Shyr

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Essential Information
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NAME: Shyr
FACTION: Hutt Cartel
RANK: Prospect
SPECIES: Epicanthix
AGE: 53
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 1.82 meters
WEIGHT: 95 Kilograms
EYES: Hazel
HAIR: Brown
SKIN: The lightest shade of brown
CREDITS: 1,000 credits
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Scars, wrinkles, tattoos and an increasing amount of gray hair.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, a former Imperial Knight

STRENGTH: Stronger than most.

DEXTERITY: Has the cardio strength and endurance of a semi-professional athlete.
CONSTITUTION: Can take more than a few punches.
INTELLIGENCE: Sharp thinking, educated but not necessarily academic.
WISDOM: As wise as the average 50 year old that has made lots of mistakes in his life.
CHARISMA: People tend to take him at his word.
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CHARACTER
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PERSONALITY

Commando: Shyr has always seen himself as a person that runs toward danger instead of away from it.


Outlaw: Shyr only respects those rules which make sense to him and disregards the rest.


Recreation: Wine, women and song might be clichés, but they’re how Shyr chooses to live his life.


Relationships: A woman in every port, he connects with them for a brief moment and then moves on. Like a leaf on the wind.


Swooper: Shyr is a dangerous man that does bad things for money and he’s made his peace with that.


SKILLS

Force Abilities: As an Imperial Knight Shyr learned and mastered basic force abilities like Enhance Attribute, Force Jump, Magnify Senses, Mind Trick, Force Punch, Force Reflex, Force Sight, Force Speed, Telekinesis, and Telepathy.


K'tara: As a Storm Commando Shyr learned the martial art of K’Tara which emphasizes short movements that disarm and disable opponents as quietly as possible. He continued learning and using K’Tara as an Imperial Knight.


Lightsaber Combat: As an Imperial Knight Shyr learned the ins and outs of Form V When utilizing Shien he uses a normal grip, as opposed to the reverse grip that is common with the form.


Special Operator: Being a Storm Commando doesn’t just mean that Shyr knows how to shoot and move tactically, it also means he knows how to plan and coordinate missions in detail.


Piloting: Whether it is a swooper, a speeder, a fighter or a freighter, Shyr can proficiently pilot anything with a repulsorlift or a hyper drive that is less than 100 meters long.

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Strengths and Weaknesses
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STRENGTHS

Ambidextrous: Shyr can use both hands at once with equal skill, which often means shooting a pistol while using his lightsaber.


Combat Experience: Not everyone has heard a blaster fired in anger, Shyr has heard plenty and knows how to react under pressure.


Confidence: Real confidence isn’t planning perfectly or being right all the time, it’s being decisive and committed which Shyr is.


Reputable: Though he lives the life of a scoundrel, his background is more legitimate and trustworthy which is comforting to some contacts and clients.


Tactical Paranoia: Shyr is always scanning the horizon. He notes the entrances and exits of every building he is in and where cover is


WEAKNESSES


Conscience: A conscience is a dangerous thing to have for a crook.


Disregard for Consequences: Shyr lives by a code and to enforce that code he will be as violent as necessary, the world be damned.


Notoriety: It’s hard to be a force using, lightsaber wielding criminal and maintain a low profile.


Word: Shyr may be a con but if he says he’s gonna do something you can bet he’ll at least try to do it, which can make you predictable in the underworld.


Vengeance: Once someone has pissed Shyr off, no amount of time or distance will keep him from making that someone regret it.


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POSSESSIONS
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GEAR:
Errant-series Armored Vest

Imperial Knights Lightsaber

Manta M13 Pistol

LSS 1000 Mark V stun cuffs

MTIG, MK I

SHIP: Rothana Heavy Engineering Halo-class Gunship

DROIDS:
3D-4X administrative droid

FEG-series pilot droid

LE-series repair droid

GH-7 medical analysis unit

SPEEDER: STG-12A "Stag"

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BIOGRAPHY
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969 ABY - Born in Imperial Army Camp
Shyr’s father was an older senior noncommissioned officer in the Imperial Army and his mother was a midlevel NCO in the Storm Troopers. Before he turned one years old his mother died valiantly in combat.

970 ABY - Raised in Imperial Mission

After the death of his wife, Shyr’s father took his infant son with him to the Imperial Mission on Bastion and lived out the twilight of his days as a missionary, while Shyr grew into becoming a young man.

986 ABY - Storm Commando

At the age of sixteen Shyr began a rigorous pipeline of military training. After becoming a Storm Commando he spent the next few years making war in all the far points in the galaxy.

992 ABY - Imperial Knight

After proving himself loyal to the Emperor and incredibly capable, it was discovered that he was force sensitive. He joined the Imperial Knights and was successful among their number for a decade.

1,002 ABY - Rise of the Sith

When the Sith returned to the galactic stage and usurped the Empire for a second time, the Imperial Knights were murdered and scattered. Shyr made sure to get lost and did his best to fly under the radar.

1,012 ABY - Damned Forever, Forever Damned

After a few years, Shyr found met cool people. He had been hanging out with them for a time when they asked him to become a prospect. Several adventures later he became a fully patched member of the Riders of the Damned.

1,022 ABY - Joined the Hutts

With Nar Shaddaa on the brink of war the Riders of the Damned wanted closer relations to the largest power that represented their values. So Shyr stepped up as the most viable candidate to join the Hutt Cartel proper.
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ROLE PLAYS
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KILLS: N/A
BOUNTIES COLLECTED: N/A
DUELING RING MATCHES: N/A
GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES: N/A
ROLE-PLAYS: N/A
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Zay

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Hey! I really like where your going with the character.

I'm reviewing it now to accept you into the Hutt's. I need you to elaborate on why the Hutt's actually wanted to take you in as a prospect. Just wanting to commit crime isn't enough reason for the Hutt's to seek you out and recruit you specially. I've literally only seen that happen once on the site and it wasn't straight from character creation.

I'd really like you to expand on the biography a bit. Especially why the Cartel want you. Keep in mind there are ton's of hunters already in the cartel. Why would they seek Shyr out specifically?
 

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Updated. Thanks for the thoughtful critique. The only reason the character profile is abbreviated is because I wanted to jump into the tail end of this timeline and get my feet wet in this group before this timeline ends.
 

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I have had a read through this character, and I must admit I like him - and a very good use of formatting and code to make a very presentable and easy to read profile.

Description wise, everything looks good, I just hope none of his numerous 'acquaintances' every meet! :P

There may be an issue with the amount of force-abilities he has when starting out, so potentially lowering it down to force pull and push, telekinesis and mind trick (all at basic level) would be an idea? They can of course all be trained up in training and combat threads, so you can still have them - you just need to see the character 'progress' first.

A very good, and comprehensive list of weaknesses that certainly ties in well with the 'look' of the character as well, however he does have a large number of droids - personally I cannot see this being an issue as none of them are combat ones though!

Other than the point about force powers, this looks like a really good first Character, and a very menacing bounty hunter to have after you!
 
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