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NAME: Garreth
AGE: 25
SPECIES: Human

FACTION: Jedi
RANK: Knight

HEIGHT: 5'11
WEIGHT: 182
HAIR COLOR: Brown
EYE COLOR: Blue

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Garreth's earliest memories are that of a much simpler time. A time where his gift of the force had been given a blessing, two loving parents that gave him the care and training he needed to be able to understand the universe, what he was and who he might become. The smell of soil and pine straw filled the air, a warm light showering its grace upon his cheeks.

A childish smile, one filled with joy.

These memories had been cut short the day the Sith arrived. Their ships blotting out the warm light, replacing the smell of soil and pines with searing flesh and bodies rotting. Their march was that of purpose, a show of force, a vow to be upheld. Garreth watched hopelessly as all he knew and love was cut down beneath those crimson sabers.

Heeding the final cry of his loved ones just before they fell, the boy gave way to his fear and ran from his home and into the now burning fields. In a desperate bid for survival, Garreth hid himself among corpses of those who had fallen protecting the planet. Day turned to night and the ships had moved, the fires had died and all had come to rot and smolder.

Days passed and the boy eventually collapsed alone in the wilderness. Much of what could have been used to his advantage had been destroyed. The sith came here for one reason it had seemed. Complete annihilation of his world.

As the light attempted to fade into inky blackness, Garreth eyed silhouettes surrounding him before the dark took hold. Waking up to chains rattling and the odor of waste, the boy realized had been taken against his will. Freedom had been stricken him by the hands of those who had seized the opportunity. His fate was now tied to those who held the very keys to his chains.


For the next couple of years, the boy worked in various labor camps across various locations. Constantly transported and moved about, Garreth never knew exactly where he was. There was only an idea that continued running through his young mind. An idea that almost seemed to course through his veins simply to keep going when his body was wracked with exhaustion. Death was never an option. The crimson sabers. Those hooded men. The screams.

This was the idea of revenge that spurned Garreth forward.

Eventually he was traded hands with another slaver that had new plans. More of the violent variety. Specifically a fighting ring known as the Rancor's Grotto. The slave master was absolutely ecstatic to see that this young child had a knack for breaking skulls open with his bare hands. Sometimes the boy never even had to touch them. And so Garreth took on adversary after adversary, killing those he was forced to fight against for nearly a year.

The fighting came to an end when a group of mandalorians raided the Grotto, their mission was to free all the slaves, as it was a personal calling they had taken upon themselves. The thugs and slavers never stood a chane and Garreth was given his freedom, but encouraged to join their ranks. And for a time the young boy did. For the time he spent with the mandalorians, his training with firearms and swords had increased and the knowledge of their culture was something he took to heart considering they were his saviors.

But his time with the roaming tribal warriors was numbered. As fate would have it after some years, Garreth stumbled across a robed figure while out on a run to stock up on his supplies. This robed figure reminded him of his father and could have sworn it was him just by his presence. His eyes swelled with tears beneath his t-visor helm as he took it off, unsure of what he was truly doing as he reached for the back of the man's robed.

A gentle face turned and looked to Garreth, a smile and a question soon followed, but the young man couldn't hear the words. Just the smells of tended soil and pine straw. The robed fellow reached for the young man's shoulder and it wasn't just faint memories that came crashing down.

The force had awaken within the boy stricken with war and death.

At first the Jedi was hesitant and ultimately unsure what to do. Their meeting seemed ordained. The Jedi Knight felt it almost impossible to find two individuals such as them and all of in the course of the same day. Garreth trained with Lux, a girl who had escaped another organization to live her own life. At times he would feel almost compelled to dig into her past, but Garreth knew what it was like to lock some doors and never open them again. Eventually through their training, the two of them attained the rank of Knight and were at the order's full disposal for now the time of war was upon them. Garreth had seen his chance for revenge blossom forth and he was determined to seize the opportunity. Regarded at the time as a devout member to the order, he was one of the first knights to volunteer themselves to fight against the sith threat.

