Kal-Nar

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NAME:
Kal-Nar
FACTION:
Jedi
RANK: Jedi Knight
SPECIES: Cathar
AGE: 45
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 1.9 M
WEIGHT: 120 kg
EYES: Blue
HAIR: Brown
APPEARANCE:
Kal-Nar has a fur covered body with a thick mane you can see his retractable claws at times and elongated canine teeth. his distinctly leonine features. Can not be mistaken for anything He is a Cathar. Kal-Nar dark brown thick fur covers his body chin hair is longer appearing like a beard He has his fur braided here and there. His eyes are light blue with black slits in them. His is muscular, large bone structure with strong Cathar facial fetchers. Normally dressed in Jedi robes with a utility belt.
STRENGTH: He is average for his race.
DEXTERITY: Fast reflexes and agile quick his feet.
CONSTITUTION: Cathar bodies do possessed rapid healing abilities.
INTELLIGENCE: Kal-Nal is average
WISDOM: He has travailed the universe and studded instinctively. His in sites to life are refreshing.
CHARISMA: With his personality gets along with just about anyone but some times his temper can be in his way.
PERSONALITY:
Kal-Nal has a high since of moral values learned from both family and society. He is known for his loyalty, passion, and his temper which makes him very driven in all that he dose. He Is standoffish and assertive, and unlike many Jedi, doesn't shy away from confrontation. He is known on the battlefield for his ferocity, and is definitely a force to be reckoned with. This is a result of his younger days in the Cathar fighting stile. . Has a strong disdain for any kind of slavery, and finds it very difficult to view slavers objectively. Tends to be very persuasive when he needs to be with or with out his light sabers. Prefers simple things and being in nature, and would much rather not deal with technology if he can avoid it. He has a very high tendency to blur the lines between black and white with lots of gray in between. He has been rebellious even against his superiors at times when it comes to Sith. In his older age he tends to be humble but he is dedicated to the Jedi way of life.
BIOGRAPHY:
Son of the Clan leader Kal-Nar came to the Jedi at a young age. Like most kids he was 4 when he saw his parents fly away. His family thought it would be best for him to travail this path. Most of his kin has been in slavery or at war for a century. His father knew Master Walc and desired this path for Kar-Nar. From a baby Kal-Nar showed signs of the Force and they showed the strongest signs at age 4. He was given to Master Walc he is also Cathar and apart of his clan. He learned his high since of moral values and about his society from him. They relocated to a dissident plaint of Dantooine. His Master did not did not say much about the move but all the students knew of the on going war. He stayed with his master until his death. It was his death that all most destroyed Kal-Nar sending him in to a pit of anger.
It was the sith that killed his Master and it was Kar-Nal would avenge his masters death. His loyalty and passion to his master that got him in trouble. His temper did not help.
The Jedi leaders decided he was to attached to his Master and he was slipping to the dark side with his anger. The Jedi reassigned him to a new Master, Master Ienza she was Echani and a lot different master. Master Ienza had to get him to refocus and calm his anger. Master Ienza did get though to Kal-Nar. She showed him new Echani katas in light saber and marshal arts training helped him to focus and manage his way of thinking. With her guidance he made it all the way to the trails it took him longer than most. He has pasted the trails and now on his own.
He has spent years fighting with the Jedi and its Forces agents the Sith. Helping the Jedi make there way back to grandness in the universe. When he heard the Sith attack on Tython and the Order and were destroyed Kal-nal went to help. When we arrived there was nothing left the hole place was destroyed he returned back to peaceful planet of Dantooine. He has been operating from peaceful planet of Dantooine and the temple there. He has been working on his Jedi skills and leading attacks agents the Sith order with other Jedi and Jedi forces. He has made friends with a soldier name Rogwil. Together they have been working on hunting down the Sith and destroying there lines of supply. In this time Kal-Nar had developed a king sense for the sith he studied everything he could on them so he could do one thing kill them. He grows older now and has been studding the consequences of war for a year now with a lot of his friends dead now he struggles to keep his feeling in control.
FORCE POWERS: Yes
Force Powers Areas
Acrobatics, Enhance his physical prowess, reflexes, strength and speed average level
Energy Manipulation absorption average level
Telekinesis Push, pull, lift, average level
Healing base healing level
Effects Open close things turn things on and off, average level
Trances getting in to a Trance takes time for him, average level
Sense vary sensitive to the dark side of the force, above average level
Mental Manipulation Jedi mine trick Ha, low level
SKILLS:
Kal-Nal is an accomplished sword specialists he has been trained in form Shien / Djem So and form Jar'Kai he relies heavily on his light sabers he rarely wears armor. His marshal arts DO-claw as his race calls it he is almost at its peek. His Fores skills are average for a Jedi knight. He has had a chance to work with his Clan and has learned grate tracking skills that he used agents the Sith. He has had some military training working with the Jedi forces. Like most Jedi he woks on his piloting skills when he can. He dose specialties on hunting the Sith all the years of training his senses are fine tuned for this job. studying the enemy he has not killed one Sith yet they keep getting away before the final blow.

