DAMIEN ANARKEUS

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Full name
► Kailyn Damien Anarkeus
Age
► 20
Species
► Half human/Sith
Height
► 5 ft 4
Weight
► 122 lbs
Hair Colour
► Currently unknown, likely light brown like his mother's.
Eye Colour
Unknown. Likely sickly yellow due to dark side corruption.
Homeworld
► Korriban
Gender
►Male
Faction
►The Sith Empire
Affiliation(s)
► The Sith
Level
► 1
Rank
►Sith Assasin/Apprentice/Acolyte
Force Sensitivity
► Has potential to be extremely high despite his inexperience. Potency he has thus yet, been unable to display effectively. However, Damien has indeed demonstrated great dexterity with the Force on some occasions, along with possessing a storied knowledge obtained through delicate studying of Sith artifacts and scriptures.

Lightsaber form preferences:
Kailyn has devoted himself greatly to the art of the lightsaber, having become a seasoned Juyo practitioner during his time at the Korriban and Dromund Kaas academies in his youth, outright annihilating most students over the course of those years. Eventually, he'd drop the form for something a lot more technical and defense oriented, after a particularly humiliating duel with a female student he had befriended, which ended with a crushing defeat for the young man.

This event caused him to panic over his glaring weaknesses, specifically his tendency to drop guard after attaining an overwhelmingly dominant edge over an opponent. Being such an aggressive combatant made him very susceptible to well placed blocks, parries and especially ripostes, and so he completely replaced his fundamentals so he could never make such erroneous mistakes again.

As such, this need for refinement meant he would push himself to using Soresu and partially Djem So while he scrapped Juyo for good. This new lightsaber style of his was far more passive and calculated, no longer bolstered by extreme, blinding gymnastics and agile aerial attacks.

He made compromises so he could learn to be better in the future, having palpable hope that this former skill set of devastation could indeed be revisited in the future, but for now, he would take the passive approach to lightsaber affairs. Severe focus on balance, and of course defense.

Its important to note Soresu is the dominant form used, with mere elements of Djem So spliced in as he can't fully integrate it just yet.

Force Skills:
Force Lightning
Force Telekinesis
Force Push
Force Choke
Force Speed
Force Augmentation
Force Drain (level two ability that he will eventually be able to use.)

Being as potentially powerful as he is, Kailyn has a fairly large rogue's gallery of force powers to choose from, but this comes with a catch. Typically, he would only ever utilize the basics, Telekinesis, Force Push, Force Choke, and perhaps the occasional spraying of Force Lightning, but due to his fears of what over exertion might do to him, he heavily restricts himself against opponents, respecting that he is simply not ready to try out more advanced abilities against high level foes.

But against your typical Padawan and enemy soldier? Damien will more than happily subject them to a higher level force ability, just to establish the disparity between his and their skills should that disparity be fairly large, a Padawan is still within the realms of equality with the young acolyte.

Strength: Damien can take a good punch, and he can throw an even better one back.. but even extremely honed martial arts prowess can't change the fact he is quite weak physically, at least, he's lightweight so its likely for him to be rag dolled with the Force or without it in a fight.

Still, when using the force to augment his physical capabilities, Damien can get to be quite strong if he catches you in a tight spot that you can't avoid. But his "strength", is very circumstantial. 9/10 time a bulky Jedi or Sith will physically overwhelm him.
Intelligence: Damien is a very gifted strategist and philosopher, along with being quite an educated fella. Damien can outsmart you in every single possible way if you let him, lightsaber combat tactics, placement for Force power opportunities, how to get the timing perfect for evasive maneuvers, he is a logical, rational thinker who likes to use his head to win a fight, not necessarily the Force or the Lightsaber. He carries himself with an aura of intellectual talent, you won't find a more cunning, methodical acolyte in the Sith Empire. He is dextrous for many a manner of thing.
Wisdom: He is wise for someone so young. He is always patient, calm, collected, always proving himself to be knowledgable in how to survive, and how to strive, how to not give in to brashness and ignorant pride. This wisdom comes from his many teenage transgressions, he was a violent, violent kid back then.. he has learned better since.


