Xeyhiri

[Owen0502]

• Name: Xethiri

• Coordinates: L-19

• Hyperlane: N/A

• Climate: It has a very cold winter which can last for 10 years.

• Terrain: Almost all of of the planet is a mountains. There are ravines that seem to stretch on for ever and forests that engulf the entire planet.

• Rotation: nights are 48 hours and days are 12 hours.

• Inhabitants: almost all races can be found here since the climate could not support life naturally.

• Resources: This planet as a lot of resources can be found on other planets except a metal called Xethirian Iron which is a very rare metal which can be mixed with other metals to create Xethirian steal which can rarely deflect blaster fire and is completely lightsaber proof.

• Government: Xethiri has many factions fighting to control the planet for its rare Xethirian Iron.

• Culture: Most people on the planet believe that the Dark Side is the true form of the force and the light side is a manipulation of the Dark Side.

• Technology: The planet has the same knowledge of Technology as the Republic

• Satellites: It has 3 moons and they are xeth, reyan and karvat. It also has one sun called renvary

• History: The planet was found by and controlled by the Sith but, after a bloody civil war it become independent. But without the support of the sith the parts of Government left and became new factions and those factions started Waring for domination of the planet. The planet is in a economic crises because most of the money going the to fund the war effert

• Intent: I would like this to be a place with many independent factions so it will be hard for a factions to get the planet but when they do it will give that faction many resources that for them to get they would have to take over many planets to get all the resources on this planet.

 

[Outlander]

Welcome to the forum! I'm glad to see you're already branching out into content creation. We don't have enough people make things for people to use.

I do, however, have some critiques. First off, I'd really recommend you looking at some of the already approved planets, as they contain a wealth of good information that you would find incredibly useful in the creation of your own planet. Also, as always, make sure you read any relevant guidelines for the board before working on anything. It makes things easier down the road.

First off, speaking generally, this is incredibly bareboned. You have a paragraph or less for each section. Its certainly not enough for someone to accurately RP the planet, which is what these are primarily for, and detail is absolutely key here. Once it's accepted, what's there needs to be sufficient to stand up on its own in the roleplay.

For example, you say the planet has incredibly long winters. But what about the rest of the time? Do the temperatures vary across the planet? How to the forests survive this? And why are there many species here? We're having to go off of what you write here. And there isn't much of anything to work off of. And there are many holes in the planet's makeup, like not specifying how all those species got there or what the actual current makeup of the government is. And those are pretty crucial.

Another point are the resources. They absolutely aren't gonna fly. Both because you make a blanket statement on what's there, but also the metal. That absolutely will not be accepted. Mandalorian Iron, which was similar, was moderated heavily last timeline and completely removed this time around. Not to mention how much it could be abused in the tech board, although it's currently violating several teach board rules.

Overall, the entire thing seems both unnecessary and, frankly, kinda dull. You don't give us anything interesting to use here. I could substitute this with any generic planet and it would have no differences. And that, on it's own, will keep this from being approved. Generic planets will not be accepted.

 

[Dmitri]

• Intent: I would like this to be a place with many independent factions so it will be hard for a factions to get the planet but when they do it will give that faction many resources that for them to get they would have to take over many planets to get all the resources on this planet.

My question is why does this require a new planet? Why can't another icy world work?

 

[Kiro]

Considering the points brought up by Outlander and @Dmitri exactly one month ago, and no changes or replies have been made in this time, I'm declaring this inactive, and archiving it.