Ji'Kel Vizsla

[René]

Hi @Kyle; Rogue Mandalorian

Mandalorian Dominion Faction Leader here. Your profile is looking a bit better, but there are still a few things that arent clicking in my mind.

First off is his species. A Mandalorian born Chiss? This in itself deserves a bit of explanation, as the Chiss homeworld Csilla is entirely on the other side of the galaxy, and Chiss are a bit of isolationists.

Second is, i dont necessarily see why he would be running from the Republic and not the Jedi, seeing as the Republic/Jedi relationship this Timeline isnt as close as it is in the Prequel era. Also stealing a Cruiser is a bit of a stretch, as cruisers are capital ships.

Also as far as force use goes, there are no grey Jedi. Its pretty much either the light side or the dark side, as once you start drawing on the darkside, corruption and fall come soon after.

Also i would honestly like to see one of the lightsabers removed.

1: I don't want to be human, and Chiss is my favorite species. I have no explanation for this other than that.

2. I meant Jedi. I keep thinking about the Times of the Sith Empire

3. If the extra blade bothers you, I'll remove it.

 

[Diva]

1. Other species can be Mando's but they are adopted on a per individual/family basis. As he is at least 2nd generation, his family history with that would be helpful with that. Maybe expand on the necklace heirloom thing.

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4. please remove the second blade. Jedi masters would not train to use different lightsabers for different situations, let alone adolescents. It would basically make you way les capable with both. You build the saber that suits you, and the better you get, the more adaptable you become. Same with anything. If you MUST have any lightsaber, pick the one that suits his temperament and style.


And another thing....LOL I appreciate the enthusiasm, but you cannot train 20 hours a day 7 days a week. You would die, that is preposterous. You don't need to specify the duration and time in which he trains. He was in excellent shape and started training in Mandalorian battle tactics as soon as they let him, end of story, that is one detail you don't have to exagerate ....elaborate much on. He's got 3.5 to four years of training.

 

[Elijah Brockway]

This thread makes me happy, because we both have a new person who is showing a wonderful level of willingness to edit things and work with the FLs/AFLs talking to him...

And it seems that my nitpicky and highly detailed style of profile approval is becoming the norm, too.

*sheds a single tear of joy*

 

[René]

1. Other species can be Mando's but they are adopted on a per individual/family basis. As he is at least 2nd generation, his family history with that would be helpful with that. Maybe expand on the necklace heirloom thing.
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4. please remove the second blade. Jedi masters would not train to use different lightsabers for different situations, let alone adolescents. It would basically make you way les capable with both. You build the saber that suits you, and the better you get, the more adaptable you become. Same with anything. If you MUST have any lightsaber, pick the one that suits his temperament and style.


And another thing....LOL I appreciate the enthusiasm, but you cannot train 20 hours a day 7 days a week. You would die, that is preposterous. You don't need to specify the duration and time in which he trains. He was in excellent shape and started training in Mandalorian battle tactics as soon as they let him, end of story, that is one detail you don't have to exagerate ....elaborate much on. He's got 3.5 to four years of training.

Removed second blade, but edited the double-bladed Saber to have detachable hilts. Expanded a bit into the family backstory and amulet. Also (LOL) changed the 20 hours thing to "constantly". I hope this is good.

 

[Diva]

ALRIGHTY ROO!

So. Thank you for your edits. In the interest of serving my evil gods, I will tell you that there are still some opinions and concerns we have about this character, but you have successfully brought the basics up to faction standards. So you are....

Wait...one more thing.

Before I officially approve you, please post in the USERNAME CHANGE REQUEST forum, and ask them to turn the semicolon in you title "Kyle; Rogue Mandalorian" to the grammatically correct colon, so it reads "Kyle: Rogue Mandalorian", or I will sadly be unable to stop from screaming out loud every time I read your posts. Once that is done, you are approved.

 

[René]

ALRIGHTY ROO!

So. Thank you for your edits. In the interest of serving my evil gods, I will tell you that there are still some opinions and concerns we have about this character, but you have successfully brought the basics up to faction standards. So you are....

Wait...one more thing.