Personality: Damien is a very complicated individual, especially in terms of his personality. The acolyte is almost robotic at times, unfeeling and apathetic to everyone and everything, a vessel for ancient Sith teachings and serving his lords, however this reserved, cult like side of him is mostly a mask to conceal his raw emotional side, which used to be very rampant and chaotic.

The bookworm and monk of the Sith Empire perhaps, but that disconnected part of him boils down to a necessary defense mechanism, one to protect himself from old rage that once consumed him whole. He certainly adores Sith teachings as he says, but the stern, stone faced facet of him is for presentation purposes mostly. He hides the dangerous parts of himself.. so he is respected as a level headed, clear minded person who can solve situations with efficiency rather than violent excessiveness.

Damien can also be extremely kind for a Sith, even courteuous, and most of all, loyal and honest. Hard traits to come by for sure.

Skills: Piloting, blaster/sniper proficiency, navigation, battle strategy, hand to hand combat, vibro blade use, lightsaber duelling, athleticism. Damien is very capable in a slew of different respects, he has become quite adept in martial art prowess, and isn't a half bad aim with a blaster or a good old sniper, and can navigate fairly well through any environment.

His dexterity covers a good few areas, namely anything that requires rationale and deep thinking. He is an exceptional lightsaber duelist, for an acolyte at least.

He's also quite outspoken in philosophy and politics, showing love for either craft. He's good at articulating himself.

Gear: A (G) E-33 Blaster Carbine, expensive datapad, a few hunting knives, a single durasteel vibro blade, compass, dual custom coloured lighstabers (a mix between red, green and black) and handmade mask along with the black cloak and low level plate armour (F)Sith Marauder Armor - Minimal Coverage Sith Armor. He will bring the odd concussion grenade if he's in the mood for it.. but that's mostly it. Mostly.

He's a cunning acolyte that likes to use the most effective weapon in his grasp to get the job done. But he is also bound by an honor code for anyone willing to call for a fair duel. He is courteuous enough to accept, yet prone to use everything and anything to his advantage to win. No cheap trick is beneath him if he does indeed require it. He makes up for any apparent lack of skill with highly dexterous methodology.

Ship/Vessel: (F)Crux-class Starfighter

Appearance: The mask resembles a dark, weathered metallic skull, the material itself being gifted to him after winning a martial arts competition on Dromund Kaas. The sabers have a distinct colour unique to Damien, created after tinkering for hours with his crimson lightsaber crystals, bleeding them constantly. The Crystal's have been destabilized to form an unnatural mix of red, black and green, however this Grant's him no physical buff. It's an aesthetic choice.

Kailyn's natural face has never been observed ever since the later years of academy training. Its unlikely that he is tainted and morphed by the dark side like some users, for all intensive purposes, he used to be regarded as a very attractive long haired brunette male by his old peers, even back then he was a very dedicated, obsessive Sith. But who knows.

Bio: For his entire life up until now, Kailyn Damien Anarkeus was brought up on Korriban to be a powerful Dark Lord of the Sith. His early life was full of many emotionally abusive, physically neglectful events that left him a broken and miserable child, his Sith Pureblood father Daeronus being the main perpetrator.

Daeronus treated it as social conditioning, as he remarked the boy would experience so much worse in his future days as a servant of the Empire, he tormented and bludgeoned the boy. He intended on Kailyn becoming an apathetic monster of a force user that would terrorize entire planetary systems with his swift hand and indestructible fury.

Certainly ambitious if not crudely naive, Daeronus ultimately failed funnily enough, as his twisted treatment of the boy, the verbal insults of him "only being half a Sith", the constant racial attacks of Sith Pureblood family members, the physical violence that consisted of Force Lightning lashings and telekinetic beatdowns, it only made Damien even more emotional, his rage being the kind Daeronus was not at all intending for.

Daeronus wanted full obedience, subservience that kept Kailyn from ever acting out of revenge and hate, he wanted him to bow and serve, not overthrow. As his feelings would constantly boil over several years, during the entirety of his childhood, Kailyn would finally explode after one sparring session with his vindictive father went wrong.

At age thirteen, Kailyn would manage to hit Daeronus with a force push so powerful the man would have embedded himself into the side of a cliff.. the act damaging him moderately. It was discovered by the other Sith mentor figures overlooking the Korriban academy that this recent student had awakened a dormant force connection unheard of for a student at his age, one that had briefly shown its colours in this rare event of poetic justice.

