Primus Matrix

[Jordan A]

NAME: Primus Matrix
FACTION: None
RANK: None
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 20
GENDER: male
HEIGHT: 6'2
WEIGHT: 190 Pounds
EYES: Ice Blue
HAIR: Dark Brown
SKIN: Fair
CREDITS: 1,000 Credits
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Scar from vibroblade on chest
DOMINATE HAND: ambidextrous
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: 6/10 Average
DEXTERITY: 4/10 Average
CONSTITUTION: 10/10
INTELLIGENCE: 5/10
WISDOM: 5/10
CHARISMA: 4/10 Average

FORCE POWERS:
Force push
Force pull



SKILLS:
Lightsaber combat - A very small amount of it
Cooking - Primus knows the basic of cooking food.
Hand to hand - Able to fight from training on Duro and time as jedi
LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
The basics nothing fancy



STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:

Strengths
Lightsaber combat
Hand to hand combat
Cooking
Using the force

Weaknesses
Can't swim
Can't speak anything but basic and the duro's language and a little bit of catharese.

GEAR:
Weapons ---
Vibroblade
Blaster Pistol

Clothes ---
A dark blue cloak
Black tight pants
A black shirt
black shoes

SHIP:
Battered old thing called "The junker" used to get from planet to planet and nothing really else.

PETS:
None
PERSONALITY:
Primus is a outgoing person. He is greedy. He loves to watch people bleed.
Primus loves to cook. He is known to be depressed most of the time.
He is also fights for what he believes in.

Primus now is a talkative person and he no longer loves to see people bleed.
He doesn't really fight for what he believes in anymore now he just fights for the
fun of it . He no longer sees fun in cooking. He isn't all that greedy. He has become more aggresive.

HISTORY: Primus was raised on Ossus by a bounty hunter who gave Primus to the jedi order seeing as he was force sensetive. [And he couldn't afford to keep him any longer] Primus at the age of 16 was trained by master Somorosla. His master taught him everything he knew of the force.
Often Primus and his master sparred. Primus and him alway went until the other gave up. some times until one of them bleed. [They healed afterwards]

The sparring would last sometimes hours for Primus loved to train with a lightsaber. [Longest spar lasted a half a day] during the sparring matches
Primus unaware was learning to use a lightsaber and to use the force.
One match Primus was cut deeply in the chest with a lightsaber. Primus healed it. Filled with anger from the pain he chopped off his master's arm.
Then Primus fled to Duro to live the rest of his life as a mercenary/bounty hunter.

After a few months on the planet he encountered a dark jedi Arsen Tane and bounty hunter Sayuka. Also he met Mia. Primus and Sayuka were going to kill dark jedi killer Surge. When Mia arrived and spied on them. Then Primus and Sayuka collected information of Surge's location.

Then arrived the dark jedi and Sayuka and Primus had a brief encounter with him. Then Primus attempted to kill Sayuka then left Duro. He then arrived on a station above Anaxes there he had a drink at the cantina then he met a rogue named Logan bishop and a cathar named Kayin. Then arrived Grazo and Justin. Primus had a brief shootout against Justin with the help of Grazo. He wounded Justin then he left the place to go to Manaan.


KILLS:

DUELING RING MATCHES:

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:

ROLE-PLAYS:

Getting information
Seeking Safety

 

[Jiang Winters]

Uhm... If I'm not mistaken, you can't start your character out with all those force skills or with lightsaber training. You need to sign your char up with the Jedi and get training to access those skills, or obtain authorization from an admin to have your char start out this powerful. Plus, your personality is kinda... Iffy. It's like you wrote down the basic ideas for his personality, but never elaborated on them or thought them through.

But at least you filled out the minimum required number of sentences for the history and personality sections... Kind of, anyways...

 

[Jordan A]

Uhm... If I'm not mistaken, you can't start your character out with all those force skills or with lightsaber training. You need to sign your char up with the Jedi and get training to access those skills, or obtain authorization from an admin to have your char start out this powerful. Plus, your personality is kinda... Iffy. It's like you wrote down the basic ideas for his personality, but never elaborated on them or thought them through.

Fixed that problem. :CIsee:

 

[Jaqen H'ghar]

Fixed that problem. :CIsee:

No really, you didn't. You can have a limited as in i-can-move-a-tiny-rock-with-my-mind amount of telekinesis when starting out, and no lightsaber skills.

Sign up with a force sensitive faction and get training then you can have all the fun toys.

 

[Jordan A]

Now are you happy? :CStern:

 

[Jordan A]

Updated the following
Personality - another
paragraph added
Stats updated - Charisma lowered Strength increased lowered dexterity
History has been updated. :CIsee:

 

[Jordan A]

History has been updated. :CIsee:

 

[Kaeb]

History has been updated. :CIsee:

Stop using that smiley, its unnessacary. As for the history it needs to be longer.

 

[Jordan A]

The rules say a history that is two paragraphs long or three mine is four what is the problem?

 

[Justin]

It seem's a little dry and from being on the reciving end of alot of your attacks, I know that you can add a little more flavor to it and define charactor better. If you can't think how maybe talk more of the Bounty Hunter who raised him.

 

[Trakon]

It seem's a little dry and from being on the reciving end of alot of your attacks, I know that you can add a little more flavor to it and define charactor better. If you can't think how maybe talk more of the Bounty Hunter who raised him.

^^I like the bolded idea.

EDIT: If you are going to have 'paragraphs' that are three sentences long, make each sentence 30+ words, so we can get a better idea of what happened. You gave a brief history about what happened, but never elaborated on any of the actions involved.

 

[Jordan A]

EDIT: If you are going to have 'paragraphs' that are three sentences long, make each sentence 30+ words, so we can get a better idea of what happened. You gave a brief history about what happened, but never elaborated on any of the actions involved.

I could but I'm not very good using this thing ","

It seem's a little dry and from being on the reciving end of alot of your attacks, I know that you can add a little more flavor to it and define charactor better. If you can't think how maybe talk more of the Bounty Hunter who raised him.

I'm sorry but Primus is just a violent person, also a nasty cut being received don't really count as a attack. Especially when it was gained on accident seeing as Primus didn't plan to attack Mira at all. The bounty hunter that raised him didn't do much so I guess I could only fit two more sentences in there about him. Seeing as the man ditched Primus at the Temple on Ossus once he found Primus was force adept. Still I could use this criticism.