Avrael Aerosteel

[Avrael Aerosteel]

NAME: Avrael Aerosteel
FACTION: New Jedi Order
RANK: Padawan
SPECIES: Genetically modified human
AGE: 21
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 6' 5"
WEIGHT: about 210
EYES: Blue/Green
HAIR: Black
SKIN: Tan
CREDITS: 1000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Has a Tattoo on his forearm that is his family crest

FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: Mental: Strong, Physical: Strong-ish, Force: Strong (learning to control)
DEXTERITY: Air: Very, Ground: Average Jedi (a little slow due to wings)
CONSTITUTION: Average I guess
INTELLIGENCE: Above Average
WISDOM: Average for a Jedi I guess
CHARISMA: Low...

PERSONALITY:
Avrael is basically your average Jedi, with a few exceptions. He has is moments of great wisdom but most of the time he is ADD and ADHD. In other words he can't keep still, which makes him completely aware of his surroundings in battle and a quick responder to crises. As Avrael trains, he calms down and becomes more down to earth but during combat he is still aware of everything. Avrael is a kid at heart and a huge trickster. He does not prank people he does not know, or people of a higher rank than him.

BIOGRAPHY:
Avrael was born on the Planet of Hoth growing power. As he and his parents ran from an attack he was saved by a local Rebel scout ship but his parents did not make it. As soon as the New Jedi Order started they had him tested for strength in the Force. When they discovered he was considerably strong with it, he was carted away to a secret training facility and has been in hiding there since he was 5. When he was 16 his caretakers at the Facility decided to genetically alter him so he is a better soldier/Jedi Knight. These alterations changed Avrael's personality because now he could actually see the Force, but with one downside, he is now blind.

Avrael's new found ability to see the Force was a shock to all. One of the few remaining Jedi knights visited Avrael when he was 17. By then Avrael had mastered the art of flight and several levels of a Lightsaber form. He also had been trained in the art of the Tonfa as a backup weapon in case he ever lost his Lightsaber in battle. When the Jedi Knight asked him what the force looked like, Avrael's response was, "There is light and dark everywhere, it surrounds everyone. Sometimes it is more dark than light, but most times it is more light than dark. For those who can actually control it, like you and I, it surrounds them like a suit of armor or a cocoon."


FORCE POWERS:
Can SEE the force, meaning that he uses the force as a guide for where to go and can sense things from a distance and just before they are about to happen with his force sight he can also see when peoples emotions change, by telling weather they get lighter or darker. And just basic normal Jedi powers.

SKILLS:
Is skilled in the Tonfa and just above basic in a Lightsaber form.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Don't know the names of the forms so I will fill this in when I do

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Strengths: Tonfa technique, Force use
Weaknesses: Can never sit still, must always be doing something with hands

GEAR:
a Lightsaber, and some misc. gadgets.

 

[Darman Kebii'tra]

I don't know if the wings will fly (;)), but I'll let a mod comment on that. Also, you might want to clarify on what exactly you mean by "seeing" the force. This community likes to have characters earn their powers, hence the reason we all start as Padawan's.

Also, this site is set 1000 years after the events of Episode 4, so the destruction of Alderaan occurred way before anyone was born. You might want to figure something else out for that.

For reference: Jedi Lightsaber forms

 

[Avrael Aerosteel]

I don't know if the wings will fly (;)), but I'll let a mod comment on that. Also, you might want to clarify on what exactly you mean by "seeing" the force.

Also, this site is set 1000 years after the events of Episode 4, so the destruction of Alderaan occurred way before anyone was born. You might want to figure something else out for that.

For reference: Jedi Lightsaber forms

Yeah... i'll work on it. the "Seeing the Force" is explained in the bio and I forgot to mention that the wings are expertly crafted to be super light-weight... ill add that in now

 

[Darman Kebii'tra]

I know it a lot, but you'll have fun once you get the ball rolling. :D

 

[Outlander]

I actually made a piece of tech that's essentially a pair of wings. I'm not sure having a custom made pair of wings will fly considering they would have to be submitted to a tech board which is actively closed.

 

[Raydo]

Hey there,

First off, Welcome to the Site! I am one of the assistant faction leaders for the Jedi, so I am excited you chose the Jedi for your first character. As said earlier by others the current year is approx. 1,023 ABY (After the battle of Yavin) so it would be impossible for your character to born on Alderaan.

There are few more issues with the character that I am sure we can work through quickly enough to get you going as soon as possible. First off, there is no rule against playing a genetically altered human, but in the past some people have used that to try and give themselves advantages that simply wouldn't exist. I am going to say I would find it highly unlikely that your character could support metal wings large enough to produce the lift needed to get your character off the ground. I am by no means a science expert, but the average human weighs to much to fly simply by flapping wings. I believe these wings would need to be much more detailed with an Admin approving them, as again, as said earlier, the Technology Profile board is closed. Also it should be noted that neither the Jedi or the Rebels have the facilities or the motivation to genetically alter beings.

Next, we make all Padawans start off with the skill levels pretty basic so that it gives characters time to grow and develop over time. You mention "Mastering" several lightsaber forms. My advice would to be choose one form and give yourself just above basic knowledge and maybe one more with very basic skills. The same thing goes with Force abilities, no one starts out with "Advanced skills". Choose a couple of base force skills with basic knowledge and maybe choose one that he somewhat a tad more trained in (This would still be at a Padawan level).