The Jedi had pressed the positions of the Sith forces placed on Felucia and the results of their efforts resulted in failure. They had seen losses across the field and one of them had been Garreth as him and a few other knights been routed. Surprised and cut off, they were lost within the jungle itself before being picked off by the sith that tracked them. Garreth was caught and beaten severely, held against his will and tortured to the extent of needing cybernetics after he had been rescued to replace his left arm and part of his face.

Now Garreth spends his remaining time in recovery contemplating the loss of his fellow Jedi, reminiscing on the past and how it all began.



 
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Hey there, so for starters excellent backstory you have here, very well written. However, there are a couple more things I'd like to see before I approve you.

Firstly, you have Garreth's attributes listed in a stat-style. Not that there is anything inherently wrong with this, but this timeline we're trying to move away from that sort of thing. You don't have to remove it, but I'd like to see a couple sentences detailing why he's good/bad in each of those areas.

Secondly, despite the fact you have a lot good stuff written here, you don't have a personality or skills section. What aspects of the Force are he good at, which lightsaber forms are he experienced in? Does he have any other notable skills like piloting or mechanics? Just some food for thought, I'm really liking what you've done with the formatting and character so far though :)
 

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thank you for the critique and compliments. I will edit accordingly.
 
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It's Arcann!!!
 

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poor soul can never snog :( nicely written character though <3
 

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Why do you nerds like this template so much?

I like him. Even if he can't snog, as Nova pointed out already.
 

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Why do you nerds like this template so much?

I like him. Even if he can't snog, as Nova pointed out already.

Probably because it's a very clean template.
 

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Probably because it's a very clean template.

I made it for my Taylor Swift character. Its forever tainted.

@Vosrik - Aside from adding a few words about his personality, do profiles really need an essay on the character's Force abilities to be faction approved? It seems unnecessary. There's plenty of information here otherwise, and there are quite a few Jedi profiles that are far shorter and offer a lot less insight.
 

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I made it for my Taylor Swift character. Its forever tainted.

@Vosrik - Aside from adding a few words about his personality, do profiles really need an essay on the character's Force abilities to be faction approved? It seems unnecessary. There's plenty of information here otherwise, and there are quite a few Jedi profiles that are far shorter and offer a lot less insight.
Though I cannot speak for the previously approved Jedi before I became AFL, Eli made it quite clear to me he was looking for detail like this in future applicants. I wasn't asking for an essay per se on Force abilities either - hence why I said food for thought. Even a sentence or two would be acceptable. If you were to look back at the other applicants I've reviewed, I asked them to do the same.
 

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Though I cannot speak for the previously approved Jedi before I became AFL, Eli made it quite clear to me he was looking for detail like this in future applicants. I wasn't asking for an essay per se on Force abilities either - hence why I said food for thought. Even a sentence or two would be acceptable. If you were to look back at the other applicants I've reviewed, I asked them to do the same.
If all standard Jedi are Knights I don't really see the point of extrapolating relatively useless data. Everyone should be on a generally even playing field.

But to each his own, I reckon.
 

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Though I cannot speak for the previously approved Jedi before I became AFL, Eli made it quite clear to me he was looking for detail like this in future applicants. I wasn't asking for an essay per se on Force abilities either - hence why I said food for thought. Even a sentence or two would be acceptable. If you were to look back at the other applicants I've reviewed, I asked them to do the same.

Alright, let's take a look at what you're asking for.

A sentence or two wouldn't cut it and it'd be a waste of mostly just my time to sit here and create an organizer for a more detailed list of what my character can do in terms of his force abilities and what lightsaber style he is proficient in. While I might understand the latter, but I believe the former to be out of the question.

Reason being is what was stated by Relent. If all Jedi are standard then the point is moot. My character has no extra abilities or anything out of the ordinary. I'm not known to pull anything out of my ass during a thread and I've been here for more than a couple of years.

