Zar Skirata

[Outlander]

• His attributes still seem really high. He's an amazing warrior at range and up close, an amazing pilot, a smooth talker who's also amazing with languages, and who's pretty good with both explosives and being a medic. He doesnt have any weaknesses.
• There is physically no way that he'd know that many languages. He'd maybe know three give or take.
• Your clawdite backstory still doesnt make sense. It just feels like you made him a clawdite with no regards to their culture or history.
• I, personally, don't like the implication that someone who was trained later than everyone else in a warrior culture is somehow not only amazing, but even better than other Mandalorian. It seems power-gamey.
• My issue with his Mandalorian parents wasnt so much that they just murdered someone, but the fact that a pair of mandalorians happened to be there, happened to find this orphan clawdite, and happened to both adopt him and take him on amazing galactic adventures.
• Why can't he let others know hes a Clawdite in this super inclusive society, and why do his parents encourange their new adopted son to do this completely unnecessary thing that would cause him constant discomfort?
• Like with the Scatterweave, I think you need to submit a blaster that you add Particle tech to.

 

[Zenya]

Okay. You've got A LOT of stuff going on here.
Do you want to get your character Mandalorian approved so you can start Roleplaying? If so, you are going to need official faction approval from Mandalorian Leadership, after you make the following edits. ( @Kori Buor @Mirdala Priest or @Prudence ) Also, make sure you have posted in the Mandalorian sign ups.

First, your character is overpowered. You need to tone down the mass amount strength, and reduce some of the skill bars. You mentioned that he started training later in his life, so he would likely be average at most. Basically, just don't make him so overpowered.

I also don't understand the purpose for the death of his parents other than an excuse to scar him as a child. It seems counterproductive since a pair of Mandalorians enter the picture and adopt him. Why don't you just make them the original parents? It's really up to you, but I do suggest it be simplified. Also, I'm not really sure of what purpose he has for being a Clawdite. Unless of course, you are planning to weigh in heavily on that aspect of his character. And the Mandalorians would not care about what race he his.

Lastly, nine grenades, is a lot of grenades. Of course, you don't have to take all of them into combat, so I'm going to tag @Clayton @Elijah Brockway to take a peak at it, and give it an okay.

After you fix that stuff, your character should be ready for approval.
@Mad Dog

Edit: You can role play without getting approved. You just RP in faction related threads.

 

[Clayton]

Your character cannot start with a large amount of weapons and armor. They must earn them through time, within reason. Characters may, of course, have inherited things from family members, but please be reasonable when starting out.

I'd also like to point out that your character is Force-Sensitive and has armor with functions. Force users are restricted to functionless armor.

 

[Mad Dog]

@Zenya So his race and back story are just how I wanted to make him, it's semi-unique. I like the Clawdite species and thought it would be interesting. He was adopted into the mandalorian way of life at 9 years old and began learning from them. He then began specialized training in his combat skills at 13. He's in his mid twenties now and has trained only those skills ever since, leaving him with little to no knowledge in all other fields.

@Clayton, he is force sensitive but has not had training and thus cannot use force skills. If this is not ok to use the armor until he obtains force training I will drop the sensitivity. I'll fix the grenades situation now. I thought it would be acceptable being as he was the son of a Mandalorian, and would likely be well equipped when adventuring.

 

[Mad Dog]

Grenades cut back and skills lowered.

 

[Zenya]

Great.
And I didn't realize you were already approved, so you're good to go.
Enjoy!

 

[Mad Dog]

Great.
And I didn't realize you were already approved, so you're good to go.
Enjoy!

No problem :) thank you!

 

[Mad Dog]

@Clayton as the force is not part of his story yet, is he still allowed to wear and benefit from functional armor? If not I'll drop that force sensitivity.

 

[Clayton]

@Clayton as the force is not part of his story yet, is he still allowed to wear and benefit from functional armor? If not I'll drop that force sensitivity.

Once he starts using the force, he can't have the armor anymore.

 

[Mad Dog]

Once he starts using the force, he can't have the armor anymore.

Understood. I don't have plans for him to use the force for a long time. Thank you for clarifying.

 

[Mad Dog]

Also I hate Rodians..