn't like you.

Force Powers: I will add force powers here as he learns him.

Skills:
+Swordplay: Frost is somewhat familiar with basic swordplay up to the point of not looking like a fool flopping a blade around.
+Not a terrible shot: Frost knows how to use a blaster and even though he doesn't use it well, he doesn't miss the majority of his shots.
+Basic Piloting: Frost knows how to perform basic maneuvers when piloting ships. He only knows how to fly freighters or other similar craft. He relies on his ship's A.I. to provide more expert maneuvers.
+ Great sketcher: Frost can draw almost anything he can see, but he has to see it.
+Droid Constructor: Frost knows how to assemble various droids. Many of which provide company, but others assist him in star travel and other duties.

Lightsaber/sword forms: Frost knows only the basic usage of a sword or lightsaber and has yet to learn any at the moment.

Strengths/Weaknesses: Frost is small, meaning he is a smaller target to hit than others. His body build is speed oriented than strength, allowing him dodge easier than normal assailants at the cost of hard hits. Due to his childlike nature though, he is underdeveloped compared to other acolytes. His lack of combat experience and training also go hand in hand with this. He his brightness and intelligent to make up for his weaker stature.

(will add more weaknesses and strengths after a few rps. cant think of them at the moment.
Gear:
+ Black Robes- a simple set of black robes
+Tool Set- One of his prized possessions. Just a normal tool set for repairing and constructing various components to his ship or droids.
+Inherited Lightsaber- A family heirloom that once belonged to an Imperial Knight long ago. Its crystal is a synthetic one that makes a white blade when activated.
+Short Sword- a simple, single bladed cortosis-weaved sword.

Ship: A reproduction of a YT-2400 freighter. It can hold up to ten passengers and is armed with two dual laser turrets on the top and bottom. It is equipped with shielding and armor plating for defense. Its hyperdrive is a Class 2 with a class 12 back up should the former stop operating.
Droids:
+Ship Assistance Program or "Sap": a ship A.I. designed and installed by Frost's father when he had his hand in smuggling. It is able to pilot, co-pilot, or both the ship if the minimum requirement of a pilot and co-pilot is not met. (will send tech application later. Until then I'll refer to it as "auto pilot" in the rp)
+Ship Repair Droids (x2)- Simple repair droids built by Frost by the remains of old astromech droids to repair the ship and maintain it.
+ "Reaper": Frost's current project. Mainly a sparring droid to practice on, but doubles as a guardian droid. Currently around 30% finished.

Personality: Frost is mature for his age, though not by choice. He wishes to have his childhood, but he knows it is impossible. In his eyes, no family would take him anyhow especially after the things he had done to survive on his own. Maturity aside, He learned that even with his pent up rage, it is best to make allies rather than enemies. He hides his true grudges and emotions with a seemingly positive facial expression. When Frost becomes serious this mask melts away leaving a frown in its place. To be frowned upon by Frost is similar to having received a death mark from another. To him it's one and the same.

Biography: Frost, up till the age of ten, lived with his father in Coronet City, Corellia. Life was somewhat comfortable with his father retiring from his long over smuggling/droid repairing career. The wealth his father had generated had allowed them to live in semi-luxury. Their apartment was small but they didn't mind. The small family enjoyed each other's closeness to one another.

His father had gotten an unwanted reputation during his run as a smuggler, and the hutts wanted him dead. Apparently he had failed to repay a substantially large loan years ago. One day after his schooling, November Frost arrived home to find the dead body of his parent and a hole dead center in his forehead. November locked himself in the apartment for days, not touching the dead bodies of his parents but sitting there, watching them. Eventually the smell was too much for the neighbors and authorities were called. His father had left November a thousand credits, his ship, and his antique lightsaber, a prize his great-great-grandfather had won from a weapons collector in a game of Sabacc. Before authorities could send him to an orphanage, November left, taking the ship and leaving the system with the assistance of the ship's A.I. . He traveled from system to system, trying to get adopted, but no one wanted him. They all thought it was a trap of some sort. His ship's supply would have ran out, but he had made the choice to find work.

He started by making milk runs for smugglers, taking packages from one person to another. He was following in his father's footsteps, using what skills his father had taught him, especially about droids. Ever since he was seven November had interest in droids, and often watched or help his father work on them. He eventually began smuggling himself while repairing ships and droids when he couldn't find work. He associated himself with a group of criminals for increased security, but involvement didn't last more than a year as a rebel engagement left many of the group dead. His survival was miraculous even for the rebels failed to notice him. Research on what happened revealed that he had uncovered his force abilities. He was a force adept. He journeyed to Coruscant to join the Sith. He was signed on as an Acolyte and awaits his training.....

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Everything I am about to say might be nit-picking and is entirely my opinion.

-A thirteen year old child, that doesn't have good muscle development because he doesn't eat right, and is more speed oriented than strength oriented, is stronger than a soldier? Does not make much sense.

- You mentioned he lived on a devastated Coruscant, but Coruscant was more than devastated. It's utterly devastated with a capital D. A force storm terrorizes the entire planet. Sithspawn roam the desolate streets. The few beings that live there are most likely sith who are training and stuff. A family probably couldn't live in semi-luxury.

- Might need tech write-ups for Sap and Reaper.

- I find it difficult to believe a thirteen year old child can build entire droids.

- While making a child is interesting, allowed, awesome, and cool. I feel a child's wealness can not be that simply they are a child. The way this character is written, this character has above average strength and dexterity, intelligence greater than many adults, wisdom greater than most his age, and solid charisma to boot. Where are the weaknesses. If you want to play an adult, do it. If you want to play a child, do it. I feel you can't have a child with the skills and abilities of an adult.

