Zephyr Urzon

[Nightmare Moon]

NAME: Zephyr Urzon

FACTION: Unaligned

RANK: NA

SPECIES: Human/Genetic Experiment

AGE: 35

GENDER: Male

HEIGHT: 7’3”

WEIGHT: 200kg

EYES: White and Silver

HAIR: None

SKIN: White and scaled like a young dragon

CREDITS: 1000

DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Zephyr no longer looks human due to being a test subject in a rather interesting and unethical experiment. Zephyr now stands at over seven feet tall with scaled skin, fangs, bull like horns and a maw full of extremely sharp teeth. These coupled with the 18 foot wingspan that he bears and prehensile tail ending in a tip that seems to be the offspring of an ankylosaurus and a flanged mace leaves most sentient life forms thinking that they have seen a beast out of myth.

FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: 9/10 (Mad scientists seem to be good at producing this)
DEXTERITY: 7/10 (Fast and can fly)
CONSTITUTION: 9/10 (his scales are tough and he can regenerate by devouring midi-chlorians)
INTELLIGENCE: 7/10 (Moderately smart for a human)
WISDOM: 5/10 (He is not old enough to have garnered too much wisdom for himself and is not a huge student of philosophy though this may change)
CHARISMA: 2/10 (The biggest emotion he tends to bring on is fear however humans may find a certain sense of beauty in his form akin to those who watch tigers and crocodiles in the wild)

FORCE POWERS:
Force Lightning(Unstable)
Force Telekinesis(Unstable)
Force Push (Unstable) *Updated

SKILLS:
Flight(Thanks to wings)
Unstable control of the force resulting in raw and powerful though uncontrolled, inaccurate and potentially self destructive in bursts of fury.
midi-chlorian feeding (Zephyr Feeds of midi-chlorian’s as his main source of sustenance and can use them to regenerate lost parts of his body similar to lizards and other creatures that can regrow lost bodyparts )
midi-chlorian drain (If Zephyr hits a target with his teeth or claws he literally sucks the midi-chlorians out of the target leaving them lower in count. Whether or not these regenerate over time is up to the player of whoever was silly enough to get clawed/bitten )



LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
None

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Stronger and faster than a regular human Zephyrs midi-chlorian feeding and raw force powers make him rather formidable in combat.
However he does have several weaknesses:
Precious metals: The touch of Gold, Silver and Platinum cause him intense discomfort and literally burn and warp his flesh.
Unstable force powers : Zephyr uses the force it comes out in a very raw and chaotic state which can lead to them hurting himself.
As he had heightened senses these can be overwhelmed by sensations that are too intense for him to process thus causing him intense pain - certain specialised frequencies are more effective than others.



GEAR: None
SHIP: None

DROIDS:
none

PETS:
None
PERSONALITY: Zephyr has a rather cynical personality taking a rather dim view to both Jedi and their darker counter parts. His personality tends to take swings from cool and calculating solider to a raging beast. Although he has nothing against humankind, he also bears a stable distrust of alien races, sometimes bordering racism. Though he is reasonable and calm if you catch him at the right time.

BIOGRAPHY: Zephyr was a soldier hired by a Sith doctor to protect his assets from the likes of Jedi poking their nose where it doesn’t belong. The scientist in question was studying and experimenting with Midi-chlorians, their uses, but moreso how to ensnare, replicate and further them. Intending to implant them into other Sith, as well as acolytes and himself so they could better channel the force.

Though his experiment was successful, it wasn’t without sacrifice. Zephyr was called inside one fateful day on duty, and his memory begins to fade there. There was pain, in immense sums, then hunger, rage, hate, and many many more emotions. But also the smell of blood, flickering chaotic images of gore. The flash of a lightsaber, pain, but also satisfaction, and a soft ripping sound.

He became self aware once more some-time after, and he had changed. The result of the experiment had morphed him to a point in which he was unrecognisable. So he began to hate the Jedi, though he did, to a point appreciate his new body, new strength. He thought of a time where a monster like this would be feared by towns and villages. Though not now, not in this galaxy. He could walk the streets work, and continue on...