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Kal-Nal is an accomplished swordman, his marshal arts DO-claw is at its high. Having a chance to work with his Clan and has learned grate tracking skills. He dose poses some military training working with the Jedi forces. Like most Jedi he woks on his piloting skills when he can. He dose specialties on hunting the Sith. All the years of training his senses are fine tuned for this job. Studying the enemy every move he has learned a lot he has not killed one Sith yet they keep getting away before the final blow. Kal-Nar is good at delivering powerful attacks on foes. His race makes his traits the perfect hand-to-hand specialists. his cat like reflexes with his heighten sight smell and hearing get him out of a lot of trouble. His temper can still get to him in trouble he has been know to be harsh and even hard on people that get in his way of a mission. His anger has got him in trouble with the ruling Masters many times. he can be blind in to battle He can lose his control and his control of the force. As an ambassador he has drawn his light saber out of his anger. This has got him in to many traps in the past.
GEAR:
Utility Belt In wild areas where it is important to bring survival gear, a utility belt will be handy. The utility belt contains compass, a small knife, a fire starting device, and nutritious compact food for two days.
Clothing: Jedi robes and other clothing.
Translator The translator is handy whenever you deal with aliens,keeps on his belt
Datapads electronic information storage devices noted for their small size and portability. This can store a lot of data, it has microprocessors and contain a small holographic projector which gives the user a "heads-up" display. He keeps one on him self on his belt.
Binoculars capable of enhancing vision up to one kilometer this device provide computer-enhanced images as well as information on range and targeting. If attached to his via specialized programming software, it helps with to all medium and long range shots and can provide detailed range and targeting data and often can record a holographic representation of whatever is seen through the binoculars. this equipment is in a pouch on his right side on his belt.
his Light saber keeps it on his right side belt
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His Masters light saber: Dose not always carry it but keeps it on his left side

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SHIP: N-51 Nova-class Starfighter In Green (THE HUNTER)
DROID: M-series Utility/Astromech (Hard ball) Green in color with blaster installed
Roll Plays:
 
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Hey @RED-1! I have a few comments that need to be addressed.
  • Proof Reading: The profile as a whole could do with some proof reading. There are typographical and grammatical errors that could be easily rectified. It would make the whole profile read more smoothly.
  • Attributes: We strongly encourage characters to have weaknesses. Real and sensible weaknesses. Not everyone is good at everything. I can't spot a single weakness here or anything he struggles with. Attributes should reflect strengths and deficiencies.
  • Personality: The minimum word count is 50. You're currently at 43. While 50 is acceptable, again, we strongly encourage more. This gives very little sense of who the character is a person.
  • Biography: Again, there is very little here. The character is 45 years old, that is a significant amount of life lived. He has been a Jedi for 41 years but you only have a small paragraph. I won't force anyone to deeply expand their character but doing the absolute minimum should be avoided. There are several major events missing. It looks like he joined the Jedi Order. If he is a warrior why didn't he join the Army? How did he avoid the destruction of Tython? What did he do after Tython and the Order were destroyed? How to get come to join the Army/re-formed Jedi Order?
  • Skills: Why does hunting Sith come naturally to him? This section could do with a little expansion as well.
  • Strengths and Weakness: My comments are the same as above. The section needs to be expanded and actually weaknesses should be included.
Please tag me or one of the leadership team when the changes have been made!
 

