Kaelis Mar'Kov

[René]

NAME: Kaelis Mar'Kov
FACTION:
RANK:
SPECIES: Dathomirian Zabrak
Alignment: Neutral
Age: 49
Eye Colour: Yellow
Gender: Male
Force Sensitive: Yes, trained by another Sith.

APPEARANCE:
Height: 6' 0"
Head: Several horns protruding from the head (slightly larger than Maul's, for example).
Face: Deep orange + black tatoos across face and rest of the body, eyes are covered by a black headband.
Arms: (Same as above)
Torso: A lightsaber burned scar for every battle he has lost

ATTRIBUTES:
Intelligence: 7/10
Strength: 4/10
Endurance: 6/10
Dexterity: 5/10
Stealth: 7/10
Agility: 6/10
Force Capabilities: 8/10
*Blind*

PERSONALITY:
Kaelis favours technique over brute force in lightsaber combat. He is a menacing, intelligent, powerful, manipulative, arrogant and amoral, yet charismatic person. The methods of accomplishing his goals and gaining power include torture, assassination, and even genocide. He was also willing to abandon or even kill his own followers and allies to achieve his goals or to prove his loyalty to the Sith. He prefers to utilize the Force first over lightsabers, which he views as a formal method of combat. Kaelis is, in all ways, a charasmatic assassin; calculating his movements before stealthily removing his targets from the equation, and adopting the formality of a lightsaber duel when necessary. Political and Dark Side power are his ultimate goals, and the Sith and are simply a catalyst to achieve it. Kaelis also deeply enjoys collecting trophies of his kills. Because of his alcoholic father, he has vowed never to consume alcohol.

The pain of his father's actions as a child make him unable to forgive his father. It is this unwillingness to let go of his hatred from which his power stems. If Kaelis were to forgive his father and accept that the Sith are selfish individuals out for themselves, not the whole, he would fall to the Light Side and defect from the Sith. Deep down, under his cold demeanor and corrupted mind, all he wants is to be loved, to feel respect from another person.

BIOGRAPHY:
Born on Dantooine, the Zabrak Kaelis grew up with a twin sister, dead mother, an alcoholic father, and born blind. His father's constant drinking and street gang membership made him overly abusive to both Kaelis and his sister. On his 14th birthday, his father came home from a bar, extremely drunk and angry that he was turned away from joining a local bounty hunter's guild. Blaming his children for his misfortune, he relentlessly beat them both, eventually taking a hammer and smashing in Kaelis' sister's head. That was the moment he snapped. The young Zabrak, filled with rage, attacked his surprised and drunk father, stabbing him through the back of the neck with a nearby kitchen knife before collapsing from exhaustion and pain, listening to his father choke and take his last breath. After he awoke, Kaelis buried his sister sobing, and burned the house and his father's body. A Twi'lek Sith who was on a mission on the planet took notice, and convinced Kaelis to be her student. He took his new master's first name, Mar'Kov, and made it his new surname to erase his painful past.

After years of training and missions, the now 27 year old asked his weakening master if he had any more left to teach him. When the reply of "No" escaped his master's lips, a blood-red blade leaped from the Zabrak's hand and decapitated the one who provided it's crystal. Now a full-blown Sith, Kaelis Mar'Kov has grown to become one of the more powerful and better respected Sith Mauraders in the Sith Empire throughout his years as a Sith, being almost 50. During his years, he trained vigorously to perfect his dueling and Force capabilities, and also can move around and interact with everything around him as if his eyes could see. Kaelis amassed lots of money over the years and combined it with his old master's small fortune, eventually building himself a large estate on Mustafar, complete with slaves, a staff, and a 4 person personal guard. These guards are Sith Acolytes that Mar'Kov trains, but not fully. He has never taken a formal apprentice, never deeming any initiate he met "worthy" enough to one day take his place. Over time he began to crave the position of Sith Lord and a seat on the Sith Council, due to the fact that he basically worshipped Emperor Malon. This stemmed from the fact that Malon was so powerful in both a physical and political sense, and Kaelis wished to serve under him to learn such great power.

SKILLS:
Force "Sight": 10/10
Telekinesis: 7/10
Telepathy: 4/10
Animal Connection: 5/10
Dueling (Form VII): 9/10
Dueling (Form IV): 5/10
Energy Manipulation: 7/10
Force Body (Augmentation): 6/10
Obscure Arts and Rituals: 2/10

GEAR: MK-5 "Inquisition" combat armour, the gauntlets of which are laced with phrik (can withstand 1 direct lightsaber hit) without added functions. 2 curved hilt, dual-phase, red colored lightsabers are carried at all times, and a black headband is worn over Kaelis' blind eyes. He also carries a DP-09 pistol, two vibroknives, and various grenades (which will change on and case by case basis).

Ships:
A D44-M Gunship, the Dark Griffin.