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[Orphen]

WOAH! Nice character bro! Conjures images of Yuris' dark fusion Lv 2-5 from shadowhearts. Cept without the big blades.

Might need to see an admin about it, but i see no problem with experimentation on genes and stuff. Ep 1 established that they could find the damn organisims. why can't they do wierd crap with them? splice them with shapeshifter cells or somthing strange/ illegal. ^^

/better get accepted!

 

[Neo Shark]

Why doesn't he have Force Push? Can't use FUS RO DAH without it! Also, this character doesn't have enough Toeh. I'd add more Toeh, but be careful about taking an arrow to the knee.

 

[Crystalmath]

Dude, this thing breaks so many rules its not funny, I could possibly sit here and list them all, but that would take hours. You're not allowed to rp with this thing. Please make another character that follows the guidelines :/

 

[Neo Shark]

Dude, this thing breaks so many rules its not funny, I could possibly sit here and list them all, but that would take hours. You're not allowed to rp with this thing. Please make another character that follows the guidelines :/

That's a little unnecessary. Don't you think? He's new to the site and doesn't deserve that level of hostility. Also, since he IS new you shouldn't criticize his profile without providing specific detail. Profile review is to help improve a persons character. It is not for saying, "LOL, NO! Try again noob."

Let me show you how it's done.

I'd tone down the dragon aspects. Wings gotta go and so should the scales. Unless his wings are massively powerful or he's incredibly light, there's no way a normal humanoid can fly just because they have wings. However, if instead you said it allowed him to glide, I can see that happening. Instead of going full on with the scales, how bout he just has tough leathery skin? Keep the fangs, claws, and horns, but maybe have scales only on certain parts of his body. His hands and feet maybe. This will make it easier for him to fit in to normal society. As for the the tail? I'd get rid of it personally, but I don't really have a huge issue with it.

HOWEVER! If you purposely went with the demonic like appearance for character development or some such, ignore what I just said. Except for the flying. No flying for you!:CStern

His weaknesses seem a little over the top. From what I've gathered from your profile he was designed to be a bio weapon. As such, weaknesses to certain rare metals makes him a failure as weapon. Normal weaknesses due to his enhanced senses are perfectly understandable. Remember, just because he's tougher than the average Joe doesn't make him immune to the things Joe is vulnerable to. You can still be shot, stabbed, or exploded, you're just more resistant to them than poor Joe.

As for the Midi-chlorian feeding and drain. Just swap it for Drain Life or Force Drain. But clarify that he's only able to use those while in physical contact or while biting. IIRC they're fairly high level force abilities so using it normally would probably be out of the question.

 

[Crystalmath]

as I mentioned, I couldn't be bothered writing all that, someone just needed to point it out, thanks for doing it. But there are still a big heap of issues there :/ I'm just pretty sure you can't have a great big genetic mish-mash meat-tank monster with force powers

 

[Rico]

Thinking about your character I thought of this spicies http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Barabel

 

[Nightmare Moon]

In response to Neo Shark

Thanks for the response and the pointers I will try to explain my reasoning to you for when I created this character but if mods require change I will do it.

I started by re-going over the guidelines and the only real issue I can seem to find is his regeneration which is could be duplicated with bacta shots anyways (IMO biting or scratching a Jedi is harder than a quick injection) . As far as flight goes jetpacks exist and provide a good amount of aerial movement as well as being almost certainly faster in a straight line. The technology of the far far future should then be easily able to provide flight since they can do things such as make armies of clones on a whim. Midiclorians seem to be quite measurable/quantifiable and im sure they would be a nourishing healthy food source for any sith bio weapon.

To address the issue of fitting in THERE ARE HUTTS SLITERING AROUND - BIG FAT SLUG MONSTERS WHO ARE NINE FEET LONG AND HAVE TO WEIGH AT LEAST 800KG. ONE WAS EVEN A GODDAMN JEDI - IT COULD USE THE FORCE!!! THIS HAVE MOUTHS THAT ARE BIG ENOUGH TO EAT SOMEONE IN ONE BITE.

Regarding weaknesses he is a mad sith doctors failed experiment on a mystical power! So is it really so strange that he would have vulnerabilities akin to creatures from myth?

