Taz
SWRP Writer
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@Styx slightly annoying that you asked for edits, and then say that said edits some how effect increased timing. The jetpack hover happens as the floor gives way, it doesn't add time. Look at Fett or Mandos during Clone Wars see the effectiveness and quickness in witch a mando could effectively move and react with a jetpack.
More important though is your last two paragraphs. The attack on Rim needs more attention and better detail because it's hard to get a mental image. To me it seems you are trying to superman leap (or hop) to miss Dax's attacks. In that "hop" you are somehow managing to both connect with Rim's rips and grap his wrist on the same side and push his arm downward. What???
More important though is your last two paragraphs. The attack on Rim needs more attention and better detail because it's hard to get a mental image. To me it seems you are trying to superman leap (or hop) to miss Dax's attacks. In that "hop" you are somehow managing to both connect with Rim's rips and grap his wrist on the same side and push his arm downward. What???
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