Ji'Kel Vizsla

[René]

NAME: Ji'Kel Vizsla
ALIAS/CODENAME: Azazel
FACTION: Mandalorian Dominion
RANK: SuperCommando
SPECIES: Chiss
ALIGNMENT: Chaotic Good
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Force Sensitive: Yes; never finished training as a Jedi. However, self-training throughout the years has brought him to the level of a powerful Jedi Knight.

Appearance: Blue skin, red eyes, ear-length black hair. 5' 11", 156 pounds, slightly muscular build. Obvious scar running from left ear to chin and prosthetic right arm from just above the elbow down. He wears blue Mandalorian armour with gold highlights, and a black cape and robes (as seen below).

Attributes: Ji'Kel is skilled with a pair of blaster pistols or a rifle and masterful with a lightsaber. He is fast and strong, but shorter than most physically stronger enemies. His prosthetic right arm will shut down if it is in the range of an EMP pulse. Ji'Kel is also reckless, often doing not-so-legal things that land him either in prison or with a bounty. He also greatly underestimates droids; this can lead to his defeat quite quickly. His immense passion and belief that he's right can cause him to make sometimes serious mistakes. His pull towards the Dark Side can lead him to be overly aggressive at times; however training with a Jedi Knight has helped him to control this (for the most part).

Personality: Ji'Kel always believes that the ends justify the means. He is willing to sacrifice one person for the good of many in a moments notice. He is reckless but passionate about what he does, and has no regard for laws unless they are Mandalorian laws. His former hate for the Jedi Order had led to most of his motivation to take merc jobs that hit Republic/Jedi targets. However, after a series of misfortunes and Dark Side temptations, Ji'Kel abandoned his hate and focused it on the evil found in the galaxy. Ji'Kel craves two things above all else; to get enough power to destroy evil in the galaxy, wherever it is found, and to be fully accepted by the Mandolorians, his birth culture.

~Theme Song~​

Biography: Ji'Kel was discovered at age 4 on Mandolore, and was raised from then on at the Jedi temple after being discovered to have massive amounts of potential. He eventually fell in love with fellow Dathomiri padawan Elia Yon. When his master discovered the two were in love, he decided he had to get Ji'Kel focused again, as he was greatly opposed to relationships (similar to later Jedi). During an aid mission to a planet in civil war, his master accidentally had Elia posted in the route of an ambush. He told Ji'Kel after convincing himself it was the will of the Force that she was killed in the ambush. An enraged Ji'Kel hated his master for saying that about his only friend and love, and killed him while he was off guard by sneaking behind him and stabbing him through the chest. He ran from Jedi forces for 2 days before he stole a small ship and flew to his home of Mandolore. After a lot of asking around, Ji'Kel tracked down his parents. His father almost shot him at first, but he showed them the Mandolorian-iron forged clan Vizsla crest necklace he had worn since his birth. Ji'Kel's father had received the amulet from his adopted Clan Vizsla father, and later married another Chiss and had Ji'Kel, whom he passed it on to. They took him in, and he pledged his allegiance to Mandolore and began training as a Mandolorian warrior and immersing himself in the Mando culture. It was a tough transition for him; the constant peace filled Jedi temple to a culture focused on warriorship and conquering. He has also dealt with ridicule for being an ex-Jedi; this eventually led to some other teens overpowering him and crushing his sword arm in a factory (hence the prosthetic arm he has today). He has gained more respect over the years, training constantly to hone his skills past the level of others his age. He trains himself in blaster combat, martial arts, and lightsaber combat (though not in the public eye). While a few doubt his loyalty and many ridicule him for his past, few don't appreciate his dedication or strength. While he is not a Dark Side user, he does not shy away from using it on occasion; however, each time he uses it he becomes tempted more and more to give into it. When he was around 19, he had a short lived affair with another Mandalorian named Lia Fett; she became pregnant with his child just before they broke up, eventually giving birth and naming the baby boy Tir'Kal Fett. Although Lia was unaware of Ji'Kel's knowledge of this, he was secretly aware but decided to stay out of Lia's life to prevent her from coming under scrutiny from the public.

