Vosca Retwin

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NAME: Vosca Retwin
FACTION: N/A
RANK: N/A
SPECIES: Felucian
AGE: 18
GENDER: male
HEIGHT: 6'3"
WEIGHT: 179 lbs
EYES: Black
HAIR: None
SKIN: Blue
CREDITS: 1000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Physical similarities to fungal surroundings, extra limb at elbow.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

BIOGRAPHY:
Vosca Retwin, grew up no different than most of his entire village. However one solid turn in his life, was his career choice. Early on in his life, he was told how his father was a warrior. Being a relatively Force interested being, he wanted to learn how to use the Force they taught. As he grew, he learned some key things to being a hunter for his race. Retwin learned how to use his natural camouflage to blend into his surroundings. Later he learned how to imbue his weapon with the force. Eventually he gained the ability to increase its defensive purposes to that of a lightsaber. They taught him how to defend himself, blocking thrown objects, such as sticks and rocks. Vosca however was interested in one specific force power taught to him. An attack that captured the air and threw it at his target. Such a power was so fascinating to him. When he learned how to use it, he sought more ability. The Force was a strange mistress to him, so beautiful. Vosca from their on made every attempt to learn more about the force. However the Shamans had no answers for him. They only spoke of a Force Adept that walked their planet long ago. The Force Adept is the one who taught them the force abilities they had, before the mystical being vanished.

Vosca sneaked away from the village to look for the adept on a lead he had. The last known location was in a Rancor pit. The Felucian Warrior had found a nearby pit. Only to find bones and a fresh jawbone sword. Taking the jawbone sword, he left stealthily and returned home before notice was taken to his leave. Unsatisfied, he realized the only way he could learn more about the force. He must find another Force Adept to teach him more. From that day forward he began to learn Galactic basic in the hopes to find someone he could talk to about the Force. Some time later Vosca found a ship that had crashed during his hunt. So surprised was he, he decided to look around. The ship looked very old and dusty, claimed by the plants. Inside, Vosca found a skeleton in Jedi wrapping, and with a lightsaber by his side. Vosca picked up the lightsaber to see that it was still functional. However Vosca does not steal from the dead and decided to put it back. Retwin realized that the ship was the burial place of the Force Adept that came earlier. Vosca returned to his village to tell the others of what he had found.

Years later, Vosca Retwin had found himself with the Jedi. When he met his master, Nuka, they started out on good terms. Eventually they completed training Vosca in healing. After which Nuka took Vosca and her other two apprentices to Mustafar for a mission. However during the mission Vosca felt ever so distant from his master and the Jedi Order. During the mission he increased his ability with force sense by having to intensify his ability to find the rest of the group and who they were tracking. Towards the end he heard about the Rowrakruk which further spawned interest and distance from the Jedi order.

PERSONALITY:
Vosca Retwin, is an average Felucian Warrior, who believes in the light side of the Force. Retwin makes a struggle not to fall to the dark side of the Force. This will make him more ugly, and unattractive to the rest of the race. Not to mention that falling to the dark side will get him fed to the mega Sarlacc. Vosca is a very friendly Felucian, and can be very nice. His attempt to learn galactic basic, shows he would like to know more about the rest of the galaxy.

As a Felucian Warrior, he is a hunter, and naturally one with the Force, Surroundings, and creatures of Felucia. Retwin is very cautious while alone, or around strangers. Vosca has started to wonder about whether there more to the galaxy then hunting everyday. In a fight, when cornered, Vosca can be very dangerous. A strong fighter and somewhat of a duelist, he makes an effort to better himself at such. Retwin seeks out his local Felucian Shaman to talk to about feelings he has before a hunt. Usually these feelings are disturbances in the force, or a bad dream he had.