I would like to see this "Force sight" a bit more defined. Is he otherwise blind? Is it something he uses some of the time? There are characters that are blind and rely on Force sight so I don't think it is too big of an issue, but it needs to be better defined before we can give the nod on that as well.

Like I said earlier, not trying to gang up on you. We try to hold every new Jedi character to the same standard in order to be fair. If you have any questions feel free to ask Either myself, or @Ral Aran (Assistant Faction Leaders) or @Ben (Faction leader)

 

[Avrael Aerosteel]

Hey there,

First off, Welcome to the Site! I am one of the assistant faction leaders for the Jedi, so I am excited you chose the Jedi for your first character. As said earlier by others the current year is approx. 1,023 ABY (After the battle of Yavin) so it would be impossible for your character to born on Alderaan.

There are few more issues with the character that I am sure we can work through quickly enough to get you going as soon as possible. First off, there is no rule against playing a genetically altered human, but in the past some people have used that to try and give themselves advantages that simply wouldn't exist. I am going to say I would find it highly unlikely that your character could support metal wings large enough to produce the lift needed to get your character off the ground. I am by no means a science expert, but the average human weighs to much to fly simply by flapping wings. I believe these wings would need to be much more detailed with an Admin approving them, as again, as said earlier, the Technology Profile board is closed. Also it should be noted that neither the Jedi or the Rebels have the facilities or the motivation to genetically alter beings.

Next, we make all Padawans start off with the skill levels pretty basic so that it gives characters time to grow and develop over time. You mention "Mastering" several lightsaber forms. My advice would to be choose one form and give yourself just above basic knowledge and maybe one more with very basic skills. The same thing goes with Force abilities, no one starts out with "Advanced skills". Choose a couple of base force skills with basic knowledge and maybe choose one that he somewhat a tad more trained in (This would still be at a Padawan level).

I would like to see this "Force sight" a bit more defined. Is he otherwise blind? Is it something he uses some of the time? There are characters that are blind and rely on Force sight so I don't think it is too big of an issue, but it needs to be better defined before we can give the nod on that as well.

Like I said earlier, not trying to gang up on you. We try to hold every new Jedi character to the same standard in order to be fair. If you have any questions feel free to ask Either myself, or @Ral Aran (Assistant Faction Leaders) or @Ben (Faction leader)

I will work on that... thanks for the feed back

 

[Avrael Aerosteel]

Hey there,

First off, Welcome to the Site! I am one of the assistant faction leaders for the Jedi, so I am excited you chose the Jedi for your first character. As said earlier by others the current year is approx. 1,023 ABY (After the battle of Yavin) so it would be impossible for your character to born on Alderaan.

There are few more issues with the character that I am sure we can work through quickly enough to get you going as soon as possible. First off, there is no rule against playing a genetically altered human, but in the past some people have used that to try and give themselves advantages that simply wouldn't exist. I am going to say I would find it highly unlikely that your character could support metal wings large enough to produce the lift needed to get your character off the ground. I am by no means a science expert, but the average human weighs to much to fly simply by flapping wings. I believe these wings would need to be much more detailed with an Admin approving them, as again, as said earlier, the Technology Profile board is closed. Also it should be noted that neither the Jedi or the Rebels have the facilities or the motivation to genetically alter beings.

Next, we make all Padawans start off with the skill levels pretty basic so that it gives characters time to grow and develop over time. You mention "Mastering" several lightsaber forms. My advice would to be choose one form and give yourself just above basic knowledge and maybe one more with very basic skills. The same thing goes with Force abilities, no one starts out with "Advanced skills". Choose a couple of base force skills with basic knowledge and maybe choose one that he somewhat a tad more trained in (This would still be at a Padawan level).

I would like to see this "Force sight" a bit more defined. Is he otherwise blind? Is it something he uses some of the time? There are characters that are blind and rely on Force sight so I don't think it is too big of an issue, but it needs to be better defined before we can give the nod on that as well.

Like I said earlier, not trying to gang up on you. We try to hold every new Jedi character to the same standard in order to be fair. If you have any questions feel free to ask Either myself, or @Ral Aran (Assistant Faction Leaders) or @Ben (Faction leader)

ok, I have made some changes; I have removed the wings because I agree that it would be physically impossible without any propulsion; and I also explained the Force sight a little more in Force powers I think... and I tied up some loose ends. please red when you have the chance :)

 

[Ben]

Whilst in general I have little issue with a Padawan starting off with Force Sight, I think you're flexing what it is in essence a little too much here. The way you write about it (acting as a guide, for example) would be far too easily abused, and is much too close to the frowned-upon-cum-banned precognition powers.

Likewise there are still several outstanding issues in your biography that Raydo highlighted that I would like to see addressed. For example, you still say you have mastered several levels of lightsaber combat, and as Raydo said, all new members start off with a beginners level skill. Again, in line with what Raydo said, the Jedi would also neither have the means nor the motivation to genetically alter a prospective Jedi - especially not to make them a better solider, since that is still a point of contention amongst the Jedi.

I'd appreciate it if you could address the above points, as well as reading the Wookiepedia article on Force Sight and moderating your description a little. Please let me know when you've had a look at making these edits, and I will have a little look over your profile again. Thanks :)

http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Force_sight