This led to him attempting to summon Jedi to Tatooine in order to satisfy his Dark vendetta of murdering more Jedi. However, a fight with a local bounty-hunter gang left him without a right arm, leg, and severely burned along his side and face. After a month recovering in a bacta tank and hospital, and a vision of him giving into the Dark Side and murdering his love intrest and her adopted daughter, Ji'Kel sought help from the Jedi Knight known as Emerald. She guided him in ways to control his Dark Side temptations and tendencies, and to let go of his Jedi hatred (although he and the Jedi Order aren't on good terms, he still murdered his master). After this experiece, Ji'Kel returned to his private apartment on Mandalore, and went into a self-induced, coma-like trance where he meditated on his life and his new direction. He emerged 6 months later, with a new purpose; to hunt down and destroy evil in all its forms, wherever it is hiding. The past 4 years, the Chiss has been traveling the galaxy embracing the Grey Jedi code while killing some Sith, bounty hunters, slavers, crime leaders, and the like. During this time, Ji'Kel began using the codename "Azazel" to preserve his real identity; he began to use it so much that many people believe that it is his real name.

Skills: Marksman, pilot, master of Form V, Djem So, lightsaber combst, and proficient with Form IV, Ataru. Telekinesis via the Force, energy manipulation (Force Blasts/Waves), force body, proficient with self-healing and animal bonds.

Gear: 4 DP-09 Dual Phase Pistols with 4 extra ammo packs, a CCT Mandolorian jetpack and armor set, 4 MZ-99 "Smackdown" grenades, 3 thermal detonators, 2 (throwable) vibroknives and 1 vibroblade. Also occasionally carries a Nova-70 blaster rifle. Ji'Kel also has a double bladed yellow lightsaber with detachable hilts.

RolePlays:
The Hunted Becomes the Hunter (Completed)
Mandalore Indomitus (Completed)
Sand, Rancors, and Smugglers (Completed)
Witch Hunt (Completed)
A Mandalorian Walks Into a Bar... (Completed)
Revenge of the Red Suns (Completed)
Repeating History (Ongoing)
The Droids We're Looking For (Ongoing)

Relationships:
Elia Yon (NPC): Ji'Kel had a deep relationship with the Dathomiri padawan Elia Yon. He dated her for 6 years before she was killed in an ambush. His plans to propose to Elia died with her, and her death caused Ji'Kel to lash out at the Jedi Order.

Lia Fett (NPC): A Mandalorian detective who had a short-lived affair with Ji'Kel when he was 19. Although the general public doesn't know it, she is the mother of his child, Tir'Kal Fett.

Tir'Kal Fett: The child of Lia Fett and Ji'Kel. He is currently 10 years old, and although he knows who his father is, his mother forbids him to tell anyone, including Ji'Kel.

Ships: A Hawk Interceptor named Hell's Bane.

Combat:
VS. Ano (Revenge of the Red Suns) - Victorious

 

[Elijah Brockway]

Aside from the fact that you'll need to get approval for the Jedi backstory (tagging @Wit for that, don't know who his AFLs are yet), the issue about the two padawans being in love wouldn't really be a problem at this point in the order's history. Your character likely would've been fine (unless his master was just a terrible person, which is possible, so).

Other than that bit, I'll leave it up to the Jedi FL to determine this, but I find it very hard to imagine that a 19 year old ex-Jedi Padawan would be highly skilled in three different lightsaber forms with a special technique/Form VI variation tacked on top of them. Also, 5'11" and 120 lbs is a very slight build. For the vast majority of people, that would be considered somewhat underweight, so you might think about changing that. My last minor critique is that "dabbling" in the dark side isn't really going to be treated as a thing without your character showing effects from it; I recommend reading the guides to Force use on the site as well as one about how Dark Side Corruption works over time. (This is also less of a critique and more of a "just don't ignore that stuff mang" thing, considering there's no way to tell yet if your character is or isn't showing effects, so, meh, I feel like calling it 'advice' comes across as mildly arrogant).

But yeah, those are just my thoughts. Not my faction anymore so I can't tell you how to do it, but the really main thing in terms of just realism in terms of character experience would be an ex-Padawan being "highly skilled" in three/four (three-and-a-half?) lightsaber forms. Most Jedi don't get to be "highly skilled" in more than one or two over the course of their lives, from what we've seen in Legends canon and current canon as well; I'd recommend altering that.

