Varian

[Infintus]

What the ****?

Ok, I'm going to offer my two cents on this profile. The character is needlessly talented with very little nuance or flaws. I highly suggest giving him major weaknesses and vulnerabilities, other than simply being greedy, which many Sith would regard as a strength. If he is impulsive and headstrong, he would not be particularly manipulative. Since he kills with very little reason and simply lives to just kill, then he would not be intelligent either or concerned with amassing knowledge. The business and maths also seem unnecessary and don't really serve his role as a warrior.

Characters can have a few things they are very good at, but they also need fatal flaws which balance out their strengths. It makes them more interesting and complex and generally more fun to RP with.

If you need any help with your character you're welcome to send me a message. I too have an evil Sith with an edgy name starting with V.

Yeah I will change him to be a weapon of the Empire, I think they can use him well.

 

[Marf]

Yeah I will change him to be a weapon of the Empire, I think they can use him well.

If you want to make him into a brutal warrior, you could remove things like his skills in sorcery, manipulative nature or high intelligence as they don't really serve his purpose or work with him being a combat machine focused on killing. I completely get wanting to make your character a badass, but what makes a character badass is when they have major weaknesses which make their strengths all the more important. I have two Sith myself who can't fight at all, but their strengths are intellectual.

Hope that helps.

 

[Infintus]

If you want to make him into a brutal warrior, you could remove things like his skills in sorcery, manipulative nature or high intelligence as they don't really serve his purpose or work with him being a combat machine focused on killing. I completely get wanting to make your character a badass, but what makes a character badass is when they have major weaknesses which make their strengths all the more important. I have two Sith myself who can't fight at all, but their strengths are intellectual.

Hope that helps.

I'm editing the character right now

 

[Herrith]

I'd like to honestly, you look very savory and you have fat in spots I'd like to munch on.

Very bad thing to say to a Zeltron.

 

[Infintus]

Very bad thing to say to a Zeltron.

Dafuq is a Zeltron

 

[Kaane]

Red-skinned humanoids that have a degree of emotional telepathy and exude hormones that match their mood constantly. They're also known to be exceptionally alluring and masters at soliciting that thing a lot of people seem to want.

PG-13 rating must be maintained

 

[Herrith]

Dafuq is a Zeltron

I hear this a lot.

Red-skinned humanoids that have a degree of emotional telepathy and exude hormones that match their mood constantly. They're also known to be exceptionally alluring and masters at soliciting that thing a lot of people seem to want.

PG-13 rating must be maintained

Sums it up.

And I'll do my best to keep at Michael Bay's Transformers level PG 13.

 

[Infintus]

I hear this a lot.

Sums it up.

And I'll do my best to keep at Michael Bay's Transformers level PG 13.

So that's why you insulted my bun. Tryna to gain control of me now are you?

 

[Herrith]

So that's why you insulted my bun. Tryna to gain control of me now are you?

No... maybe

 

[Infintus]

No... maybe

You won't like whats inside my head

 

[Herrith]

You won't like whats inside my head

Or will I?

 

[Infintus]

Or will I?

Be my guest ;)

 

[Herrith]

Be my guest ;)

Not today.

 

[Herrith]

Not today.

Maybe today.

 

[Marf]

I think you can stop with the spam now, guys.

@Infintus @Herrith Hendarsin

 

[Apollyon]

I just read your post and then looked over your character, for a initiate he seems to have a deep understanding of the Force and the Dark Side. Most notably his ability to utilize an AoE version of Drain Life (which isn't instant and is a ritual that is easily interrupted here) on top of that his force push can insta-kill people? In your post with him I noticed you said he slowed time, I don't know if that was his perception of time slowing to show Force enhanced senses or not but slowing time is neigh impossible. We go off of nucanon (disney) Force powers and it's limitations not Legends. This character seems to be inspired and adhering to Legends material rather then current Canon material.

I'd suggest toning him back if he is supposed to be an initiate...heavily. If you need some ideas on how to do that without ruining his concept let me know, I'd love to help!

 

[Infintus]

I just read your post and then looked over your character, for a initiate he seems to have a deep understanding of the Force and the Dark Side. Most notably his ability to utilize an AoE version of Drain Life (which isn't instant and is a ritual that is easily interrupted here) on top of that his force push can insta-kill people? In your post with him I noticed you said he slowed time, I don't know if that was his perception of time slowing to show Force enhanced senses or not but slowing time is neigh impossible. We go off of nucanon (disney) Force powers and it's limitations not Legends. This character seems to be inspired and adhering to Legends material rather then current Canon material.

I'd suggest toning him back if he is supposed to be an initiate...heavily. If you need some ideas on how to do that without ruining his concept let me know, I'd love to help!

I highly appreciate your analysis and will take it into account, I know I haven't had time to change it. Btw it wasn't that he slowed down time, it felt like it thats how he deflected it, as if he can do that pfffft LOL no way in hell could that happen.