Daeronus was quite an accomplished Sith Crusader, so it caused confusion in everyone aware of the incident that such a young boy could muster something so powerful, albeit being a circunstantial fluke conducted with no level of intent or awareness. It was a stroke of luck that would never be replicated again, even after reaching the status of apprentice.

Daeronus would torment him no more, accepting that Kailyn was not his to command and puppet. He revoked any responsibility he had over the boy, disowning him before returning to active duty to fight against the Galactic Alliance that had so thoroughly desecrated the traditional values of the Sith.

With his father leaving his life for good, Kailyn would live with his mother in an enclave not too far from the Korriban academy, her being a far cry from the man she used to be entangled with, the monstrous father of Kailyn. Kailyn was relatively content with this period of his life along with living with her, yet in training he only became more and more aggressive, beating a sizeable amount of his peers in both the Force and Lightsaber combat, becoming a profound fighter.

Even the Pureblood Sith students, those that he had been taught to kneel to and fear.. they become nothing more than temporary obstacles that he would eventually surpass as soon as he was granted the chance. By age of 15 Damien and his human mother, who would gain the position of Sith Inquisitor, would move from the homeland, into the former capital planet of the Sith, Dromund Kaas.

This was due to Kailyn having done all he could in that environment. Of course, there were temples and secret tombs to venture in the future, but in the academy itself, there was little left to learn.

The Dromund Kaas academy was a much different experience for Kailyn, as increased pleading from his mother forced the boy to cut down on the vitriolic actions Damien would commit everytime someone crossed him, leading him to be a lot more calm as he began to grow and mature.

Still, his penchant for Juyo remained, as the boy continued to stay at the top academically and physically, winning the majority of his sparring duels while his mother became an accomplished guard for Dromund Kaas. That was, until he came across a female student exactly like him. A second Juyo practitioner, Cera Nexian would instantly take to the fellow peer when meeting him, showing no signs of hostility for the usually apprehensive, violent young man, one of the first since his mother to exhibit any level of concern or affection.

They would become friends, constantly venturing the capital city of the planet, getting up to adolescent mischief, and the works. The hate and pain in Kailyn was faltering, as his focus was no longer fully aligned with strength and mercilessness with the arrival of a friend he could identify with, he no longer had a reason to confront the world he was living in, as he could now accept it, moving on to deep meditation and extended studying of Sith scripture.

He found expressing himself to others a strenuous task still, it was also around this time he'd begin concealing himself behind a mysterious mask and cloak, he was building a stoic, monk like identity for himself, a way of countering the severe distress his life had been controlled by before. Yet, even with his apathy now building, deep within him he found solace.

It was at that point, where his downfall unfortunately came. Building an impressive record over the course of several years, Kailyn would finally feel the sweet taste of failure again after staying on top for so long. At 17, he'd be pitted against Cera in a duel that would decide who could be prematurely promoted to apprentice, as each were viable to finally leave this enclosed environment. Despite building his character moderately and admirably, Kailyn's brash approach to combat stayed the same. Hatred fueled Juyo, uninterruptible flurries of continuous movement.. he didn't even refine himself. Relying on the same mo.. until this fated duel.

He'd face this friend, only to be disarmed and forced to the floor in a matter of seconds after beginning. Even though he was a remarkable Juyo practitioner, without the same determination in his heart, he was weak and this form was ineffective for him, leading to the disgraceful loss. Cera would not treat this affair as a severe issue on her contemporary's part, but both Damien and everyone else in the academy treated it as a massive fall from grace.

Kailyn's life would only worsen from there on out. Cera would be relocated to another Outer Rim planet, serving her new master there, while Kailyn would continue in the academy as a mere prospect for several more years. He became noticeably more distant even after so much work had been done to refine his sensibilities, fully dedicating himself to being a vessel for knowledge. A vessel for the empire of old. His apathy grew, even more after his mother died fighting off a sect in the Galactic Alliance far off in the core worlds.. all his progress meant nothing, so he regressed, treating himself as just that. Nothing.