 

[Wit]

Aside from the fact that you'll need to get approval for the Jedi backstory (tagging @Wit for that, don't know who his AFLs are yet), the issue about the two padawans being in love wouldn't really be a problem at this point in the order's history. Your character likely would've been fine (unless his master was just a terrible person, which is possible, so).

Other than that bit, I'll leave it up to the Jedi FL to determine this, but I find it very hard to imagine that a 19 year old ex-Jedi Padawan would be highly skilled in three different lightsaber forms with a special technique/Form VI variation tacked on top of them. Also, 5'11" and 120 lbs is a very slight build. For the vast majority of people, that would be considered somewhat underweight, so you might think about changing that. My last minor critique is that "dabbling" in the dark side isn't really going to be treated as a thing without your character showing effects from it; I recommend reading the guides to Force use on the site as well as one about how Dark Side Corruption works over time. (This is also less of a critique and more of a "just don't ignore that stuff mang" thing, considering there's no way to tell yet if your character is or isn't showing effects, so, meh, I feel like calling it 'advice' comes across as mildly arrogant).

But yeah, those are just my thoughts. Not my faction anymore so I can't tell you how to do it, but the really main thing in terms of just realism in terms of character experience would be an ex-Padawan being "highly skilled" in three/four (three-and-a-half?) lightsaber forms. Most Jedi don't get to be "highly skilled" in more than one or two over the course of their lives, from what we've seen in Legends canon and current canon as well; I'd recommend altering that.

Agree with this on both the affair and the lightsaber skills.

 

[Diva]

Hallo.

So I will be reviewing your profile for the Mandalorian Dominion.

First thing is first, welcome to the site, and thank you for applying.

Second, you gotta listen to @Wit & @Elijah Brockway first.

Third, I am the....blunt AFL of the Dominion, but if we stick together I'll love you more for your patience.

If you have a past in a previous faction, you will also require their approval, as stated. If you want your character to have a Jedi past you must pass their litmus test. The best way to do this is to read their faction material, and really build a character respectful of not only their rules, but the sites rules for force usage. Apply to them first with the same enthusiasm you intend to apply to us. Once you have their approval, then I will begin my formal review for Mando stuff.

Until then, I offer you an opinion, a tip, and one single big fat no.

My opinion, and it is strictly that, is that being a Jedi/Mandalorian is a bit much, particularly for a new writer. You are crossing a lot of logical boundaries by doing this, and currently with very little detail on who he is, and how he came to be there. Make sure you aren't doing it just for the lightsaber (why have two?) and super powers, because that'll get boring real quick, trust me. As it stands, you seem to want your starting point to be the Mandalorian Dominion, but you have nothing present that indicates you have read our write ups, or anything else on Mandalorians, so hopefully you can see my concern.


A tip. Read some other profiles on the site. Most factions have their own rosters so you can easily find examples of those in your same interest field. BB code isn't necessary, but take notes from the profiles you like and steal it all for yourself. Inspiration is everywhere! use it. You can also see some of what constitutes the standard for similar characters, for example the way people format their equipment list, and link to the write-up. Including ammo is also a site rule now, as is a bio with a bare minimum of 50 words. Try not to let yourself settle for the minimum.

Finally, you cannot, CANNOT have a corvette. Goofball. Corvettes are enormous, and that one in particular has a bare minimum operating crew requirement of 18 people, and you sure as hell can't use the weapons or maneuver with that. If/When you do pick a ship, make sure it is one that makes sense, or has a good story reason for why you have it. Flavor baby, Flavor.

Please don't let me intimidate you - too much. Ask any questions you need, but if you are sure this is the direction you wanna go, remember that @Wit is the first hurdle to pass.

TA!

 

[René]

Agree with this on both the affair and the lightsaber skills.

I changed the age and lightsaber skill ability. Also Ji'Kel now only has 1 lightsaber, and I changed the wording of the affair to make his master more of a "Conservative Jedi" similar to the entire Order's view 1000 years later. Corvette no longer exists. Additionally, Ji'Kel mostly uses his pistols and suit, saving his lightsaber and force abilities for force users. Finally, how do I get the backstory approved and where do I find ammo for the pistols?