ROLE-PLAYS:
The Dowager's Demesne [Castle Moon of Leth] (Completed)
Kindling Friendships Inside an Inferno (Abandoned)
Point of the Spear (Completed)
The Rise of Darth Fenris (Completed)
The Retreat of Darth Fenris (Ongoing)

 

[René]

This is a post time-skip character. My second Sith (hopefully he won't die as fast!)

 

[Wit]

A twelve year old child, just blinded with a blowtorch, overpowering and killing an adult is very unrealistic. The father night have been drunk, but he sounds like he would know how to fight and the kid would have passed out from shock. The whole character finally snapping after some great tragedy and unleashing powers way beyond their capabilities is very overused lately and I'd suggest changing that bit.

 

[René]

A twelve year old child, just blinded with a blowtorch, overpowering and killing an adult is very unrealistic. The father night have been drunk, but he sounds like he would know how to fight and the kid would have passed out from shock. The whole character finally snapping after some great tragedy and unleashing powers way beyond their capabilities is very overused lately and I'd suggest changing that bit.

I made it so that he was blind from birth. I kept the rest though. I wouldn't exactly call punching somebody a lot and slitting their throat with a knife "unleashing powers way beyond their capabilities"...

 

[Wit]

You have it written down he beat down his father, picked up a knife, and then slashed his throat. If he had just been blinded, and in a horribly painful way at that, the only way he'd be able to do any of that is if he somehow released some latent Force powers. That is beyond his capabilities. I still think the whole just picked up a knife and killed him bit is a stretch given that he's blind, but have seen weirder things in profiles so as long as you removed the whole blinding bit it's fine by me.

 

[René]

You have it written down he beat down his father, picked up a knife, and then slashed his throat. If he had just been blinded, and in a horribly painful way at that, the only way he'd be able to do any of that is if he somehow released some latent Force powers. That is beyond his capabilities. I still think the whole just picked up a knife and killed him bit is a stretch given that he's blind, but have seen weirder things in profiles so as long as you removed the whole blinding bit it's fine by me.

Ever since Rogue One I've wanted to create a blind force user (Chirrut Îmwe FTW!). Here it is!

 

[Vinny]

If you'd like him to lash out with the force and kill his father, that's fine, but such physical blows from such a young person after such a severe wound-well, I just don't buy it. Give it another look, please.

 

[René]

If you'd like him to lash out with the force and kill his father, that's fine, but such physical blows from such a young person after such a severe wound-well, I just don't buy it. Give it another look, please.

Edit using basic telekinesis instead of physicality.

 

[Kuroshi]

I'm not entirely sure that an untrained force sensitive, let alone a blind child, would have the skill in using the force you've described in the act of him killing his father. To have an example from recent canon Ezra Bridger, while in the early stages of training had to put a lot of concentration on slowly lifting a small item to himself from afar in the episode where he infiltrates the Imperial academy. To have both the precision and speed required to levitate a knife and slice open a person's throat would be near impossible for someone not even aware of their force sensitivity until that moment and is unrealistic.

Also I feel like expanding his biography to possibly multiple paragraphs would help it flow better and show a clear distinction between points in his life. I'd expand on his early life and what he went through on a daily basis, as well as his sith training and how the sith discovered him. And one thing of note, your inspiration for the character (Chirrut Îmwe) is a confirmed Non-force sensitive

 

[Slamdingo]

Just throwing in my two cents: don't give a character a trait for the sake of having that trait. A Mandalorian who's sole defining feature is that they are a Mandalorian, a smuggler who's defining character concept is that they are a smuggler, or a blind Force user who's primary focus is that he's blind and uses the Force. Not to mention that his being blind is sort of a moot trait since he is able to use the Force. In fact in KOTOR II one of your party members has in fact lost her natural sight because she so regularly uses Force sight. But back to the original point - his blindness should be part of him but not be him like it comes across now. Define his emotions and his personality, what he loves and hates, and what he wants to get out of life and then if he still absolutely has to be blind then make it contribute to the whole instead of being the focus.

Plus if you absolutely must have a physically blind character there are races like the Miraluka. They have no physical eyes and almost every last one of them is Force-sensitive from birth to be able to use Force sight.

As for the back-story you say you changed him to being born blind, but then in the Gear section you still reference that it was his father who blinded him.

Not to mention that edgyness is just . . . really overdone. I mean that part has already been perused by those who have been more active on the site than myself, but it strikes me like the blindness: it was put in there to be in there and not because it changes or develops the character. He was going to end up going his own way and joining the Sith regardless of whether his father did that and you as the creator knew it as you were writing the history (by the way saying he both managed to kill a Sith Master and that he's one of the better respected Inquisitors in the whole empire are both pretty big claims by themselves). It seems more like a daddy complex for its sake rather than for how it compels and drives him: for example is he distrustful of other men in general or men in positions of authority now? Does he perhaps detest alcohol since his father was a violent drunk? These are things to consider when you add such traumatic events and circumstances to your character's past. They often irreparably change who they are. Generally not for the better, either. Not to mention that his biography could do with some expansion as has been referenced.