Expendable, disposable, spare. All words to describe Kailyn's situation. Even after becoming one of the most promising Sith academics, alas he came up short as interest in his capabilities would shrink and shrink. Kailyn blamed all of his misfortune on his refusal to let go of Daeronus's punishment.. his inability to distinguish the fires of unnecessary hate being the cause of his great change. Now until the day he'd become an acolyte, Kailyn would live and breath Soresu and Djem So, even dabbling in Niman as it suited his newfound tendencies.

His craft become more fruitful, technical, his knowledge of the Force grew to be truly palpable, his lightsaber techniques becoming more masterful yet more defense oriented.. Kailyn became another being entirely. Flushing out his old self to be a masked philosopher.

His tireless training on Dromund Kass would soon conclude, and so, at the age of 19, Kailyn Damien Anarkeus would become an acolyte, a servant for the true, righteous empire he romanticized in his dreams, leading him to become very political and moral based.

Before ever being appointed to a master, this phantom Sith would take various assassination and mercenary jobs within the planet of Kaas and others surrounding it, familiarizing himself with the way of a cunning, logical Sith. Now 20 years of age, he intends to prove his worth as a skilled asset of the Imperial Empire, thus, he awaits the Lord that lays claim to him.
 
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Hey there. So, I can't access the GDocs, but even if I could, the profile should still be layed out on in the post instead of in a link. You do that then afterwards I'll do a full review on the profile.

Also just a note: Please list the species your character actually is. Even if your character conceals it to where other characters wouldn't be able to know, it should be on the profile .etc .etc

And change the wording on Force Sensitivity, probably something along the lines of "Yes, has potential to become powerful" or simply "Yes" (all level one starting characters have limited power over the force by default) instead of being listed as extremely high in sensitivity.

Tag me when you are done and I'll look back in here.
 
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Ah sorry I wasn't actually finished at that point, the links were for the images to accompany the profile, but since they're my personal studio edited pictures, I'm having trouble uploading them properly. I'll edit everything accordingly.
 

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Leaving bullet points.

  • Please edit out references to Exar Kun/Revan and other of the Sith Lords from Legends from your biography. They are not in canon and not in our history.
  • Daeronus would need to be changed to be at Sith Crusader level. The only Sith Lords are the ones are actual player characters, so any references to other Lord npcs should also be removed as well.
  • The ship, along with the Mandalorian rifle and armor need to be linked to tech-writeups in the Tech Boards. The Mandalorian tech should be ones that aren't strictly Mandalorian faction tech and are at least open market, do keep in mind with cultural suppression laws on Mandalorians (as well as them being an enemy faction) make wearing anything resembling their armor illegal in Sith space, so would probably be frowned upon for a Sith to do it.
    • Also the thermal detonator is advanced tech, so it would need to be earned via tech plot, so would need to be removed. You can replace it with a frag or concussion grenade.
  • Please tone down your character's abilities. He reads like a level 2-3 character instead of a starting level one (padawan/acolyte level). He's a super good duelist, super agile, martial artist master, ace pilot, master strategist, knows quite a lot of lightsaber forms (as a starting character only one form would be realistic, so just one after scrapping his previous one) .etc. His skills/abilities should be toned down significantly in general. The level system write-up here should give you a good idea of how what a level 1's abilities should look like.
But against your typical Padawan and enemy soldier? Damien will more than happily subject them to a higher level force ability, just to establish the disparity between his and their skills. A colourful warning if you will.

  • Going with the point above, your character starting out would be on equal footing with a Jedi Padawan.
The sabers have a distinct colour unique to Damien, created after tinkering for hours with his crimson lightsaber crystals, bleeding them constantly.

