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Reaver

NAME: Reaver (It's a nick-name no one will know his real name, he is trying to keep a low profile)
FACTION: None, yet
RANK: N/A
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 18
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 6 foot
WEIGHT: 170
EYES: Silver
HAIR: Black
SKIN: Caucasian
CREDITS: 0
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: None
DOMINATE HAND: Ambidextrous
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, but he doesn’t know

STRENGTH: He is fairly strong.
DESTERITY: He is slightly nimble and agile.
CONSTITUTION: He is sort of healthy
INTELLIGENCE: He is fairly smart
WISDOM: He is wise
CHARISMA: He is a slightly influential person.

FORCE POWERS: None

SKILLS: Blaster proficiency, stealth, demolitions.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS: N/A

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES: Strengths: Demolitions, Marksman, Stealth, his influence.
Weaknesses: he is to trusting.

GEAR: Plasma blaster, light armour, plasma grenades, Atlanian Imperial Guard cloak.

SHIP: None

PETS: None.

PERSONALITY: Cougar is a fairly happy and nice person. He trusts people despite his past. He can be quick to anger if he is provoked enough. He has wisdom when it comes to a battle, he is also a fairly good diplomate.(I can't think of any more, but that will change as I use him in a few rp's)

HISTORY: Reaver is the youngest in a family that has had many members in the service of The Atlanian Empire, his father was part of the Imperial Guard, his grandfather was also a Imperial Guard, the line kept going back like that, so it was only natural that Reaver wanted to follow in his fathers footsteps and bring more honour to his family. At 13 he was accepted into the Atlanian Imperial Military, at the age of 15 he became the youngest Imperial Guard, bringing a lot of honour to his family, at 17 he finished his officers training and became an Imperial Lieutenant, then one day a war broke out. As the Necromonger’s fleet blockaded the planet Reaver was working as the communications officer on the capital ship when the Atlanian Grand Fleet went to the front line, he was under the command of the fleet admiral, he only just escaped the fleet’s destruction. He was then in charge of the final battle at the Imperial Palace where he saw the deaths of all his friends at the hands of the Nocromongers. He only managed to escape because the emperor told him to. He took an interceptor and managed to get past the blockade. He went into hyperspace and travelled to an unknown system, his interceptor came out in an asteroid field and was badly damaged, he has just crashed onto the surface of a planet.

KILLS: None.

DUELING RING MATCHES: None.

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES: None.

ROLE-PLAYS: None.

(The Grand Fleet he had only had twelve ships, but it was the command ship he was on so he was, in a way, leading the fleet)
 
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The personality and history are quite short. And would an 18 year old really be in charge of a "Grand Fleet"?
 

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Would an 18 year old be called a Cougar? Perhaps, if the person was like two.
 

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Nerf the history and add more to the personality.
 

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Well Sorry Im Couldn't Think Of Much, I'm Not In A Good Mood Today And I Can Only Do This At School.
 

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I'm sorry I had a go at you guys, I know your just trying to help, but I'm not that good at this sort of thing, all the rp's I have been in never really asked for stuff like my charictors stats, just the first bit, like the name, age, gender.
 

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It was new to me too but I adapted and overcame.
 

Ols

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You didn't need to tone down his health lol...that's the one stat you can have 10/10

And again, he is very young and low ranked to be in charge of a fleet. The changes aren't to keep us happy, but to make a more effective char.
 

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You didn't need to tone down his health lol...that's the one stat you can have 10/10

And again, he is very young and low ranked to be in charge of a fleet. The changes aren't to keep us happy, but to make a more effective char.
Well if you look at the last part of his history he has just been in an asteroid feild that damaged his ship and he has just crash laned, think about it would you be healthy after that, and as for the rank he had he was a excelant fighter and he had officer training and the fleet admiral was with him on the capitol ship, I'm going add that stuff to the history so it is more clear for people.
 

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Well if you look at the last part of his history he has just been in an asteroid feild that damaged his ship and he has just crash laned, think about it would you be healthy after that, and as for the rank he had he was a excelant fighter and he had officer training and the fleet admiral was with him on the capitol ship, I'm going add that stuff to the history so it is more clear for people.

Fair enough to the health...although you might be okay...depdens how you crash.

I don't want to get into an arguement over something so trivial, but when you come out of Officer Training you are a Lieutenant. Every officer has that training, and an 18 year old LT wouldn't command the fleet, although he may work on the flagship. A Commodore or Admiral would command a fleet tbh...but it's your char.

Oh and it would take years to get to another galaxy. I think you mean a system.
 

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Fair enough to the health...although you might be okay...depdens how you crash.

I don't want to get into an arguement over something so trivial, but when you come out of Officer Training you are a Lieutenant. Every officer has that training, and an 18 year old LT wouldn't command the fleet, although he may work on the flagship. A Commodore or Admiral would command a fleet tbh...but it's your char.

Oh and it would take years to get to another galaxy. I think you mean a system.
Right, I wasn't exacly thinking right when I posted this so I will make a few more changes, and I'm not trying to start an argument, I'm trying to stop an argument occuring, but I think I might have just failed that.
 

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I'm not arguing, just critiquing.
 

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Like I said I failed to stop the argument, as there wasn't one to stop.
 

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Ditto.

A suggestion to add more to your personality (as it is relatively short. We like it to be a 6-sentence paragraph): You said your character is wise. Wise in what way? There are many ways to go with this sort of thing, so that would help expand more.
 

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Thanks for the help guys, I really appreceat it. I would have rathered that you had worded it all differntly, you know by saying stuff like "I think you should change this because....", but thanks any way.
 

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We are nice people. You'll see. :)
 
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