James Burton

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NAME: James Burton
FACTION: He is part of his father’s shipyard’s small Combat Patrol Fleet (CPF)
RANK: Captain
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 25
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 5’11”
WEIGHT: 175 lb
EYES: piercing Blue
HAIR: light brown
SKIN: white
CREDITS: 1,000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: none visible unless he is with a lady.....
DOMINATE HAND: Right
FORCE SENSITIVE: No
STRENGTH: on a scale of one to 10 with one being pathetic 10 being a wookie about a 5.5
DEXTERITY: slightly more so than the average untrained human
CONSTITUTION: perfectly healthy
INTELLIGENCE: Cunning.
WISDOM: he has study a lot
CHARISMA: very good with people.
FORCE POWERS: NONE
SKILLS: Blaster marksman and an acute naval Tactician
LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS: He has a lightsaber resistant sword and is fairly good with it
STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
his strengths are his strategic and tactical abilities his main weakness is his belief that he can some times do the impossible
GEAR:
Uniform of a captain when on duty or civilian clothing when not on duty or aboard a CPF ship his side arm is always with him.
Power suit: with vaccum seal deflects most slug throwers only worn in extream combat conditions
SHIP:freighter 2 light laser turrets 1 medium slugger 4 light rapid fire sluggers Nameless
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PETS: None
PERSONALITY: Although considered by some as a rich spoiled kid, James eventually gained the respect of his peers by being fair, kind, and cunning. When faced with a choice as to the right thing to do and the wrong thing he will (providing he knows which is which) pick the morally right one. However this doesn’t apply to his Military tactics where he constantly puts the lives of the men under his command above those whom are not either his responsibility or associated with him. He takes great pride in his ship and ensures that it is in perfect repair. He has not however had to dig within himself to get to the finish of something. Also he lives by very rigid military guide lines and finds himself feeling akward in many normal situations however he has recently began to over come this feeling and joined the free trade alliance

HISTORY:
His father began and developed a highly successful shipyard that was created 10 years before he was born. By age 5 James was already showing potential in the fields of Piloting and Strategic gaming, especially space warfare. It became clear by the time he was 7 that he could be a promising Commanding Officer on a ship, his father of course encouraged this and began designing what would become the Halcyon Class cruiser.

At the age of 15 James was sent to a promenate Naval academy to be formally trained so that he could receive an official commission in his Father’s fleet program when he graduated at the age of 20. He was the top student in every grade level for tactics and maneuvers, however he didn’t have the grasp of cause and effect that was expected of him and he graduate 3rd in his class… Something that would forever cause him resentment and distaste. His father had the Hippology built for him as his graduation present. Since Than he has proven to be highly compitant at comanding a real capitol ship
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ROLE-PLAYS:
James Burton Fre trade alliance training.
 
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Good'ta see'ya!

At a glance, I think your personality and history are passable, albeit barebones. But that's okay, as long as you fill it out as you progress.
Per your lightsaber-resistant sword, I don't think we've discovered lightsaber-resistant materials yet. I know for a fact that we don't have cortosis.

And to be a grammer nit-picker, watch your punctuation, specifically your .'s (I was going to tell you to watch your periods, but I decided it sounded too wrong). Your commas are fine, which is the grammatical malady that afflicts most of the profiles (but not yours), but yeah. If it's a full sentence, it gets a period. If only a phrase, no. Consistancy!

Overall, nice profile, though. :D
 

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I had actually meant, to delete that part of it. Sorry.
 

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sorry please disreguard last comment
 

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*Update*

Burton Shipyards is a fairly large ship building facillity, that build primarily Military ships the few personal craft built by it are mostly for the use of either the family or their friends.

Sadly, however the ship yards was attacked by either a very large military force or a very angry Pirate. The main yards suffered damage beyond repair and all but one frigate was destroyed or stolen, Hippology returned from it's test flight to late to be of help in the battle.
Hippology (Complete and deployed)
Eohippous (destroyed)
Messohippus (destroyed)
Merychipus (destroyed)
Pleiohippus (destroyed)
Equus (destroyed)

Also they have in the final stages of their construction the Destroyers
Chimera (Stolen)
Hydra (destroyed)

And the frigates
Intrepid ( location withheld holds the VIP of the ship yards as they flee)
Invincible (reactor meltdown)
 
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I'm pretty sure someone of such a low position cannot have such a ship.
 

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lol he's building the Chimera and Hydra.


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Thrawn will come for you.

lol and why do people think the word Halcyon is so cool? It means Peace.
 

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Well, my nickname on most other sites is "The Grammar Nazi," but I think nobody will mind if I don't live up to the title just this once.

Shunting aside any grammar mistakes, the major problem I have is with the name... Why would a character in the Star Wars universe have a name that would not sound out of place in the United States, the U.K., or Canada? I prefer original names, but that's just me.
 

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You have your own shipyards? I'm not even considering approving you for the Republic military until you run that by Grim as it would be an independent faction. You can't just say that so you can have your own cruiser.

And even if your dad gave you a cruiser on your 25th birthday if it was military grade that would be illegal and you can't just saunter into the Navy and say "I won't go where you post me, I'll just use my ship that my Dad gave me and start off as it's captain".

Also you can't say you went to the Naval academy at 15, you can't until you're 18...

Btw do you know that "hippology" is the study of horses? In fact all of the cruiser names pertain to horse creatures (although most of them are misspelled).
 

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Like I have said, you can't just say your character's father has his own patrol fleet. It's bloody illegal. It needs to at least be approved as an independent faction (the shipyards and fleet) before you have have six cruisers...
 
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