Before I officially approve you, please post in the USERNAME CHANGE REQUEST forum, and ask them to turn the semicolon in you title "Kyle; Rogue Mandalorian" to the grammatically correct colon, so it reads "Kyle: Rogue Mandalorian", or I will sadly be unable to stop from screaming out loud every time I read your posts. Once that is done, you are approved.

I sent the request, hopefully my name will be changed soon. Semicolon is right next to colon on my keyboard (mobile) and I didn't notice that aggravating detail until later (lol)

 

[Wit]

Was the whole bit about slaying two more Jedi while be escaped always there? I was okay with him catching his master by surprise and killing him and becuase the master seemed rather incompetent if the got the Padawan killed the way he did. But killing two more Jedi needs more explanation, specially from a barely trained Padawan.

 

[René]

Was the whole bit about slaying two more Jedi while be escaped always there? I was okay with him catching his master by surprise and killing him and becuase the master seemed rather incompetent if the got the Padawan killed the way he did. But killing two more Jedi needs more explanation, specially from a barely trained Padawan.

That wasn't in the original version, but its been there for a while. He's supposed to catch them by surprise.

 

[Wit]

That wasn't in the original version, but its been there for a while. He's supposed to catch them by surprise.

That is something that needs approval and sneaking in things like is that frowned upon if not outright breaking the rules. The simple reason is people try to add things that would not otherwise be allowed, like his. Letting him get away with sneaking up a kill on a Jedi Masyer was something and all that I originally ally agreed to. I was cool with that because you were very receptive to the feedback you were provided by everyone and I didn't want you to loose out on all aspects of the character you had designed. Most importantly using it gave your character the flavor you wanted him to have. He had a reason to hate the Jedi and be persecuted by them.

But sneaking in two more Jedi kills and then posting that bounty makes me think that you're more interested in having the kills as a status symbol for your character and to make them appear more badass. So I am going to have to ask you to remove the two new kills and change the Jedi Master who trained and was killed by your character to a simple Jedi Knight.

 

[René]

That is something that needs approval and sneaking in things like is that frowned upon if not outright breaking the rules. The simple reason is people try to add things that would not otherwise be allowed, like his. Letting him get away with sneaking up a kill on a Jedi Masyer was something and all that I originally ally agreed to. I was cool with that because you were very receptive to the feedback you were provided by everyone and I didn't want you to loose out on all aspects of the character you had designed. Most importantly using it gave your character the flavor you wanted him to have. He had a reason to hate the Jedi and be persecuted by them.

But sneaking in two more Jedi kills and then posting that bounty makes me think that you're more interested in having the kills as a status symbol for your character and to make them appear more badass. So I am going to have to ask you to remove the two new kills and change the Jedi Master who trained and was killed by your character to a simple Jedi Knight.

They weren't exactly "sneaked in", they've been there since the 3rd or 4th edit of my character. Nobody ever said anything against it, so I assumed that it was OK with you guys. I added that to aid the impression that he was very angry, on the edge of the Dark Side; not to look badass. Also, the reason I posted the bounty is, as I mention, because:
1. I found out that the Bounty Board exists
2. I wanted to finally to an RP dealing with the repercussions of Ji'Kel's past.

This isn't an insult against you or any of the FLs/AFLs, but I hate making characters here. I design a character, and by the time I've made all of the edits that you guys want, the character is much different than I envisioned. This happened a bit with Ji'Kel, heavily with Jalen Kron, and is begging to frustrate me with Kaelis Mar'Kov. Please try to see things from my perspective. I just want to have fun with the characters I create.

 

[Outlander]

They weren't exactly "sneaked in", they've been there since the 3rd or 4th edit of my character. Nobody ever said anything against it, so I assumed that it was OK with you guys. I added that to aid the impression that he was very angry, on the edge of the Dark Side; not to look badass. Also, the reason I posted the bounty is, as I mention, because:
1. I found out that the Bounty Board exists
2. I wanted to finally to an RP dealing with the repercussions of Ji'Kel's past.

This isn't an insult against you or any of the FLs/AFLs, but I hate making characters here. I design a character, and by the time I've made all of the edits that you guys want, the character is much different than I envisioned. This happened a bit with Ji'Kel, heavily with Jalen Kron, and is begging to frustrate me with Kaelis Mar'Kov. Please try to see things from my perspective. I just want to have fun with the characters I create.

