Ranger Horny

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Some parts seemed like yesterday yet others seemed only as a faded memory, Skewed between reality and dream these memorys virtually were non-existance and nearly always in question. The important parts of life seemingly playing out in the brown liquad that I seemed fixated on. My mouth moved as if experiencing it all at once but not a voice was said.

Parents are nothing more then two black shadows standing in a lighted doorway. Why can't I Remember anything from my early childhood. Everything a blur of colors. I still stay up at nights wondering if it were real or if I made it up for a sense of belonging. A smile is brought to my face as I thinks of the people who made up my family. It was all my friends, Co-workers, even those above me. It was a large immediate family. Most of which I wish I had never met as there faces seem to blow in the wind. A tear drops from me, the aged Gotal's tear making a rippling effet in the liquad that I now had come to call my memorys.

The Rangers who I had come to depend on gone vanished. A quick memory comes back to me as my face soon loses its once happy grin. I'm is at the academy and holding a gun for the first time. I remembered hating that I couldn't hold the gun that all the other rangers used. I fired it for the first time and fell in love with the sound it made. The effect it had. How I could completely fall into a trance listening to that sound. To some it made them jumpy but not to me.

Every one of my family members would one by one fade from my memory. But why? whowas it that was causing this tragic event to happen. I would always replied with they are dead but I knew the truth. Constantly running from it but never agreeing on it. It was him, I was the executor in isolating myself. my head moves to the right as another memory flashes back. I was learning to track for the first time. I remember that I was always good at that and how I loved to show it off even if people thought I was stuck up.

Thats it, my memory quickly breaks away, that name they decided. It was short and too the point, More or less a human name for me. Horny.......Horny. Nothing but black faces why can't I remember what they look like.....why?

I was the best of the lot but it wasn't good enough. I had to be better. Better than any damn ranger was. Better than the jedi and the sith. I hated those with force powers at the academy, they would constantly ridicule me and tease me playing tricks with there stupid little force powers. I takes a swing from my liquad momentarily pausing the memory. I could kill any of them if I wanted now and would relish to see them try and run and hide.

Suddenly a beeping sound can be heard. Quite at first but then getting louder like a hand slowly pulling me out of my sea. I finally burst through the surface and take a scull of the liquad slamming the glass on the table and sending small dripslets going flying only noticable to the most attentive. Quickly feeling around my pocket I grab a small datapad and bring it to my face. Clicking a button silence once again takes over but this time. nothing. Quickly placing my pad back in my pocket I quickly grabs my cap and places it in a rather tilting position on my head. Giving a sigh of relief I quickly swings the strap of my AR-1 blaster rifle around my soldier and stands up. Giving a rather loud burp I tips my hat to the man standing at the counter and walks out.

The sun hits my eyes and I quickly covers myself with my arm. Soon my sorrundings reveal themselves to me and I lowers my arm. The sound of an engine priming can be heard and I starts jogging to board a shuttle.

"Where are you heading today?" Said a very curious and rather noisy human

"Anywhere but here" I replied as I walked by and waved my hand to dismiss the person.
 
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I did not think of the name at the time of writing it. Not until I acutally had put it up and yeaaaaaaaa.

but anyways this is my first narrative type of profile so give me comments guys. I need to know how I can improve and what you thought ETC.
 

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You can change the title if you want to. Either in the edit screen of your post, or go to the character profiles board and double click on the thread's title. (I believe that works. I discovered it by accident with one of my own profiles.)

Or just pm an admin and ask them to change it for you, of course.

Or keep the name! =)

As for the profile, I see a few typos, you might want to read it over. Also, a tip, center the pic at the top. I personally think it looks cooler if it's centered.

At some points, after a comma, you used capital letters. That's not necessary, unless they're names.

You also started out in third person, then switched to first person. Did you do that on purpose? I was a little bit confused.

Profile itself isn't bad, though! Seems like an interesting character. Just solve these issues and it should be fine. =)

I hope this was helpful. ^^
 
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i like the narrative- its good. considering i prefer narratives abov most. its good :) but horny ? ... i don't even...
 

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i like the narrative- its good. considering i prefer narratives abov most. its good :) but horny ? ... i don't even...

There has to be one person in the galaxy who has this unfortunate name :CStern
 

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So now you have Senator Fatty and Horny Ranger.
 

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it seems that my mind is conditional to curse me with bad names.

Anyways thanks for the critque I will get on it. Oh and you are right I did change but i think it was an accident so I will fix it
 
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