If this reply seems a bit on the offense, then I apologize, but I do not have the time to be adjusting things considering my schedule with the military.
 

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Not all characters are standard., nor are all characters equal. If they all were, it would make for quite boring RPs.

If there are abilities in which he might have focused, say force healing for one, than it's useful to mention that. There are different levels of abilities and some that take "practice" in order to use. Like the General with his ability to use of force fire (if I remember correctly). I believe that is more along time lines of what is being asked here. Are the any particular force abilities that might have been focused on? Another example - force speed, every Jedi can do it, but not everyone can move at speeds in which one appears to teleport. Consider it not so much a list of all the powers that they can do, just so much as touching on any of these particular aspects in which your character might be more skilled than others. Are they a focused healer, or a mind type. etc? (please keep in mind I have not read the sheet and am merely trying to explain what is being asked as there seems to be a misunderstanding that is causing unnecessary hostility)

I also don't understand why you're suddenly fighting an edit when you already agreed to edit earlier?

thank you for the critique and compliments. I will edit accordingly.
 

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None of this is necessary, my man. Stats are worthless here, indicating little besides flavor text on occasion. Personalities hardly exhibit merit except to give an at-a-glance breakdown of the character. Frivolous information, a whole lot of nothing. My opinions, Bee's, and Relent's won't sway the faction's leadership, but it's looking like more work than its worth.

Like the char despite the gifs, Cody, keep it classy.
 

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Again. We're not asking for as much as y'all are thinking.

If you want a character with base level "skills" then you don't have to change or edit anything. The suggestion was to add in skills in which the character has focused or excelled at. If the character is basic and has absolutely zero skills, then fine.

The undermining of the sites leadership, is neither appreciated nor necessary.
 

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tbf, I have no idea what you're talking about re:"the undermining of the sites leadership." Saying our opinions won't change your stance hardly warrants that remark, but aight. You can feel undermined, and Cody can speak for himself.
 

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If you want a character with base level "skills" then you don't have to change or edit anything. The suggestion was to add in skills in which the character has focused or excelled at. If the character is basic and has absolutely zero skills, then fine.

Alright, this is probably where I get to clear things up. I have addressed within the profile that this character has spent most of his life surviving. Whether it be through the hardship that is slavery or living as a pit fighter. Those are enough details to explain what he's good at. There is nothing that identifies that he's solely focused upon anything more than basic force abilities that is taught to every Jedi. I did this on purpose, because that is something I will build on in later threads.

Then I will add more.

The undermining of the sites leadership, is neither appreciated nor necessary.

See, this was a nice tid bit that I knew would come around eventually. As it was said above by Ryan, it's entirely unneeded.

As a leader it is entirely in bad taste to be telling those beneath you about those sort of things and how you feel. In fact, it will only promote a lack of respect. Because now my view of you is that of a leader who needs to tell those beneath them that their opinions do not matter. You're probably thinking why I said opinion. That's because at any moment you can give me a final ruling on the matter. Instead you've been giving me a chance.

Leadership goes unappreciated all the time. It's nothing new.

If you want to talk about this more, then leave it off my thread. We can discuss this over private message. And for my final question, are you guys going to deny my application to the Jedi or not over this?

If not, approve my application.

If so, deny my application.
 
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I'm sorry that I have apparently given you that opinion. When my intentions were meant to help as I did by suggesting Felucia to you before, and not block your character from approval by being viewed as an immovable force. You're right, opinions are opinions. As it seems as mine is unwelcome, I will defer this profile to the FL @Elijah Brockway for approval. I wish you the best and thank you for your service to our country.
 

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I'm sorry that I have apparently given you that opinion. When my intentions were meant to help as I did by suggesting Felucia to you before, and not block your character from approval by being viewed as an immovable force. You're right, opinions are opinions. As it seems as mine is unwelcome, I will defer this profile to the FL @Elijah Brockway for approval. I wish you the best and thank you for your service to our country.

I did not intend to come off as cross, so I owe you that apology and thank you.
 
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