Thats it. I'm done. Looks like a well-thought out character. Frost and Kaata (The Warrior) might of some interesting and humorous interactions.
 

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lol I knew I was stretching it when I set the age. I'll be working on these modifications.
 

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Everything I am about to say might be nit-picking and is entirely my opinion.

-A thirteen year old child, that doesn't have good muscle development because he doesn't eat right, and is more speed oriented than strength oriented, is stronger than a soldier? Does not make much sense.

- You mentioned he lived on a devastated Coruscant, but Coruscant was more than devastated. It's utterly devastated with a capital D. A force storm terrorizes the entire planet. Sithspawn roam the desolate streets. The few beings that live there are most likely sith who are training and stuff. A family probably couldn't live in semi-luxury.

- Might need tech write-ups for Sap and Reaper.

- I find it difficult to believe a thirteen year old child can build entire droids.

- While making a child is interesting, allowed, awesome, and cool. I feel a child's wealness can not be that simply they are a child. The way this character is written, this character has above average strength and dexterity, intelligence greater than many adults, wisdom greater than most his age, and solid charisma to boot. Where are the weaknesses. If you want to play an adult, do it. If you want to play a child, do it. I feel you can't have a child with the skills and abilities of an adult.

Thats it. I'm done. Looks like a well-thought out character. Frost and Kaata (The Warrior) might of some interesting and humorous interactions.

Steel did a nice job here but I have a differing opinion slightly

at thirteen steel is right he isn't going to be that strong or honestly even that fast. He wont be playing with the big boys on par yet give him space to grow. Playing a more realistic kid is more fun in my opinion anyway and if I ever make one I will be making him weaker.

Now Coruscant. There is a possibility he could have lived there as there is a habitable zone. It is by no means even half of a life though. Its full of crime and not a single real building that isn't messed up. Life on Coruscant is a living hell. No authority's to call like you mentioned. Nothing that civil or organized.

Anakin built c3po steel! Though some expanding on why and how he got good at this could be helpful

il start with that. Some edits could be used but if you don't want to trust either of us that's understandable really a sith FL will look at him before approved into the faction.
 

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Most of my thoughts have already been mentioned. I don't know about SAP needed a tech write-up, but I know that Reaper will.

a 13 year old being well versed in droid building is pretty solid. I think we just need more details on what his life was like to really explain how he got so good though.

I do agree with Steel's final thought. There are a lot of strengths here, and not really any weaknesses going on.

I'm interested to learn more about the lightsaber and how his family acquired it.

Frost and Viole would probably get along fairly well. Frost having his parents killed, and V also having his parents killed (but then being raised in slavery). Yep. They'd mesh well, haha.
 

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He's definitely an interesting charrie...also liking the picture.

Also, Corellia is a suitable replacement for Coruscant in this charrie's bio. It'd make sense for his family to live there in a small middle class apartment. It's big, it's urban, and most importantly, it's not friggin ground zero XD.

As for the whole lack of weaknesses thing that's been mentioned, don't worry about it too much. As you RP your character you'll get a better idea of what you really want him to be like instead of what you put on his profile, including fleshing out his weaknesses and strengths. Honestly, the fact that he's currently untrained with either the Force or in a lightsaber form makes him pretty weak compared to other Acolytes that are in the Order, at least for the moment. Just make sure that even after you get past his initial stage of training that he doesn't become godlike or anything in his personality and physical strengths...give him room to grow. It sucks RPing a stagnant character...tried that a time or two before on different sites and I ended up just offing them somehow. Because I'm a heartless bastard like that.

Also...I'm officially making November my Sith Dawn's little bro XD. I hope I'll get an RP or two in with you at some point ^^.
 

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He makes a good point actually about lack of refinement with saber training and lack of Force abilities. Good call with that, Kaane. And like he said. You will learn, ooooh you will learn >)
 

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I modified my constitution, wisdom, etc. I added numbers to help scale his skill in each of those areas. I modified the history a bit, explaining how he got his inherited lightsaber and what not.

oh my gawd, Dawn is similar to November XD. we totes need to thread lol.

also question: is this site liquid time or is it one thread at a time?
 

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You can hit up as many as you want at a time just make an order in your head in what order your character is doing them.
 

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another question: I can make threads, but I cannot request training until the faction leader approves my profile?
 

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Correct. You can RP your heart out, but until the FL accepts your submission you can't RP as a Sith.
 

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drat, gotcha. oh by the way, did the changes seem more acceptable?
 

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sweetness.. also, I just met hk-47 on my third playthrough and thought about making reaper an HK styled droid lol.
 

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Actually. I just noticed that there's still a lack of mention of droids in the history. Could probably stand to make note of why he worked on them, y'know? What got him into droids, etc etc. I would assume it started at sometime before he was 10. But that's just my two cents. Other than that, it all seems in order haha. But I'm by no means a professional at this. Haven't looked over many profiles here.
 

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He could have learned how to make droids from his smuggler dad perhaps, seeking to bond with him and teach him something useful/cool. And then he could refine the art after he found them dead as he worked with other smugglers. No biggie ^^.
 

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He could have learned how to make droids from his smuggler dad perhaps, seeking to bond with him and teach him something useful/cool. And then he could refine the art after he found them dead as he worked with other smugglers. No biggie ^^.

Indeed! That's totally valid. Lol. Nice, short, and sweet. =D
 

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actually i thought I added that in there.... lol

*coughmeatbagcough*
 

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Oh yeah you did... I feel dumb for not noticing it XD. *shuffles away stupidly*
 

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Uhm...*cough*...This was a test! Yes!!! A test. And you passed! Yay!

... >.> Lol.
 

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Reaper: "Request: Oh master, it would seem these fleshbag's mental cores are defective. Please allow me to... replace them for you Master."

XD I love hk-47
 
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