This is more minor, but can you clarify what color they are exactly, are the lightsabers still some variant of red? Because Red is really the only color dark-siders can bleed crystals into and I'm guessing they're red.
one who dabbled in politics alongside some of the high ranked Sith Lords

  • So, new characters on here start out with no reputation and again the only player-characters are Sith Lords, so this would need to be omitted, along with Sith Lords noticing your character in the Bio.
  • And while on the topic of reputation, i'm not sure i'm comfortable with your character having had (paraphrasing) "annihilated most of students in duels" to the point where the most of the students envy and want to kill him, the mention of "after proving himself to be one of the most intelligent, and equally powerful acolytes in the Sith institution" .etc.
    • I could buy your character overtaking your Crusader father by surprise I suppose (although it was described somewhat over-the-top), but the others, reads like too much. I don't mind one being naturally gifted in a class, but that's about it.
Force Lightning
Force Telekinesis
Force Push
Force Crush
Force Concealment
Battle Meditation

Force Choke
Force Speed
Force Augmentation
Force Drain

  • So, the force powers ones in bolded are non-canon force powers, and thus need a lore-writeup to be approved. Force Crush would be more like a grip like Force Choke, squeezing on something, rather than like in KOTOR 2. And again as a level 1 it wouldn't be particularly potent. And for Force Drain, it would need level 2 and a plot to learn.
    • Do note that it's usually easier just not to list specific force powers, so I recommended that.

So, I do realize that is a lot. So take as much time as you need to make edits. Here's some links that can help you out. Character creation guide. Sith Empire write-up. The prologue. And your welcome PM has a lot of other helpful links as well. If you have any questions or anything you can ask me via PM/DM on site or on discord as well. Tag me when this is ready to be looked again.

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Most of the exaggative stuff was for plot convenience, so I wouldn't personally apply it to actual roleplay circumstances. But I do understand each of your points. Thank you again for responding.
 

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@Faster Than Light
Okay so I've adjusted the bulk of what you asked if a little hastily, but I can't really do more about the multiple forms issue, besides ejecting mention of Niman and Jar' Kai. Its built in to his character that he uses a hybrid Soresu/Djem So, I can't remove either completely. Hopefully simply nerfing the Djem So side will suffice. Sorry for the trouble.
 

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On another note, is the Sith Pureblood/Human thing a bit much? I'd imagine mix racing characters might be an issue, at least in most roleplay communities. Could always make Daeronus an adoptive father if that's more suitable.
 

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Sith/Human hybrids (as well as some other human/near-human hybirds) are commonly roleplayed, I don't really have issue with it. And I suppose the form thing is fine as you described it now (I really don't mind Jar' Kai since it's effectively a fancy way of saying your character can dual-wield sabers, I should have clarified)

Anyways, be sure to take your time (you can roleplay without approval so don't be a hurry ^.^) and go through the bullets (checking off each one as you go). I still see references to Exar Kun & Revan. The blaster, armor, ship need still need to be linked to write-ups in the Tech Boards, here is the tech compendium for easy reference, whatever is non-advanced and not restricted out of your reach is fine (I see you submitted the ship but the Sith have 3 options for non-advanced fighters you can pick from). Also still references to NPC Sith Lords. etc .etc

It does look better though, thank you for you willingness to edit

Let me know when you're ready for me to look over again.
 

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Ah I'll just use one of the fighters from the compendium if that's easier. But I'll keep the Supremacy post up for if I ever want to use it again.
 

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@Faster Than Light

Okay so I think I've adjusted everything now. If I managed to miss yet another non canon Sith Lord reference then jesus I must be blind ahah. I'll continue to search through for edits before hearing your verdict :D
 

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References to Exar Kun and Revan are still in the 4th to last paragraph. And references to NPC Sith Lords in paragraph 12 (more specifically your mother becoming a guard to Lords of Droumand Kass).

Now 20 years of age, after proving himself to be one of the most intelligent, and equally powerful acolytes in the Sith institution, he awaits the Sith or Darth willing to lay claim to him.

This sentence (in combination with the sentence before it) still reads like he's done a lot and people should know who he is (i'm not sure that's the intention). While your character doesn't have to start fresh out of Sith school and could be doing 'things', minor things, still start out with no reputation. (and your sentence does read like "one of the most [...] equally powerful acolytes" and i'm not sure if it's meant to be read that way or what it means.

Perhaps change the wording to. "Now at 20 years old and out of the academy, he's seeking to prove himself to a valuable prospect amongst the Sith, aiming to attract the attention of the higher-ups in the Empire) .etc. something along those lines.

I feel that we are getting close. I think once these are addressed we can call it a day.
 

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I just noticed concealment was missed in the paragraph below the listed force skills.

But I'll approve this profile with the understanding that will be edited out
 
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