Ark Quad

[Darth Linfini]

NAME: Ark Quad
FACTION: None
RANK: None
SPECIES: Taung
AGE: 28
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 6ft. 8
WEIGHT: 220 pounds
EYES: Green
HAIR: Black
SKIN: Pale
CREDITS: 1,000 credits
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: A scar across his left eye
FORCE SENSITIVE: No

STRENGTH: Buff but not ripped
DEXTERITY: Agile
CONSTITUTION: Healthy
INTELLIGENCE: Below average.
WISDOM: Average
CHARISMA: He is not very persuasive. Besides he's the shoot first ask questions later type.

FORCE POWERS:
None

SKILLS:
The average soldier skills. Hand to hand combat, Understanding the tactical advantage, ect.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
None

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
His strenghts are fighting, scouting, piloting and demolitions. His weaknesses are computers, engineering, stealth, persuading.

GEAR:
He has a sacred spear that has been past down from 5 generations of the Quad family. He also has a light combat armor his best friend gave him.

SHIP:
He knows about the technology of ships but doesn't have one.

PETS:
None

PERSONALITY:
Ark Quad has an agressive personality. He doesn't take threats kindly. Also, he insn't the kind to joke. He does evil deeds without having any regrets. He kills, injures, and leaves people emotionally scared. Basically, he's a cold blooded killer.
BIOGRAPHY:
Born where the other Taungs were born. He devoloped the Taung way. When he was training he got a scar across his left eye. He was fighting a fellow Taung and the Taung cut his eye. Furious, he attacked and killed the Taung. 3 years after the incident, a bounty hunter came and killed his best friend. Enraged, Ark sought the bounty hunter in the jungle for 5 days. On the fifth day he saw the bounty hunter dying from a battle wound against a Gundark. Instead of helping him, Ark ended his misery.

4 years after the killing of his best friend, Ark had to go to a asteroid in the solar system and recover an artifact. Once he arrived at the asteroid he was ambushed by pirates. He killed the pirates and aquired the artifact. During his trip back home, he was studying the artifact. Although he didn't know that the artifact was a pirate beacon used to summon a scouting party. Ark accidentally set off the beacon and three scouts came out of hyperspace. Even though the scouts were remarkable pilots, Ark managed to kill the scouts and bring the beacon safely back home.
KILLS:
None... yet

DUELING RING MATCHES:
None

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
None
ROLE-PLAYS:
None

 

[Andreus Makaryk]

You do realize that an IQ of 175 would be about 15 standard deviations above the mean, or about Top 0.00003% (99.99997th percentile; 1/3,500,000), right? (Google is my friend:D)

That is an absurdly high statistic, especially for a first character. Also, your skills, your strengths/weaknesses, personality, and background need far more detail.

I know I'm also new here, but I have other experience in RP.

 

[Project]

You do realize that an IQ of 175 would be about 15 standard deviations above the mean, or about Top 0.00003% (99.99997th percentile; 1/3,500,000), right? (Google is my friend:D)

That is an absurdly high statistic, especially for a first character. Also, your skills, your strengths/weaknesses, personality, and background need far more detail.

First of all, welcome to the Forum Linfini.

The profile, as pointed out by Dei, lacks a certain balance in the Statistics / Stat Section (It seem as if the character had nigh no actual weaknesses as the majority of People in the Galaxy have no Idea how to use Computers properly, or in the case of hacking - inproperly, and most of them have (as far as I am aware) also no Idea of machine or bio-engineering (you should specify this, though that's just me being nitpicky - I take it you were referring to mechanic engineering in the profile).Though it is a good start and the Profile has potential (You should expand on the Artifact part - the History, as it is now, is a skeleton of what it could be, though the Taung are also lead by Matt and asfar as I am aware he'd have to authorize the depiction of a rebellion amongst the Ranks of the shadow Warriors), it is rather crude in its current State.

Whilst I do not see a problem with him being at a physical Peak, you should tune down his agility - the more muscles he has, the slower he is and the less Agile he may be.Along with this, his actual Intelligence (an IQ of 175 is extremly high and nowhere near the average 100) as of now is also given very roughly.Intelligence Quotas will never, and we had this as a sort-of debate before, actually display intelligence (A person may be considered smart for having knowledge in certain Areas others perceive as difficult to understand, and so on) as an IQ depicts more of a capability.

The next problem I see are his skills and equipment; the latter due to the fact that Blasters are recent Technology and the majority of the Taung use ballistic Weaponry as does the rest of the Galaxy (though this might have changed in the course of the Timeline) and the fact that he has his own Freighter (Ships are damn expensive).To actually start with the skills, well, what are 'the average Soldier Skills' - this area could really use expanding (Does he know how to tactically engage enemy Soldiers correctly?All this kind of 'stuff').

At last and least, I have to mention that his personality is too short and his history is, as mentioned before, crude as hell and does not give any insight on the character all.The only thing I know about him is that he kills rogue Taung and sold or still has an Artifact of whatever Origin and was awarded Medals for slaughtering said rogue Taung.

 

[Gambler]

Whilst I do not see a problem with him being at a physical Peak, you should tune down his agility - the more muscles he has, the slower he is and the less Agile he may be.

Um, completely untrue. To prepare for track (yes, a sport that specializes in agility) kids spend about half the time in the weight room bulking up. The higher muscle mass in your body the greater your agility. You are thinking of body mass. A person can be slender and muscular, but not fat and agile. Since he wrote that his char was not bulky, I would say that it is safe to assume that he is slender.

Think about his race, dear. Taung's are natural warriors, strong, agile, and able to take in the least a moderate amount of punishment before going down. It is only natural to have the physical aspect of his character embody these traits. The charisma, however, is a point where I digress. You need at least one below average skill and as a Taung over the course of the Rp your mantra will be 'shoot first and shoot again after'. Intimidation is a Taung tactic, not diplomacy, and intimidation lowers the charisma score.

 

[Insomnium Savant]

You do realize that an IQ of 175 would be about 15 standard deviations above the mean, or about Top 0.00003% (99.99997th percentile; 1/3,500,000), right? (Google is my friend:D)

That is an absurdly high statistic, especially for a first character. Also, your skills, your strengths/weaknesses, personality, and background need far more detail.

I know I'm also new here, but I have other experience in RP.

IQ of 175?

The cusp of genius level intellect is 140; which means that your character is supposed to be amazingly intelligent?

I hasten to mention that I don't agree with the use of an IQ number to represent either knowledge or capacity for learning, because it's very dry and...simply numeric; thus unable to delve into the intricacies of sentiet mind.

Further, I dislike the IQ because it's both incosistent, innaccurate, and doesn't account for non-intelligence based human error; such as lack of confidence, sickness, sleepiness, etc.

But I return back to the topic at hand; I think that better way to illustrate intelligence would be to either explain it, or make some informative comparisons.