Aeron Mareel

[Plasma]

Name: Aeron Mareel
Faction: Jedi
Rank: Padawan
Species: Human / Naboo
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Height: 5' 8"
Weight: 138 lbs
Eyes: Green
Hair: Red / Orange
Skin: White
Credits: 1,000
Distinguishing Marks: Crimson hair and noticeable scars on his shoulders.
Force Sensitive: Yes

STRENGTH: 6/10
DEXTERITY: 5/10
CONSTITUTION: 4/10
INTELLIGENCE: 6/10
WISDOM: 4/10
CHARISMA: 5/10

Force Powers: Force Push, Force Pull, and Force Jump.
Skills: The mentioned Force Powers above, as well as lightsaber combat (below), and piloting
Lightsaber Form: Shii-Cho Form 1
Strength and Weaknesses:
Strength: Loyal and Courageous
Weakness: Over-confident and Slightly Arrogant
Gear: On his utility belt: Blue single-blade lightsaber and an energy pouch.

Ship: None Yet
Droids: None Yet
Pets: None Yet

Personality: Despite his rather serious-expression, Aeron is an easy-going jedi padawan. He enjoys making friends and has the tendency to be nice and friendly to most fellow padawans. He is still very ambitious, and always trys to learn new things.

Bio: Aeron was born to two loving parents. They were quite rich, and they lived in a luxury home in the capital city of Theed of Naboo. Aeron was about four years old when a pair of Jedi knights came to Naboo in search for the planet's force-sensitive children. Aeron was found to be force sensitive, and the parents proudly gave their son to the Jedi Order. Aeron was taken to Courscant, and his training as a youngling began. Aeron, with his bright red hair and brown eyes, stood out amongst his fellow younglings. He was quite curious, and he liked to ask a lot of questions. As an Initiate, he was trained the lightsaber form of Shii-Cho Form I. However, he didn't find himself interested in Shii-Cho Form 1. To him, it seemed like as if he had enough abilities to try something more complex. One day in Temple history class after a meditation session, Aeron found an article about Mace Windu. In the article, there was a sentence mentioning that Mace Windu had crafted his own form, known as Vaapad. There was also a small picture of him performing the Vaapad. The next day, in lightsaber combat class, the youngling decided to try out the complex lightsaber form. While others were training for Shii-Cho Form I that they were supposed to be learning, Aeron attempted to impress them and his instructor by showing off what he saw as the Vaapad move. Ofcourse, three seconds into performing it, it ended up as a disaster: His practice lightsaber ended up severely burning and bruising his shoulders. None of Aeron's classmates or instructor were amused. From that day on, Aeron discovered the value of learning the basic lightsaber form, and worked his hardest to be successful with the simple Shii-Cho. He always remain worried that no master would ever choose him as their apprentice because of that particular incident back then, and trained hard over the years so as to prove that he is now less boastful then he was back when he was an initiate. Aeron is currently looking for a master.

Kills: None Yet
Bounties Collected: None Yet
Duel Ring Matches: None Yet
Grand Tournament Matches: None Yet
Role-plays: None Yet

 

[Kiro]

Looks pretty good for your first character, however there are a few things I'd like to see changed though...

First: The Force Powers. That's way beyond what most Knights can do, nevermind Padawans of brand new players.

Second: Personality. Nothing wrong here, but I'd like to see it expanded. It's quite bare bones at the moment.

Third: Biography. Again, nothing really wrong, but you might consider adding in some paragraphs... makes it easier to read, instead of a giant wall of text.

But those are the only issues I can find, aside from a few basic grammar errors, which I won't mention. Kudos on your first character!

 

[Cassanova]

Hey look another Corellian!
Not that there's anything wrong with that, but if you want a spot of unique to your character, go for another planet. There are a bajillion Corellian Jedi. Kiro (above) as one. I have one. GABA has one. Pete has one.

Loads of 'em.

Its less the New Jedi Order and more the New Corellian Order ;)

 

[Plasma]

Thanks for your comments! Very much appreciated, I'll be working on this over time, and I forgot to add WIP to the title. XD
About the force powers, I just listed almost all of the force powers that I know of so that I could narrow it down to specific powers I decide will fit the character the best. I certainly will add more stuff to bio and personality of course. :D
@Cassanova - That's what I noticed too... Any other planet that human species could possibly be born in..?

 

[Cassanova]

Kuat, Coruscant, Commenor. There's a full list... just... gotta... find... it.

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EDIT:

Planetsz
New Alderaan
Corellia
Hapes
Kuat
Lorrd
Naboo
Tion Cluster (Technically in Imperial Space, so maybe not the best choice)
Haruun Kal

 

[Kiro]

Any planet with a Type I atmosphere and capable of sustaining mammalian life, really. Even if a planet is known to be the home of some other species, like Rodia for Rodians, there's most likely gonna be some humans living on it. And thus, you could be from that. Or, make it interesting and say he was born on a space station? There are some big and old ones that are essentially worlds of their own, like The Wheel.

 

[Plasma]

@Cassanova - Thanks! Aeron will be from Naboo, then. :)
@Kiro - Thanks for the info. Sounds interesting, being born on a space station, I might do that for another character that I might create later. :)

 

[Gaja]

Don't hurt the roster of the New Corellian Order you two.