Independent Retito

[Xslither]

NAME
► Retito
TITLE
► N/A
AGE
► 67
SPECIES
► Trandoshan
HEIGHT
► 9 inches
WEIGHT
► 207kg
BUILD
► tall Trandoshan
EYE COLOR
► Brown
CREST COLOR
► Green
HOMEWORLD
► Kashyykkk
GENDER
► Male
FACTION
► Bounty hunter and empire
RANK
► head Trandoshan of the empire
FORCE SENSITIVITY
► No
Weaknesses
Very agresive
Very hungry
Bad at negotiating
Inventory
sniper rifle/electric staff
Knife
Deadly teeth

 

[The Good Doctor]

Hello there, welcome to the boards

head Trandoshan of the empire

Can you clarify what this means? I'd imagine that even if Trandosha isn't in the Empire, there would be quite a few of them. But I don't think starting as the head of them is plausible.

Is this a independent character, or an Imperial character? If the latter, the Empire prefix should be used.

Also, can you post some sort of biography for your character? It doesn't have to be long, but as is, a reader basically knows little about the character. Who they are, a brief history of them .etc

Thanks

 

[Xslither]

Ok thanks for all the advice

 

[Xslither]

Where should I put it?

 

[The Good Doctor]

in the first post, wherever you want. maybe under the other infomation