 

[Wit]

I can approve the background related to the Jedi. I'd suggest expanding a little more on why the Jedi Master was against the relationship, but as it stands right now the lack of focus is an acceptable enough reason for him to be against the relationship. So you're good on that. But why did the Master place the other padawan right in the path of an ambush? Was it intentional to get her out of the way, which would be very unlike a Jedi Master, or was it simply incompetence, again uncharacteristic but maybe more acceptable. Definitely expand on how he managed to defeat his Master, because a padawan managing to kill a Master is not that believable unless there are some extraordinary circumstances.

As for the ammo, just list them on your profile and you're good. It's just so that if you enter a PvP you opponent knows how much ammo you have and can factor that into how they fight.

 

[René]

I can approve the background related to the Jedi. I'd suggest expanding a little more on why the Jedi Master was against the relationship, but as it stands right now the lack of focus is an acceptable enough reason for him to be against the relationship. So you're good on that. But why did the Master place the other padawan right in the path of an ambush? Was it intentional to get her out of the way, which would be very unlike a Jedi Master, or was it simply incompetence, again uncharacteristic but maybe more acceptable. Definitely expand on how he managed to defeat his Master, because a padawan managing to kill a Master is not that believable unless there are some extraordinary circumstances.

As for the ammo, just list them on your profile and you're good. It's just so that if you enter a PvP you opponent knows how much ammo you have and can factor that into how they fight.

I added a few more details as you requested. I'm still confused about ammo (where do I find the pistols' amo capacity and why do no other profiles I've seen have ammo?). After that, am I approved for background and able to be approved by Mandos?

 

[Diva]

The ammo rule is new-ish. I don't think I have ammo posted for Nalu even, but she don't fight much. If you use a pistol from the tech boards (which I believe you are) it should have shot capacity in the write up, then you just list how many power cells (additional clips) you carry. Probably no more than two or three.

I will offer you this new tidbit now, culturally speaking, Mandalorians do NOT like the force, or force users. Obviously the Jedi would have come for him as a toddler, and if his parents made that choice than they made it, but getting back into his home Mandalorian culture ain't going to be so easy as showing up after nineteen years with a lightsaber of all things and swearing he was born there. Not to mention the fact that he would have never trained as a Mandalorian warrior yet, and therefor may Not even be in possession of the traditional armor yet. We don't hand that stuff out as door prizes.

While I can tell by your ambitious edits and clear desire to get approved fast, I have to recommend to don't be hasty, it will ultimately make the whole RP experience less satisfying for you. Take a breath, read your profile out loud to yourself (my avorite writers tool) and know that you will probably not reach final appproval by the end of today. You've chosen a very unusual and complicated build for your character, patience padawan.

 

[René]

The ammo rule is new-ish. I don't think I have ammo posted for Nalu even, but she don't fight much. If you use a pistol from the tech boards (which I believe you are) it should have shot capacity in the write up, then you just list how many power cells (additional clips) you carry. Probably no more than two or three.

I will offer you this new tidbit now, culturally speaking, Mandalorians do NOT like the force, or force users. Obviously the Jedi would have come for him as a toddler, and if his parents made that choice than they made it, but getting back into his home Mandalorian culture ain't going to be so easy as showing up after nineteen years with a lightsaber of all things and swearing he was born there. Not to mention the fact that he would have never trained as a Mandalorian warrior yet, and therefor may Not even be in possession of the traditional armor yet. We don't hand that stuff out as door prizes.

While I can tell by your ambitious edits and clear desire to get approved fast, I have to recommend to don't be hasty, it will ultimately make the whole RP experience less satisfying for you. Take a breath, read your profile out loud to yourself (my avorite writers tool) and know that you will probably not reach final appproval by the end of today. You've chosen a very unusual and complicated build for your character, patience padawan.

The general idea is that he left AS A PADAWAN, so probably ~15, ample time for training and armor aquisition. As I stated above, he rarely uses the Force or a lightsber, so the Mando's probably wouldn't know about it. I've been designing this character for 3 days before I joined the site, so I want to RP soon. I will add ammo though.

