Rejected The Ultimate Weapon

Lavi

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What is going to happen in your plot?
Thread 1: Not All that Glitters is Gold (ASK, Self-DM)
BD-9 meets @Rizkacha on Geonosis while dodging droid hunters and the two uncover the Ultimate Weapon: the Geonosian prototype Death Star design.​

Thread 2: Is that Legal? (ASK, Self-DM)
On Corellia, BD-9 and Riz’kacha meet Zukrol, a Devaronian that BD-9 reveals is the man who tipped the droid off on data treasures that could be found on Geonosis.​

Thread 3: A Fine Addition To My Collection (ASK, PvP/dice combat)
Rumors get out that BD-9 possesses a secret that will shake up the underworld. The Five Syndicates send out agents to track down and capture BD-9 on the planet Ithor. Although Zukrol’s men tries to take BD-9 for themselves, the Syndicate agents successfully capture BD and wipe out Zukrol’s gang, taking the droid back to a hideout on Ord Mantell for analysis.​

Thread 4: This Party’s Over (ASK, PvP/dice combat)
BD-9’s files are analyzed by the Five Syndicates where they discover the Geonosian Death Star plans… incomplete. The plans themselves map out the station’s layout, but the most important part of the design, the superlaser, is suspiciously absent. Plans to send BD-9 to the Gotra for reprogramming are put aside while the Syndicates probe the droid’s memory files for the location of the superweapon.

Meanwhile Riz’kacha recruits the aid of a fellow Jedi. The two track down the hideout on Ord Mantell with the intention to free BD-9 before the droid could be added to the Droid Gotra’s ranks.​

What other writers (and their characters) will be a part of this?
@WiffWaffs (as @Rizkacha), two Syndicate players via sign-ups, one Jedi player via sign-up.

How many threads will this plot have?
Four in total.

Include opposition type for each thread (DM, dice, ASK/OPEN, etc):
All are ASK threads, two Self-DM and two dice.

What do you or your character hope to achieve with this plot? What is the "end-game?” Link any items you’re seeking if applicable.
This is a character arc intended to strengthen the relationship between Riz’kacha and BD-9 as partners. The Five Syndicates have the opportunity to walk away with a fancy-but-incomplete space station design, but they are never meant to acquire a super weapon. The Death Star plans are to be removed from BD-9’s data banks after the plot is concluded.

Do you need any involvement of canon/site NPCs or faction leaders to be DMed by a staff member? If so, please detail who/what and for what purpose.
Gori xaa Hafven of the Crymorah Syndicate. He will be important for Syndicate agents to report the success of their mission to capture BD-9 and to receive orders to prepare the droid to be transferred to the Droid Gotra for Thread 4: This Party’s Over. It likely would only require one to two posts at maximum for involvement. He can be simply mentioned as the commissioner of the mission to capture BD-9 in Thread 3: A Fine Addition To My Collection.
 

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@Lavi,
Might wanna removed the "under review" prefix, as mods might think someone else is looking at it and miss it completely.
 

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Geonosis was the location of the DS-1 construction and ended up getting wiped out with little to no trace of the DS-1 having been there except for left over construction platforms. In Rebels (TV show) they go to geonosis and all they find is a wiped out geonosian population and and a construction platform. That is well over a century ago so any remnants of the death star plans being there would be slim to none.

In addition waltzing into the Geonosis system and just finding the plans is a bit on the easy side. How did BD-9 first learn that it had been constructed there? Who else may also already have a lead to that location?

I'm not going to say this can't be a plot but I'd like to see more stuff leading up to actually getting to Geonosis instead of just handwaving the knowledge that they know where the plans area.
 

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This plot is actually written after Wiff and I got started with RPs together and we decided to upgrade the story to Plot level. So there isn't too much we can do about the beginning, but we can retcon in an extra thread before the PVP starts where we decide to run an infiltrate a hideout ran by Zukrol, the guy who tipped off BD-9 to data treasures hidden on Geonosis. In that thread, we can go through a discovery of how the NPC found out about the information related to the Death Star and why he couldn't just go there himself to get it.
 

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This plot is actually written after Wiff and I got started with RPs together and we decided to upgrade the story to Plot level. So there isn't too much we can do about the beginning, but we can retcon in an extra thread before the PVP starts where we decide to run an infiltrate a hideout ran by Zukrol, the guy who tipped off BD-9 to data treasures hidden on Geonosis. In that thread, we can go through a discovery of how the NPC found out about the information related to the Death Star and why he couldn't just go there himself to get it.
At that point you should submit a retroactive plot for acquiring the knowledge of where the death star plans are located probably since there is various potential to having that information.

It would make more sense for them to try and get the information from means like the Rebels (and their future related organizations like the Resistance) or FWA since the Empire went through extensive means of covering up the Death Star's construction. It doesn't make much sense when looking at the lore and the time it's been since its construction.

I've checked with the other staff since the Death Star is such a central facet of the Star Wars universe I think it would be safe to say a more realistic target location for finding this information is perhaps an old Empire base on Endor that maybe had the data of the 2nd deathstar or information on the construction of it sense it was still in progress when it got blown up (again)
 

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Just wanted to give you the heads up that Wiff and I have been discussing what we're going to do moving forward. Rather than have to rewrite the entire plot from scratch, we're looking into changing this plot to feature Geonosian sonic weapons instead of the Death Star, while looking to create an entirely new plot that fits what the staff wants to see in a Death Star plot.

Stay tuned.
 

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I'm going to reject this plot since it has completely change. Please resubmit a plot from scratch with what you are now intending to do.
 
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