Tessa Danstari

Tessa Danstari

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BASIC CHARACTER SHEET

NAME: Tessa Danstari
FACTION: Sith Empire
RANK: unranked at this time
SPECIES: Echani

AGE: 30 galactic standard years.
GENDER: Female
HEIGHT: 5’7” (67 inches)
WEIGHT: 150 lbs.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, no formal training

APPEARANCE:
Shoulder-length white hair, silver/blue eyes. Pale skin, typical traits of her Echani bloodline. Small scar on her left cheek.

ATTRIBUTES:

Tessa was orphaned at a young age, and left for dead on Dromund Kaas. She fought to survive in the wilderness of the planet by using her instincts and strong connection to the Force. She is headstrong, fierce: both traits forged in her struggle each day to stay alive. Tessa is intelligent, and possesses great dexterity and stamina that she attributes to her self-training over the years.

Though Tessa would not admit to it; one only needs to have a conversation with her to reveal that she is untrusting, and at times apathetic towards others, and certainly timid. While she has an extraordinary “street/survival sense,” her knowledge of the outside worlds is extremely lacking. Her knowledge of economics/finances is also very limited; which makes acquiring goods difficult. This forces her to steal when necessary.

PERSONALITY:
Tessa is an intelligent, headstrong Echani female possessing a strong connection to the Force. Due to her tragic past, she does not trust others or communicates well with other people. She is quick to anger, and lacks empathy for others. This is, in part, due to her solitary upbringing in the wilderness of Dromund Kaas. Tessa yearns to learn more about her past, her family, and her connection to the Force.


BIOGRAPHY:
Tessa has been struggling to survive on Dromund Kaas for many years. She has not received any formal training in the ways of the Force, but she lacks the necessary skills/training to become a true Sith. Tessa is attempting to contact higher Sith authorities to establish herself as potential candidate for further training.

SKILLS:


Force-sensitive: no formal training, has been using the Force as a tool of survival.

GEAR:

Backpack (containing her few personal belongings)

ROLE-PLAYS:
None at this time

RELATIONSHIPS:
Does not trust others, therefore difficult to establish relationships in her past.

SHIP:
N/A

DROIDS:
N/A

PETS:

N/A

KILLS:


None yet

COMBAT:
None yet
 
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Tessa Danstari

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Please comment and provide any constructive criticism! I am still somewhat new to RP, so any help will be greatly appreciated. Take care!
 

christhebetrayer

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So first things first, I've just given this a quick scan and I'm not a mod so take everything with a grain of salt but as of right now i don't see your character getting approved at the moment, because of the holocrons. Holocrons will have to go since you can't start with them they have to be earned through plots, so your character learning from one is not likely to slide so I recommend changing her backstory to that of any standard acolyte, which is being discovered as force-sensitive and sent to a sith academy for training, and I would recommend putting a solid age on the profile, the mods tend to want that.

one last thing you don't need to be approved to start Rping, approval is just for faction missions and events.
 

Darasuum

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@Tessa just to let you know people only post profiles that they feel are ready to be reviewed here. If you want to continue to work on your profile before posting it for review then player workshops is the best place. If you are ready for review just remove that WIP in the title.
 

Darasuum

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@Darasaurus Thank you very much for the information. I have posted my WIP profile in the forum you suggested with some changes. I will provide the profile below that is ready for initial review.

BASIC CHARACTER SHEET

NAME: Tessa Danstari
FACTION: Sith Empire
RANK: unranked at this time
SPECIES: Echani

AGE: 30 galactic standard years.
GENDER: Female
HEIGHT: 5’7” (67 inches)
WEIGHT: 150 lbs.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, no formal training

APPEARANCE:
Shoulder-length white hair, silver/blue eyes. Pale skin, typical traits of her Echani bloodline. Small scar on her left cheek.

ATTRIBUTES:

Tessa was orphaned at a young age, and left for dead on Dromund Kaas. She fought to survive in the wilderness of the planet by using her instincts and strong connection to the Force. She is headstrong, fierce: both traits forged in her struggle each day to stay alive. Tessa is intelligent, and possesses great dexterity and stamina that she attributes to her self-training over the years.

Though Tessa would not admit to it; one only needs to have a conversation with her to reveal that she is untrusting, and at times apathetic towards others, and certainly timid. While she has an extraordinary “street/survival sense,” her knowledge of the outside worlds is extremely lacking. Her knowledge of economics/finances is also very limited; which makes acquiring goods difficult. This forces her to steal when necessary.

PERSONALITY:
Tessa is an intelligent, headstrong Echani female possessing a strong connection to the Force. Due to her tragic past, she does not trust others or communicates well with other people. She is quick to anger, and lacks empathy for others. This is, in part, due to her solitary upbringing in the wilderness of Dromund Kaas. Tessa yearns to learn more about her past, her family, and her connection to the Force.


BIOGRAPHY:
Tessa has been struggling to survive on Dromund Kaas for many years. She has not received any formal training in the ways of the Force, but she lacks the necessary skills/training to become a true Sith. Tessa is attempting to contact higher Sith authorities to establish herself as potential candidate for further training.

SKILLS:


Force-sensitive: no formal training, has been using the Force as a tool of survival.

GEAR:

Backpack (containing her few personal belongings)

ROLE-PLAYS:
None at this time

RELATIONSHIPS:
Does not trust others, therefore difficult to establish relationships in her past.

SHIP:
N/A

DROIDS:
N/A

PETS:

N/A

KILLS:


None yet

COMBAT:
None yet
I did not mean just repost your entire character sheet in a comment. You can just edit the original post.
 

The Good Doctor

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Hey there! Switched your posts to your OOC account (sub accounts are for use in the roleplay sections only, and here is a guide to make sure your subaccount is working proper here). If you need any help with this aspect just let us know!

Anyways, the character as in is fine. Although it reads like an indie character right now, although I'll approve since this character is pre-destined for the Sith.
 
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