On the force side of things shamans and non jedi over the galaxy seem to have force powers his are just a bit tampered with and are sure as hell not precise and reliable like those of a jedi master. He is nowhere near invulnerable either I made him to be tough but not un-killable if he takes a rocket launcher or two in his general direction he is dead and a jedi could end him in one well placed lightsaber sweep to the neck. Scales are nice but not really a particularly great defence to weapons that can cut through solid metal. And if you don't think the concept is particularly starwarsey check this page out that I found yesteray night (Strangely after my character was made - I would have referenced it in the sheet otherwise) while searching for sith experiments.

http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Behemoth_from_the_World_Below

Throw wings on it and you basically have my character complete with strange unfocused force beams - it even hunts jedi.

In response to Super King

You have been no help whatsoever and if everyone on the site was like you I would leave post haste. Also great big genetic mish-mash meat-tank monsters with force powers are awesome , a lot of fun to play and should only cause problems if my character is OP! Which I don't believe he is as he only has TWO/THREE powerful yet unstable and shoddy powers that would fail miserably against a Jedi master or Sith lord with 15-30all expertly mastered plus he had no effective way of blocking lightsabers. I suggest you leave further discussions to Neo Shark , Moderators and myself as you do not seem particularly interested in discussing anything. However if you DO point out any other particular issues with my character I will be happy to talk about them.

In response to Rico

Yeah sort of just add the wings and he looks a lot like one.(This also helps a lot with my having scales arguement thanks)

 

[Neo Shark]

The alterations I proposed were all designed to help your character "fit" in more easily. I was merely trying to provide ideas that would help tone down what seemed to be a character strongly influenced by Skyrim/dragons/fantasy. The only problem I actually have with the character is that he has flight and the feeding. For the feeding I'd PM an admin and see what they think, because I'm not sure if it'll be allowed. As for flying, it's simply not possible for you character to fly without assistance. The reason why birds are able to fly is because they have hollow bones making them extremely light. I'm not sure how exactly your character would be able to fly naturally (barring magic/force), but IIRC you'll need incredibly massive and strong back muscle in order to flap your wings hard enough to fly.

To reiterate. Aside from the flying and feeding, I don't personally have an issue with this character. The changes made would simply help make him fit in a little more easily into the role-play and the site itself.

P.S. Add Force Push. I will have no respect for you unless you add it and shout "FUS RO DAH" whenever you use it.

P.S.S Beware of arrows to the knee, I hear they're dangerous.

 

[Nightmare Moon]

Neo Shark I promise you my character will scream FUS RO DAH!!! at the top of his lungs every time he uses force push. Also Super King my character was going to have: Invincibility , invisibility , teleportation , matter control , and time travel - BUT HE TOOK AN ARROW TO THE MOTHERXXXXING KNEE AND NOW HE CAN'T.

 

[Icaro]

The flying thing, like neo shark said is a simple biological impossibility. You've played monster hunter I'm SURE and you've seen the biology of the Rathalos, that biology enables it to fly, whereas a humanoid can't just 'have wings = fly'.

I saw it more influenced by a combination of European folklore (Faeries) and a general desire for something different.

In any case, good luck.

 

[Dread]

Yes, you'll need to contact an Admin and ask permission to use midi-chlorian feeding/draining, along with regenerating limbs. You're allowed to have lab experiment characters if you want, so that part in itself is not an issue.

However, I personally suggest just remaking the character from scratch. It's possible to make something like this character, but a bit more fitting for the Star Wars universe. If you'd like me to elaborate on the aforementioned idea, feel free to PM me.

Anyway, welcome to SWRP.

 

[Nightmare Moon]

But how do Watto fly?

WHY DO WATTO FLY ?

WHY DO WATTO FIGHT ?

 

[Neo Shark]

Neo Shark I promise you my character will scream FUS RO DAH!!! at the top of his lungs every time he uses force push. Also Super King my character was going to have: Invincibility , invisibility , teleportation , matter control , and time travel - BUT HE TOOK AN ARROW TO THE MOTHERXXXXING KNEE AND NOW HE CAN'T.

That's the spirit!