Vosca has a very bright outlook on life. When it comes to hunting, he enjoys the exorcise. During his retrieval of his prey, he feels victorious and celebrates when he gets home. Even when faced with a Rancor, he sees the chance to make a new friend. The Force puzzles young Retwin with questions. Always approaching the shamans to answer these questions. However he feels that only someone stronger in the force can teach him more.

STRENGTH: 7/10 - Retwin is only ten percent body fat. Retwin can lift to of 338 lbs. effectively with his arms and 350 lbs. effectively with his legs.

DEXTERITY: 8/10 - Retwin is a very agile being like the rest of his race. He can stick to surfaces, and even possesses short arms at his forearms. These short arms themselves have three large, agile fingers. He can run at 23 miles per hour on two legs and 46 mph on all fours. While using force speed he can run 46 mph on two legs and 92 mph on all fours.

CONSTITUTION: 7/10 - Retwin being of warrior class has close to a soldier's constitution. This Felucian is very athletic. He is even able withstand a lot of damage.

INTELLIGENCE: 6/10 - While seemingly unintelligent, the Felucians are quite smart. They have their own language established, and live in a village as a unit. Proof of intelligence is that Retwin is part of a group of Felucians attempting to learn galactic basic. Retwin is gaining increasing knowledge of the language. Retwin is also intelligent enough to actually domesticate creatures.

WISDOM: 5/10 - No wiser than most Felucians, Retwin possesses somewhat average human wisdom.

CHARISMA: 4/10 The Felucians are regarded as savage and primitive by most. Coupled with the fact they are also called ugly by some. However, on a brighter side, they are able to tame and even control creatures. Rancors still attack them, but they are able to tame it with time.

FORCE POWERS:
Control
- Force Speed ***
- Force Cloak ***
- Force Concealment ***
- Floating Meditation X
- Force Heal ***

Force Sense
- Force Seeing ***
- Farseeing ***
- Force Empathy ***
- Telepathy ***

Alter
- Force Weapon ***
- Telekinesis ***
-- Force Push ***
-- Force Pull ***
-- Force Jump ***
-Animal Friendship ***

Special X
Hopeful *
Padawan **
Knight ***
Master ****
Grand Master *****


SKILLS:
A Felucian warrior is skilled in hunting, basic force powers, and basic dueling. While not as strong as trained jedi, Felucian Warriors are quite force to be reckoned with in close combat. As a Felucian Warrior so is Vosca. The Felucian Warriors were able to use the force to hurl small spheres or compressed air at targets which were capable of stunning or even killing their prey. Furthermore, they also learned to use their powers to imbue a portion of it into their brutal jawbone weapons thus strengthening it as well as increasing its damage potential. This also made it a stronger defensive tool against other weapons such as lightsabers. Like most of their people, the warriors were capable of blending into their surroundings and crawling along nearly any surface which they used to ambush prey from virtually any vantage point.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Form I: Shii-Cho * - Not useable.
Form IV: Ataru **

Special X
Hopeful *
Padawan **
Knight ***
Master ****
Grand Master *****


STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
As a Felucian Warrior, Retwin has a soldier's body, hunting skills, a Padawan use of the force. However generally viewed as primitives, and aren't seen as attractive, low charisma is obvious. A Felucian is not only well versed on land, but also at home underwater. Vosca, like all other Felucians, has an extremely limited knowledge of technology. He has the advantage of his Felucian abilities that put him ahead of normal human bounds.

GEAR:
Jawbone Sword
Green Lightsaber - It is a green lightsaber that was developed for Vosca's Juyo style. It has been equipped with a Pontite Adegan and a Stygium crystal. Stygium enhanced the natural cloaking ability of Vosca's force powers and camouflage. The Pontite Adegan crystal resonated with a powerful aura that cools both skin and temper.
Jedi Robes - Jedi robes that have been fitted for his unique body structure.