 

[Wit]

Might I suggest the bit about his Master letting her get killed under the assumption that it was the will of the Force and changing it to something along the lines of negligence? He simply didn't know he was sending her into an ambush point and his mistake resulted in her death. You guy still gets to be angry at him and it's a lot more believable than what you have right now. And this is purely a suggestion to add some flavor to the backstory, but maybe the Jedi master was distracted because he was shocked by his mistake costing a padawan her life and didn't really expect your guy to be a threat so not alert for danger?

 

[René]

Might I suggest the bit about his Master letting her get killed under the assumption that it was the will of the Force and changing it to something along the lines of negligence? He simply didn't know he was sending her into an ambush point and his mistake resulted in her death. You guy still gets to be angry at him and it's a lot more believable than what you have right now. And this is purely a suggestion to add some flavor to the backstory, but maybe the Jedi master was distracted because he was shocked by his mistake costing a padawan her life and didn't really expect your guy to be a threat so not alert for danger?

The disallusioned master knew about the ambush, and wanted to get Ji'Kel more focused on his learning than his love. I feel that the fact that his master orchestrated the event is what is needed to push Ji'Kel to kill him.

 

[Diva]

I am glad to know you are so invested in this character, I don't mean to question that, and I'm sorry if it came across that way. I have only seen this character for less than 12 hours, however, and what you may envision for him isn't coming across clearly to me yet as a reader, so I'm only offering some writing tools.

Even if he left the order as a tragically Romeo-esque teen, 4 years is not ample time for full Mando training, which would have been taking place for Mando children f on who t the same age as Jedi. Technically yes you can have your armor, but again some explanation of a tenuous homcoming would be nice (as well as what is up with his parents he presumably returned to). Either way, Mando's would know where he had been. Doesn't mean he can't come back, it's just a challenge for the character to overcome.

I want you to know I am not trying to arbitrarily deny your character things, but show you the obstacles you have set up for yourself as working with them can only provide more dynamic writing opportunity and fill in the logical holes in his past. As a paltry example, you could start with him already reacclamated to his birth culture, or RP it, either way it's something you and we would both benefit from seeing.


Also, please read the write up for the Dominion if you haven't already. Mandalorian independence is v eh recent in our site's timeline, and within the buildup to it are some interesting things that may be worth relating to here, only because they were so recent. Just for fun.


Edit : I think what @Wit is getting at is not WHY he killed his master, but HOW a 15 year old got the upper hand on a Jedi master. There has gotta be some crazy luck in there, cuz skill won't cut it

 

[Wit]

The disallusioned master knew about the ambush, and wanted to get Ji'Kel more focused on his learning than his love. I feel that the fact that his master orchestrated the event is what is needed to push Ji'Kel to kill him.

Well if that's the story you wanna stick with them I'm sorry but I can't approve of it. Jedi Masters are some of the wisest members of the Order, I just can't see a Jedi Master sacrificing a padawan to motivate another padawan.

 

[René]

I am glad to know you are so invested in this character, I don't mean to question that, and I'm sorry if it came across that way. I have only seen this character for less than 12 hours, however, and what you may envision for him isn't coming across clearly to me yet as a reader, so I'm only offering some writing tools.

Even if he left the order as a tragically Romeo-esque teen, 4 years is not ample time for full Mando training, which would have been taking place for Mando children f on who t the same age as Jedi. Technically yes you can have your armor, but again some explanation of a tenuous homcoming would be nice (as well as what is up with his parents he presumably returned to). Either way, Mando's would know where he had been. Doesn't mean he can't come back, it's just a challenge for the character to overcome.

I want you to know I am not trying to arbitrarily deny your character things, but show you the obstacles you have set up for yourself as working with them can only provide more dynamic writing opportunity and fill in the logical holes in his past. As a paltry example, you could start with him already reacclamated to his birth culture, or RP it, either way it's something you and we would both benefit from seeing.


Also, please read the write up for the Dominion if you haven't already. Mandalorian independence is v eh recent in our site's timeline, and within the buildup to it are some interesting things that may be worth relating to here, only because they were so recent. Just for fun.


Edit : I think what @Wit is getting at is not WHY he killed his master, but HOW a 15 year old got the upper hand on a Jedi master. There has gotta be some crazy luck in there, cuz skill won't cut it

I have updated the bio to add more Mando info and change the circumstances of Elia Yon's death, and added weapon links. I also read the Mando page.

 

[Wit]

You're good with the Jedi background!