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Hey @RED-1! I have a few comments that need to be addressed.
  • Proof Reading: The profile as a whole could do with some proof reading. There are typographical and grammatical errors that could be easily rectified. It would make the whole profile read more smoothly.
  • Attributes: We strongly encourage characters to have weaknesses. Real and sensible weaknesses. Not everyone is good at everything. I can't spot a single weakness here or anything he struggles with. Attributes should reflect strengths and deficiencies.
  • Personality: The minimum word count is 50. You're currently at 43. While 50 is acceptable, again, we strongly encourage more. This gives very little sense of who the character is a person.
  • Biography: Again, there is very little here. The character is 45 years old, that is a significant amount of life lived. He has been a Jedi for 41 years but you only have a small paragraph. I won't force anyone to deeply expand their character but doing the absolute minimum should be avoided. There are several major events missing. It looks like he joined the Jedi Order. If he is a warrior why didn't he join the Army? How did he avoid the destruction of Tython? What did he do after Tython and the Order were destroyed? How to get come to join the Army/re-formed Jedi Order?
  • Skills: Why does hunting Sith come naturally to him? This section could do with a little expansion as well.
  • Strengths and Weakness: My comments are the same as above. The section needs to be expanded and actually weaknesses should be included.
Please tag me or one of the leadership team when the changes have been made!
ok work on the the requested stuff I hope it is better.
 

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ok work on the the requested stuff I hope it is better.
We are definitely getting close. I really appreciate you taking the time to take the comments into consideration and making the changes. I have just a couple additional small comments.
  • Attributes: I still think some more noticeable deficiencies could be worked in.
  • History: This is 99% fine. The only issue is when Tython was destroyed. Tython and the Jedi Order were destroyed by a Sith Force powered super weapon about 6-ish years ago. Unless he was a very old initiate it would have happened after he was a Jedi Knight. The rest looks fine, that part just needs to be moved around.
  • Aggressive Nature: This is probably boarder line. The mentions of revenge and a temper are a little concerning. However, given the state of the Jedi and the war there are plenty of Jedi who are not serene and peaceful. I will only caution that IC actions do have IC consequences.
@RED-1, we are almost there!
 

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We are definitely getting close. I really appreciate you taking the time to take the comments into consideration and making the changes. I have just a couple additional small comments.
  • Attributes: I still think some more noticeable deficiencies could be worked in.
  • History: This is 99% fine. The only issue is when Tython was destroyed. Tython and the Jedi Order were destroyed by a Sith Force powered super weapon about 6-ish years ago. Unless he was a very old initiate it would have happened after he was a Jedi Knight. The rest looks fine, that part just needs to be moved around.
  • Aggressive Nature: This is probably boarder line. The mentions of revenge and a temper are a little concerning. However, given the state of the Jedi and the war there are plenty of Jedi who are not serene and peaceful. I will only caution that IC actions do have IC consequences.
@RED-1, we are almost there!
I know the about the that IC actions do have IC consequences. and will be interesting to play out I will treat it more like PTSD witch I have trust me it can be a handicap. I did change the history, now I changed Attributes and made them look not so superish.
 

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@RED-1, we are so close! One last very small change that I won't delay approval for. There were no survivors of the attack on Tython, the planet was turned to molten rock pretty much. Imagine a marshmallow being too close to a campfire. Just edit that small part out. Otherwise,

APPROVED!!!

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@RED-1, we are so close! One last very small change that I won't delay approval for. There were no survivors of the attack on Tython, the planet was turned to molten rock pretty much. Imagine a marshmallow being too close to a campfire. Just edit that small part out. Otherwise,

APPROVED!!!

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all done thank you for all your help
 

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congrats on your jedi man
 
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