SHIP:
None

PETS:
None

KILLS:
None

DUELING RING MATCHES:
None

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
None

ROLE-PLAYS:

September
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Training of Vosca Retwin
Increased
Telekinesis
Farseeing
Force Empathy

Learned
Force Heal
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Hunting The Light
Increased
Force Sense
------------------------------------------
Serendipity
Learned
Floating Meditation​
 
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seems overpowered stats wise and doesnt meet the requirements of a starting profile. you have 24 hours to add history and personality.

control rancors? ehh lets not.
 

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The pets was really just for fun. Don't really read too much into it. It was more of a joke.

Felucian Warriors actually really do all of this stuff.

I did all of this at once and kinda got really tired.
 

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/goes through the motions

You can't start with Force Powers, your stats are ridiculous (you have ONE that's below average and all of the others are inane), you didn't even finish the profile. Did you even bother to read the stickies outlined EVERYWHERE before you started?
 

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Im not an admin but posting jokes in a profile is not really my thing or of many others
 

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I got overloaded when I made this thing... I mean it was really late... It's not finished cause I fell asleep.

Retwin's stats are based on what you can expect to find on a Felucian warrior.

Felucians warriors, I would expect, to be as strong if not stronger than foot ball players. In Fitness 10% body fat isn't even the lowest you can go. 5 - 15%... I just picked the mid.

Dexterity is all very true. I researched Felucians and their warriors(hell I even played those two levels on Felucia in the game Force Unleashed) and they are quite a bitch to defeat in unarmed combat.... they have no technology to speak of though so that's another weakness. They really have short arms and agile fingers.

Constitution was not really the most powerful. Felucian Warriors are the soldiers of their race. So I would think they have a Soldier's body more or less. Keep in mind they are usually much larger than humans(humans average up to 1.8 however the average Felucian has 1.9).

Really intelligence was just... ya know... basically a... OH yes... normal human.

Wisdom... well that wars normal human.

Charisma... oh now they are ****ed there. Felucians look like fungus, wear masks, and even are referred to as primitive and savage(Why are humans still racist after so much of an advancement...).

Also those are the force powers they star with. It was stated under the Felucian Warrior cast.
 

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I got overloaded when I made this thing... I mean it was really late... It's not finished cause I fell asleep.

Then you should have revised before posting.

Retwin's stats are based on what you can expect to find on a Felucian warrior.

I don't expect anything from any race.

Felucians warriors, I would expect, to be as strong if not stronger than foot ball players. In Fitness 10% body fat isn't even the lowest you can go. 5 - 15%... I just picked the mid.

Lean strength, able to lift own body weight. Understandable.

Dexterity is all very true. I researched Felucians and their warriors(hell I even played those two levels on Felucia in the game Force Unleashed) and they are quite a bitch to defeat in unarmed combat.... they have no technology to speak of though so that's another weakness. They really have short arms and agile fingers.

Force Unleashed happens a long time after this timeline, take civilization and culture growth into consideration.

Constitution was not really the most powerful. Felucian Warriors are the soldiers of their race. So I would think they have a Soldier's body more or less. Keep in mind they are usually much larger than humans(humans average up to 1.8 however the average Felucian has 1.9).

How large a person is doesn't determine how healthy they are. One Kushiban could be sickly, while a Trandoshan has a high immune system, and vice versa.

Really intelligence was just... ya know... basically a... OH yes... normal human.

Depending on where the human grew up and in what circumstances forms their intelligence. Clarification could do some good.

Wisdom... well that wars normal human.

See above.

Charisma... oh now they are ****ed there. Felucians look like fungus, wear masks, and even are referred to as primitive and savage(Why are humans still racist after so much of an advancement...).

Some could say humans are primitive and savage compared to other species.

Also those are the force powers they star with. It was stated under the Felucian Warrior cast.

That is for a video game. This is Star Wars roleplay. Your Felucian can not have a grasp on the Force higher than a Knight's/Crusader's unless training has been completed with another PC.

Not try to be a bitch, just trying to clarify.
 

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I don't expect anything from any race.

Well this is what they are..