 

[Diva]

Still seems pretty rushed, but it's a start, thank you. Once you get @Wit 'S approval, I will start really nit-picking.

Edit: Damnit wit, post sniped.

At any rate I am very busy IRL today, so I warn you not to expect this to go quickly. We are talking at least several hours here, and I am also less likely to accept quickly little rush edits than my Jedi counterpart. What I am thinking ting to say is: Please take your time, because you will have plenty of it by virtue of my circumstance. I am writing from my phone, which I never do, so I hope you feel special.

First two notes: he wouldn't be "re-acclamiting to Mando culture. He never experienced it before he was 15-16, as he was raised by Jedi. I would love to see some imaginative work on what getting introduced to the culture was like, hint hint.

Second, this also creates the problem of how he returned to Mandalore. Since he wasn't raised there he would have no overly convenient "old friends" to rescue him. Doesn't make any sense. Maybe, petulant little angst ball of a teen he was, the dark side got the best of him over the death of his first love, he killed his master, and realized the error, so he managed to flee before capture. Realizing he had nowhere to go, he set out to find his birth parents, praying they would provide sanctuary. Just a suggestion.

 

[Wit]

So while the background alone was acceptable-ish, the abilities need some fixing. For a padawan level Force user levitating small ships is a little much. Also, I'd suggest reading this post to get a better understanding of how the Force is used on the site: Guide to Force Powers. Also, using Force Rage would mean that's he's well within the grasp of the Dark Side. And it's not really a power that you can use in PvP the way you would in a game. So I'd suggest removing that as well if you want him to be resisting the temptations of the Dark Side.

 

[René]

So while the background alone was acceptable-ish, the abilities need some fixing. For a padawan level Force user levitating small ships is a little much. Also, I'd suggest reading this post to get a better understanding of how the Force is used on the site: Guide to Force Powers. Also, using Force Rage would mean that's he's well within the grasp of the Dark Side. And it's not really a power that you can use in PvP the way you would in a game. So I'd suggest removing that as well if you want him to be resisting the temptations of the Dark Side.

I meant to say that he can levitate things SMALLER THAN small ships (say, Jedi Interceptor size). Sorry if the wording is confusing. I will read the guide to the force. Additionally, Ji'Kel doesn't openly use the Dark Side, but he isn't afraid of it. Nobody has enlightened him to the true power of the Dark Side, which is why he isn't a Sith.

EDIT: Massive bio edit to add what @Nalu Fibuna wanted and more. Decreased lightsaber skill ability to add a second form, added a second lightsaber.

 

[Mirdala Priest]

Welcome Kyle! My character's clan, Clan Priest, is under House Visla, and it is conceivable that our characters could cross paths during House reunions, so I wanted to offer some role playing suggestions.
1) Write in per Wit's suggestion, a believable manner in which a padawan killed his jedi master. Was he sleeping? In deep meditation without his saber, distracted from sorrow from losing his other padawan...etc..
2) Write in per Nalu's request, a conflict between his force sensitivity and mandalorian heritage. Sure his parents know where he's been, so maybe claiming he killed the arrogant jedi and laughing about it (publicly denying magic) would make his return more acceptable to a culture who distrusts force sensitives.
The joy of character development is character conflict: hiding force sensitivity from fellow mandalorians or expressing it and shouldering the bigotry of the people from which he desires acceptance, these are some gems i see here!
Good luck!

 

[Arcangel]

Hi @Kyle; Rogue Mandalorian

Mandalorian Dominion Faction Leader here. Your profile is looking a bit better, but there are still a few things that arent clicking in my mind.

First off is his species. A Mandalorian born Chiss? This in itself deserves a bit of explanation, as the Chiss homeworld Csilla is entirely on the other side of the galaxy, and Chiss are a bit of isolationists.

Second is, i dont necessarily see why he would be running from the Republic and not the Jedi, seeing as the Republic/Jedi relationship this Timeline isnt as close as it is in the Prequel era. Also stealing a Cruiser is a bit of a stretch, as cruisers are capital ships.

Also as far as force use goes, there are no grey Jedi. Its pretty much either the light side or the dark side, as once you start drawing on the darkside, corruption and fall come soon after.

Also i would honestly like to see one of the lightsabers removed.