Sara Nonomyth

[Horizon]

I suggest you take some of what these people are saying to heart when it concerns this profile. The double bladed lightsaber is a huge stretch. Also the fact that someone is young does not mean their history can't be interesting or at least explained.

 

[HK-2E]

Besides, the whole double bladed lightsaber thing is really cheap when put with a 20 year old that looks... 8... cheap-grand-Cherokee.

 

[Horizon]

Besides, the whole double bladed lightsaber thing is really cheap when put with a 20 year old that looks... 8... cheap-grand-Cherokee.

Yes that point has already been made.

 

[HK-2E]

Yes that point has already been made.

Aw damn it.

 

[Neo Shark]

If you wanted to keep the picture you could probably drop the (Appears 8) portion and just mention in her personality that she is sensitive about her breast size (might give this character a little extra flavor you can expand on). Btw, what is her personality like?

 

[Zen]

Might want to add the gender:female portian into the bio. I know her name is Sara and you refer to her as "she" several times, but just looking at the picture one might assume that your character is EXTREMELY missinformed about their gender.

When you say "appears 8", do you mean she looks like an 8 year old child? If so I would have to agree with the others that you may want to look into changing your picture. The size and stature doesn't look childlike at all. Also I don't believe 8 year old children have the heighth to be able to weild a double bladed light saber, but I could be mistaken.

It's hard to find a pic of a 8 year old child Dark Jedi.

 

[Neo Shark]

It doesn't neccesarily need to look like a dark jedi. Just find an image that closely resembles your mental image of your character and pick that. Dark clothing and a lightsaber does not a dark jedi make.

 

[Zen]

It doesn't neccesarily need to look like a dark jedi. Just find an image that closely resembles your mental image of your character and pick that. Dark clothing and a lightsaber does not a dark jedi make.

But there only few online.

 

[Dmitri]

But there only few online.

http://corupted-data.deviantart.com/art/Join-me-210453809?q=boost:popular little girl sith&qo=53

http://darthhorus.deviantart.com/ar...819817?q=boost:popular little girl sith&qo=69

 

[Horizon]

Alright so here we go..

Zen, half of your profile here is practically stating whom she is related to. I wouldn't even consider that history worthy. The second half is just stating her goals within the Bogan and wanting to become a Crusader. I don't even know if anyone will take on this character. (I certainly wouldn't but hey that's just me)

All in all you need to rewrite this character. As a side note, I have to agree with everyone else on the family thing. Only other person to have a family esque line of characters is Jiang. But I believe many other people actually roleplay as those characters. Just not one person, Zen.

Also, I'll be looking for a picture to better suit what you're looking for. Better yet, I think you should bump the age up. I know roleplaying as a child is different and all but you will be bogged down by quite a few limitations.

 

[Zen]

Alright so here we go..

Zen, half of your profile here is practically stating whom she is related to. I wouldn't even consider that history worthy. The second half is just stating her goals within the Bogan and wanting to become a Crusader. I don't even know if anyone will take on this character. (I certainly wouldn't but hey that's just me)

All in all you need to rewrite this character. As a side note, I have to agree with everyone else on the family thing. Only other person to have a family esque line of characters is Jiang. But I believe many other people actually roleplay as those characters. Just not one person, Zen.

Also, I'll be looking for a picture to better suit what you're looking for. Better yet, I think you should bump the age up. I know roleplaying as a child is different and all but you will be bogged down by quite a few limitations.

I'll bump the age a bit, And thanks for the pic. As for History It will be reedit after She is promoted to Crusader with actuality events.