Dawn of The Republic - The Republic of Zoraav

[Zekec2020]

Come fight for peace and unity!​

Are you interested in fighting for the greater good, searching for criminals, expand or rule an army? Want to join and compete against other soldiers for gold and rewards? Here at The Republic of Zoraav, you will have the opportunity to kill, unite, and make your republic proud!

In addition to hefty salaries and fun, you can gain access to the following!

• A Republic of Zoraav made droid of your choice, there are several!
• Team missions on several planets, raids, and great story arcs, rewards and even become a chieftain(King/Emperor)
• Republic Transportation and even your own small ship!
  
• Zoraav servants and slaves, or even guards!
  
• Credits, Credits, and More Credits!
• More Coming!

History
TBA
Operations​

Divisions are the different things you can do in the Republic, what path will you choose?

• Soldiers - The thriving most active part of the republic, Soldiers are the backbone of the republic, defending and fighting for our cause. They make a lot of money and end up becoming leaders, using guns and swords. They can conquer, go on missions, and fill bounties against criminals of the Republic.
• The Quara - The men and women use "magic" to fight against our enemies, using the force to control and use fire to damage enemies as well as making things freeze. These are considered royals and elites of the Republic, and do anything to protect the republic and their beliefs.
  
• The Manufacturers - The men and women make the new droids, ships, weapons and others things for the empire. If not for the Manufacturers, the empire could not expand or run properly and supply it's soldiers and civilians. They make good pay and are very important.
  
• More Coming!
  
  Ranks and Positions
  There are several ranks and positions in the Republic, influenced by the path you choose when joining.
  Political Ranks
  The Grand Nahagel: Leader of the Republic.
  
  Council of Jahaga: A council of Chieftains of the multiple kingdoms and other groups in the Republic.
  Military Ranks
  Jahaga - Jahaga's are chieftains, which each have their own private armies.
  Grand Corporal - Lead battles and are the second highest military rank​

Confirmed Interested or Confirmed Joining
Isabella Rae Jarrus
This is still a major WIP.​

 

[Outlander]

Is this just a modified version of your last faction write-up, which was basically the exact opposite?

 

[Zekec2020]

Does it matter? Lol, I just planned to make a faction if my species and planet were accepted.

 

[Outlander]

Well, yeah. It looks lazy. And I mean you don't actually say what the faction is here. It feels like a big advertisement.

 

[Zekec2020]

I do not see the point in repeating the name multiples times when it is in the title, and since I was not even close to finishing the other one, I used the same format. If you do nit like it, do not read it. Please do not continue commenting if that's all your going to say, thank you Outlander.

 

[Zekec2020]

Well, yeah. It looks lazy. And I mean you don't actually say what the faction is here. It feels like a big advertisement.

Btw, all these are basically ads for the next timeline, so...

 

[Outlander]

To you advertising comment, no. Those are, mostly, full writeups and documentation for groups. This doesn't say anything about the group except that it's great and people should join, which is an advertisement.

Then let me say something else. In fact, let me critique it.

1. My point about not even saying what the faction is was made because there's nothing here about the actual faction. i mean, you give some generic statements about the greater good, and fighting criminals, but I don't know anything about the organization. Is it a culture, military, paramilitary, alliance of groups, religion? It seems, again, more like an advertisement than an actual writeup.
2. You not only have soldiers, but manufacturing, and a force group, which is overstretching things by a ton. As an indie you can do one, maybe two of those. But three is a huge stretch.
3. Slaves? In a group that fights criminals for the common good? Really?
4. You had time to add rewards but no history?

 

[Zekec2020]

Good god, I am going to request we remove all these comments. IF YOU WOULD WAIT TILL I FINISH IT, THIS IS NOT EVEN DAMNED CLOSE TO FINISHED. I asked you to stop.

 

[Outlander]

Please do not continue commenting if that's all your going to say, thank you Outlander.

So you're going to suppress negative criticism of your work when you clearly stated above that I could say what I wanted to as long as it wasn't repeated directly from before? I think this is quite valid for anyone that might be interested in joining.

 

[Zekec2020]

Dude, I said stop. You are making criticism about something that is not NEAR finished. It will make sense once I am done and review it. So please lets delete these comments and stop.

 

[Outlander]

Dude, I said stop. You are making criticism about something that is not NEAR finished. It will make sense once I am done and review it.\

Then why isn't this in the workshop?

 

[Nor'baal]

It's a WIP from a new member.
Constructive critique is fine, but again it is a WIP and he clearly wants to expand on it - so, I would ease off and see what he comes back with.

 

[Zekec2020]

Well, I am as well not continue. The comments will make it so no one will want to join.

 

[Outlander]

It's a WIP from a new member.
Constructive critique is fine, but again it is a WIP and he clearly wants to expand on it - so, I would ease off and see what he comes back with.

I feel that anything that someone feels is worthy of being advertised here in the OOC boards is also worthy of critique. If it isn't in a state where critique should be given, then it should be in the Workshop.

 

[Outlander]

Well, I am as well not continue. The comments will make it so no one will want to join.

Please, continue. If you fix the problems I mentioned, then my criticism will no longer be valid and you'll have nothing to worry about.

 

[Nor'baal]

It certainly should be in the workshops, but a new member wasn't to know that. I'll report my post and ask that the thread is moved :)

 

[Zekec2020]

I asked multiple times for you to stop. It is a WIP, I started it last night. It states it is a WIP in the thread, I ask again please stop and remove these comments and wait for the criticism.

 

[Outlander]

It certainly should be in the workshops, but a new member wasn't to know that. I'll report my post and ask that the thread is moved :)

I believe one of the admins mentioned on his unfinished species that WIPS should be in the workshop, or something along those lines. Although that's neither here nor there.

Thanks for requesting it be moved, Norbs.

 

[Zekec2020]

No need, I am not doing it.

 

[Outlander]

No need, I am not doing it.

Whatever you want man. If you feel my critique is so harsh that you shouldn't continue working on the idea, that's up to you.