No offense intended, but you really should just listen to @Wit and change it. He was being pretty generous letting you get away with the master kill and you, knowing that Jedi backgrounds had to be approved, added more Jedi kills. Regardless of your intent in doing so, that does not look favorably on you.

Everyone here just wants to make characters and have a good time; the faction leaders doubly so. But you have to understand they need to manage everything relating to their factions, including this. And if you're having multiple issues with characters needing to be edited to comply with faction leadership, that's on you, not them.

 

[Logan]

They weren't exactly "sneaked in", they've been there since the 3rd or 4th edit of my character. Nobody ever said anything against it, so I assumed that it was OK with you guys. I added that to aid the impression that he was very angry, on the edge of the Dark Side; not to look badass. Also, the reason I posted the bounty is, as I mention, because:
1. I found out that the Bounty Board exists
2. I wanted to finally to an RP dealing with the repercussions of Ji'Kel's past.

This isn't an insult against you or any of the FLs/AFLs, but I hate making characters here. I design a character, and by the time I've made all of the edits that you guys want, the character is much different than I envisioned. This happened a bit with Ji'Kel, heavily with Jalen Kron, and is begging to frustrate me with Kaelis Mar'Kov. Please try to see things from my perspective. I just want to have fun with the characters I create.

Everybody wants to have fun with the characters they create. That's the whole point. But the site has rules and regulations regarding characters and they're things that can't be ignored and have to be followed. If you continually have problems with the creation of characters and people telling you things you need to change, perhaps you should take a step back and realize what you're trying to create might not fit in here and to change your ideas accordingly. Getting a more realistic grasp on what flies here and what doesn't will help you from having these problems from the onset.

Adding in kills to a biography that includes Jedi/Jedi Masters isn't something that's ok. That's something that would have needed approval in the first place, so why wouldn't you think it'd need approved even if it was edited in after the creation of the character? That's more of a failing on your part than any of ours. We can't watch all character profiles at all times. Just because it goes without being mentioned for awhile doesn't mean it's set in stone. It can always be requested to be changed.

I understand that it's frustrating but you should also see where Jedi leadership is coming from. We don't allow anyone else to have masters killed in their backgrounds, why would this be any different for you? I think you need to temper what you think a character on SWRP is actually capable of and how they are created, and I don't think you would have so many problems in the first place.

Something to ponder, anyway.

 

[Wit]

@Kyle: The Rogue you still haven't made the changes I requested and are activity using this character in a rp. Are you planning to make the changes or not?

@Zenya tagging you as the profile mod

 

[René]

@Kyle: The Rogue you still haven't made the changes I requested and are activity using this character in a rp. Are you planning to make the changes or not?

@Zenya tagging you as the profile mod

Yes, I'm going to make the changes, I just haven't had the chance yet.

 

[Valen Pelora]

The changes @Wit (former FL) requested have still not been made, despite adequate time to do so.

I am tagging at @Zenya regarding this issue.

 

[Zenya]

Hey @Kyle: The Rogue
I noticed you seem to be roleplaying with this character despite the changes we have asked you to make.
If you do not make the necessary changes, or acknowledge our requests, I am going to archive this character.

 

[René]

Hey @Kyle: The Rogue
I noticed you seem to be roleplaying with this character despite the changes we have asked you to make.
If you do not make the necessary changes, or acknowledge our requests, I am going to archive this character.

I made the change. Happy yet?

 

[Logan]

I made the change. Happy yet?

Not to speak for Zenya, but I'd drop the attitude man. Unnecessary.

 

[René]

Not to speak for Zenya, but I'd drop the attitude man. Unnecessary.

Sorry, I'm just still confused as to why this is changing now after all this time. Those edits were there when this character was first approved back in February, and nobody made any objections about it before the approval.

 

[Valen Pelora]

Sorry, I'm just still confused as to why this is changing now after all this time. Those edits were there when this character was first approved back in February, and nobody made any objections about it before the approval.

As @Wit mentioned multiple times, changes to the backstory were made after approval. The additions were not permissible. Changes were requested and not made for an extended period of time. That was the issue.