ryo-kan

[Count Sam]

name:ryo

homeworld:corusant

race:human

age:18

faction:jedi order

rank:jedi knight

eye color:green
hair:black and long

height:1.8m

skin:white

weight:65kg(musclar)

personality:Fun and easy going and usually smiles even during the worst cases.
patience is not also his ally,and you will always find him the first person to rush without thinking.Ryo is also from the kind of people who would fall in love with any pretty girl they see and that caused him alot of troubles during his lifetime.Despiting the fact that ryo is arrogant he is also kind and likes to help others specially girls.Ryo's most special personality is that he never gives up to sadness and got a special ability to cheer up any person no matter how sad he is.Ryo is also a loyal friend and would never sell his friends no matter what situation he is in.

likes and dislikes:he admires those who risks their life for their planet while he hates those who would do anything for money.He also hate the hutt clan so much and in his opinion they are galaxy scum that deservies to be terminated.one of the most things he like are fast ships he always used to steal his uncle's ship and get in troubles with it.

intellegence:very smart 8/10

charisma:very charming 7/10

Constituation:7/10 he is healthy as well

wisdom:not wise and usually acts befor he think 4/10

strenght:average 5/10

gears:a small pistol and a blue light saber that was owned by his father

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS: Niman

force powers:Force heal
Force push
Force jump
Force speed
Force immunity
Force cloak
Telekineses
force pull
Telepathy

history:Ryo's parents were great jedies who served the galaxy well enough but on one night they were sent on a mission and never came back at that time ryo was only 10 years.He then had to go and live with his uncle who owned a shop that sells ships' spair parts on coruscant.Ryo worked on that shop and his skills were noticed at repairing and piloting ships.When ryo was 15 his uncle told him the horrible truth about his parents getting killed by bounty hunters and gave him his father's lightsaber that they were able to retrive.On that day ryo developed a great hate toward bounty hunters and pirates but that made him more determined to become a jedi despite his uncle's tries to make him give up his goal for becoming a jedi.When ryo reached 18 he was already noticed by the jedi order and was taken with them to become a jedi and follow his parents path,and finally after training for awhile on the hands of his master galykia Ryo got promoted to the knight rank.RYo changed alot,after his training he gave up for his hate toward the bounty hunters,and he probably became wiser,and stronger,and now he can probably hold on his emotions unlike before.

Role plays:ryo-kan's training
coruscant streets at night
the training of Damien windstar
Coruscant has lovely sunsets
While the City Sleeps
Unkown Strategy

 

[Johnnysaurus Rex]

This needs some serious revising. History could be more in-depth. 65 lbs?! That's a little impossible for an eighteen year old. I hope that is a typo.

 

[Count Sam]

This needs some serious revising. History could be more in-depth. 65 lbs?! That's a little impossible for an eighteen year old. I hope that is a typo.

thnx alot i edited it and about the history i guess i will add more after he finishes his training

 

[Storm]

thnx alot i edited it and about the history i guess i will add more after he finishes his training

The grammar needs major work; things like spacing, capitalisations.

Rather cliche, needs expansion.

But it's got potential. =)

 

[PuffyCow]

thnx alot i edited it and about the history i guess i will add more after he finishes his training

Your history is literally one sentence. It's a run-on, but a single sentence nonetheless. You should probably add more BEFORE he finishes his training (before you even start RPing, really)...like, go into more detail. I would suggest going into more detail on everything, too. Not just his history.


Also, along with adding more, I suggest repairing your English so it isn't as unreadable and broken.

It does have potential, though...everyone can learn how to RP with effort and time!

Also, I feel like you just copyed this from, like, a Naruto RP site, and changed a couple things. His name is Ryu, which is a generic Japanese ninja name from street fighter that everyone and their dog uses. He also has the most generic and bland personality possible.

One last thing: this is Star Wars. Countries are not really an issue...more like planet, or race. You know?

 

[Count Sam]

The grammar needs major work; things like spacing, capitalisations.

Rather cliche, needs expansion.

But it's got potential. =)

thanks ill do my best in the grammar part xD

Your history is literally one sentence. It's a run-on, but a single sentence nonetheless. You should probably add more BEFORE he finishes his training (before you even start RPing, really)...like, go into more detail. I would suggest going into more detail on everything, too. Not just his history.


Also, along with adding more, I suggest repairing your English so it isn't as unreadable and broken.

It does have potential, though...everyone can learn how to RP with effort and time!

Also, I feel like you just copyed this from, like, a Naruto RP site, and changed a couple things. His name is Ryu, which is a generic Japanese ninja name from street fighter that everyone and their dog uses. He also has the most generic and bland personality possible.

One last thing: this is Star Wars. Countries are not really an issue...more like planet, or race. You know?

well i thought about a name and this name just popped in mind and i really liked it.About the character's profile i wrote it by myself.

 

[Ru the Boatswain]

I must say. Use a space after the periods and capitalize your 'I' and the first letter of the sentence.