Chi Sio

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NAME: Chi Sio
FACTION: Imperial Republica
RANK: Sith Acolyte
SPECIES: Pantoran
AGE: 19
GENDER: female
FORCE SENSITIVE: yes, trained by a Sith
HEIGHT: 1,68 m
WEIGHT: 55 kg
EYE COLOUR: Black
HAIR COLOUR: Blueish Black
SKIN COLOUR: Blue
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: A big scar over her left cheek caused by a burn, scars on her back and her left arm


ATTRIBUTES:
Raised by a decadent sith who believed himself to be better than the normal populous she never had much contact with the outside world, living in the constraints of his luxurious apartment. Her transition into her second master's custody was anything but smooth, and the experience left her scarred mentally and physically. With her master dead and a new master being prone to hit at the slightest provocation she closed herself into her mind, fearing to speak up or out to others. She followed her masters bidding with pure obedience and kept her thoughts to herself. Now, years later, she still hides in that box, rarely discussing anything personal about herself.
The experience also changed her in another way. With the constant fear of not satisfying her master in some aspect, she grew dedicated to excelling expectations whenever possible. She pushed herself to her limit, fearing that anything below that is not good enough. This perfectionism has led her to the point where she often believed punishments to be just, as she never reached her goals, always setting them to high.


PERSONALITY:
She is determined, ruthless and hardly trusts anyone. She normally keeps to herself and doesn't approach others. She has no problem with lying and normally knows exactly what to say to avoid blame for faults, or how to phrase her excuses. A skill she acquired through constant tries with her master. She will be the last to acknowledge something she has done is right or good, but won't criticise herself openly. She hides her inner insecurity by silence. When not speaking to superiors she is not interested in appealing friendly or trustworthy.


BIOGRAPHY:
In her mind her life began on the day she burned, she hates the thought of her prior life. Her first master, his luxurious apartment, his lessons, they seem distant and thinking about them only opens old wounds. The day her master died, the day on which she burnt, this is the day where she was born. The childish fool was gone, her new life had begun, and scars remind her of this fateful event every day. Her master had always mingled with politics and had too many enemies. And so, one day one of these enemies rose to put an end to him.
She remembers the burning halls, her master nowhere to be found and her clothes catching fire. The fire has left its marks, from her right cheek across her shoulder onto her back. The wounds healed, but they left scars. Yet it wouldn't be her last scars, not in a physical sense but a mental one.
What followed was her next life, her true life. The training under her new master which made her the woman she was today. The brutal and easily angered Neimodian was prone to hit at the slightest provocation. She never understood why he took her as an apprentice, as he always frowned down on her and addressed her only with degrading slurs. He should have killed back in her master's apartment, it would have saved him the hassle of training her, and her a lot of pain.

SKILLS:
She has trained to fight her whole life. One of the little things both masters taught her. While her first master taught her the basics in Shii Cho, her second master despised the form, forbidding her its use and scolded her for its use. He deemed a lightsaber to be too elegant to be used in such a crude manner. "Just waving the blade around like a child" was what he called it. He himself was a proponent of Makashi, and his apprentice would not learn any form any less elegant than Makashi. he drilled her and made sure she possessed enough skill not to embarrass him while fighting. To this day she sticks to Makashi, never employing the little Shii Cho she posses.
When talking about the force things were different. Her master never deemed the use of the force as important as the use of the sabre, he, however, allowed her to study books on the subject. In her studies, she has taken a particular interest in force lightning, and while she still has to perfect the form she is able to project the hurtful flashes, and even kill smaller animals.

GEAR:
She has her lightsaber with a curved hilt and not much more. She has two sets of robes, one for formal occasions and one for her everyday life. She also has clothes she wears when deployed. She owns a comlink that she rarely uses for anything but professional use, two bodkins for her hair and a few hygiene products. She is able to take all her belongings with her quickly and without taking up to much space.

ROLE-PLAYS:
Chi spends an evening alone in a small park.
http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/the-stream-of-darkness.86587/

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This needs quite a few changes.

1. Chiss lose their force sensitivity around their early teens, so she can't be a Chiss Sith.
2. The Chiss Ascendancy still exists in isolation and no one knows about them, so how did she get out and how did she end up with a Jedi Master.
3. The Jedi were living on secret, and only 5 Jedi PCs were allowed at the begining of the TL. Even taking into account the NPCs that existed till they were all killed, this flies straight in the face of the fact that the existence of the Jedi is a complete secret from the Sith. So she can't have been a former Jedi learner, not comfortable allowing that unless you have a really compelling reason to support how her existence doesn't reveal to the sith that Jedi exist. So that needs to go.

Basically needs a complete redo as the bio and species don't work. Please tag me or Logan once this is fixed.
 

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There's more info in the other sections than in the bio, like most of it just talks about one instance. You mention living in decadence under the first master, but nothing about that is mentioned in the bio. I get the narrative style you're going for with the whole not remembering anything about her youth, but she's 19. Was it because of the psychological trauma, or a head injury, details like that could make that work. And you start the bio with her not even remembering her master's name, but later in the bio she remembers her first master and the pain of his loss. I'd like to see the bio be fleshed out a little before I approve this.
 

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I will get to that... it isn't the bios fault, just my inability to express what I think with words... I am sorry
 

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I will get to that... it isn't the bios fault, just my inability to express what I think with words... I am sorry
It's cool, you have most of it there. Just need to add some of it into the bio so that anyone reading the character can find the full story from just the bio section.
 
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