Force Unleashed happens a long time after this timeline, take civilization and culture growth into consideration.

Their entire civilization and culture is actually quite... native american before Englishmen came into the picture.

How large a person is doesn't determine how healthy they are. One Kushiban could be sickly, while a Trandoshan has a high immune system, and vice versa.

He's a warrior, I'm sure they let the sickly hunt.

Depending on where the human grew up and in what circumstances forms their intelligence. Clarification could do some good.

Well I guess IQ of 110.

Some could say humans are primitive and savage compared to other species.

Well to some he can have an average charisma.

That is for a video game. This is Star Wars roleplay. Your Felucian can not have a grasp on the Force higher than a Knight's/Crusader's unless training has been completed with another PC.

Not just for a video game, they were in the clone wars too. Either way, all is considered canon. He doesn't have a higher grasp of the force than those two. The Felucian race are a race of Force potential. They have average midi-chlorian rates... of a jedi. They are basically initiates with like, I guess a year of training. Oh and instead of lightsabers, they have force imbued jawbone swords. All of this is covered when I researched.
 
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Explanations heard, thank you for the clarification. Personality and Biography have to be filled out, which I recommend getting started on before this thread is locked by an admin.
 

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The Clone Wars were still thousands and thousands of years after this timeline.

I doubt anybody besides us, nitpickers that we are, will rip on you about your stats. After all, when it comes down to it, if you're a shitty roleplayer a fourteen year old will end up beating you. :D Besides that, you really need to stop using IQs as a measure of intelligence. They're a measure of the capacity of an individual to learn, and at that a lot of people consider them inaccurate. You can't measure a person's overall intelligence with a given value, because that value doesn't delve into the nuances of... well, anything.

At any rate, finish the profile. An admin should have popped in already to say that if you don't finish it within 24 hours, they'll lock it, but meh.
 

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At any rate, finish the profile. An admin should have popped in already to say that if you don't finish it within 24 hours, they'll lock it, but meh.

must be a slow day
 

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Well how is the personality? I just finished it. I think it says something for his character.

I've always loved the Felucians, because they look so awesome. They are so colorful, and powerful. Their culture is also very deep. Not only that, but they are at home on land, in water, stuck to walls and ceilings! Beautiful creatures with such potential. Not much tech potential but eh. I'll cope without a blaster.

:CHappy:
 

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Its not the worst profile ive ever read. totally playable in my eyes, evry character can be godmoded with so as long as you play fair I don't see him all taht overpowered. however the Gear section could use some information. and a pic is allways nice http://www.deviantart.com has a lot of nice stuff.:)
 

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Besides that, you really need to stop using IQs as a measure of intelligence. They're a measure of the capacity of an individual to learn, and at that a lot of people consider them inaccurate. You can't measure a person's overall intelligence with a given value, because that value doesn't delve into the nuances of... well, anything.

Just going to say that I agree with Words here. IQ doesn't take into account acquired knowledge on a practical, technical, or philosophical level; all of which is but a single facet of what is essentially an umbrella term.

You could easily take into account capacity for abstract thinking, comprehension, logical thought process, ability to learn (which is a whole new sub-category involving learning types, learning potential, and experience), critical thinking, and problem solving.

I'd much rather see a comparison or something like that to account for intelligence, rather than just a number.
 
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Jawbone sword.... yea this gave me trouble in the force unleashed...
:CAbove:

Force Weapon is a bitch.
 

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feeding force lightning in to everything seemed to work for me in the star wars unleashed
 

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Yea... I'm glad they gave us force choke to play with when we first started. Maybe I'll become a jedi. Would that not be crazy? Galen Merak's worst fear realized... I'll go check on the jedi temple.

"Proxy what the hell do you mean one of the felucians is a jedi?"

"I'm sorry master but is fully trained in the force"

"...these things are a bitch on easy difficulty... I'm playing on sith lord."

"Sucks to be you master."
 
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