OC - Lucelius Knightshade

[AncientSanctum]

Luke Knight

AGE

► 46​

SPECIES

► Sephi Humanoid​

HEIGHT

► 6'2"​

WEIGHT

► 190​

EYE COLOR

► Golden​

HAIR COLOR

► Short Golden Hair​

HOMEWORLD

► Thustra​

GENDER

► Enden​

FACTION

► Jedi Order​

RANK

► Jedi Knight​

FORCE SENSITIVITY

► Extremely High​

BIOGRAPHY

[beebox3=500px] Lucelius was born in the homeworld of the Sephis, Thustra. When the Sith Empire started to expand, it's influence grows ever closer to the planet of Thustra. Fearing that his son would be taken because of his strong connection with the Force, Lucelius's father tried to flee into a inconspicuous place. Escaping on a small storage ship to Tatooine, Lucelius and his parents lived there for 8 years, hiding from force sensitives and bandits.
From an early age, Lucelius's father taught him how to control and conceal his powers, teaching him the values of the Jedi, The Nine Tenants, and the Jedi Code. As a former Jedi, Lucelius's father home schooled Lucelius on many subjects, such as engineering, stratagem, and would sometimes take him along to his job as a spacecraft engineer or pilot. Their lives continued on until one day, a Jedi master in pursuit of a known Empire assassin came into town for information. While in the tavern, Lucelius's father was teaching Lucelius how to fix a broken cylindrical valve. Being distracted, Lucelius's Force Concealment was momentarily broken, and the Jedi Master saw him. Invited to join the Jedi Order at the age of 9, he started his training earlier than most Padawans, and was proficient in all his classes. He was quickly promoted by his masters and became a Jedi Knight at the age of 21. There, instead of assisting in the Republic's effort to defeat the Sith, Lucelius decided to explore the galaxy to learn more about his origins. While the council tried to stop him, asking him to stay, he told them that "the war is unnecessary. There will be conflict even in the future, and this one will only be replaced by another. I want to become stronger when that time comes. For now, I will have to understand who I am and what my purpose is." And with that, he left the Jedi Council speechless. He doesn't remember much about his childhood except the fact that there was a lot of fighting and hiding, and his father didn't like to talk about his past. After discovering his origins in the planet Thustra, he met a fellow by the name of Richard who wanted to be his friend. Both liking adventures, he and Richard continued on his journey as a wandering Jedi, seeking to learn more about the Light side of the force and to understand it's power.[/beebox3]

Combat Style

[beebox3=500px]Lucelius was extremely proficient in the Form III of lightsaber combat, Soresu, or the Way of the Mynock. Because of the style's emphasis on defense, Lucelius managed to create his own style of offensive fighting by incorporating the "Flowing Water" technique into his Soresu, as well as the deadly Mou kei, which was forbidden by the Jedi because of it's lethality. Lucelius also practices a bit of Form IV and V, but only uses it as a backup style to confuse his opponents instead of actual combat.[/beebox3]

Force Abilities

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Acrobatics (Adept) - Like other Jedi Knights, he is able to increase his speed, strength, reaction, and others.
Energy Manipulation (Master) - A natural expert of this type of ability, being able to fully master the skills of Tutaminis, Force Imbuement, and Force Light, his most fundamental Force abilities. His Force Light consists of shooting beams of light, although that easily drains his endurance. He can also use it to temporarily blind targets.
Telekinesis (Adept) - Like most Jedis, he is able to utilize telekinesis to an extent of which it is useful for combat, as well as other purposes, because of the flexibility of this ability.
Healing (Master) - He is able to self heal using the force, as well as preserve his youth and slow his aging process. He also combines this ability with aerobic meditation to enhance his body's condition.
Status (Master) - A born leader, he is able to encourage and even boost his allies's connection with the Force, as well as their mental and physical capabilities.
Trances (Novice) - He never really concentrated on this aspect of the Force except Meditation and the preservation of Mid- Chlorian and cellular life span.
Sense (Adept) - He is able to use this type of ability passively when fighting, using it to create a state of calmness and focus, enhancing his reaction speed and improving his lightsaber combat ability. This renders him extremely resistance to Force fear and similar concepts.
Mental manipulation (Novice) - He has the general usage of mental manipulation taught to all Jedi during their training, such as basic mind trick, illusions, or sense disruptions.
Exotic Sects (N/A) - Has little to no experience in this whatsoever, although he has seen other forms of the Force such as the Dathomir witches.[/beebox3][beebox3=500px]

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Personaility and Appearance

[beebox3=500px]Calm and outgoing, Lucelius is one of those people who will help you regardless of your background. He is quite shy around girls he has a crush on, although it is hard to tell due to his constant wearing of his armor, as well as his great "acting" skills. He is very perceptive but his weakness is that he is too stubborn for his own good, and that he acts weird around girls. Being 46 years old, he is still childish and still loves to tell jokes or camp out and play tag with his friends. He also has a very important weakness, which is that he is too trustworthy, which often ends up in a bad situation[/beebox3][beebox3=500px]
Lucelius has short golden hair and eyes, with a tall stature and an extremely muscular build. He has tan skin, and pointy ears from which he inherited from his Sephi mother. He often wears his personally crafted white Mandalorian Armor, from which he got from his Mandalorian craftsman friend as a gift for saving his family from a sandstorm during their travels in the planet of Mandalore. He also hides a crossguard lightsaber beneath his pants, as well as a glowing white force imbued blade of which he calls Morkandus, or Sword of Truth (Doesn't really mean anything, he just think it sounds cool) inside his shealth located on the right of his armor. Morkandus is made of refined cortosis combined with several kyber crystals attuned to the force, making it an extremely dangerous weapon against lightsaber users.[/beebox3]

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[The Good Doctor]

Hey there man. Welcome to the forum.

Just to let you know we are set 1000 years before episode one. So there are no Clone Wars yet. And I'm pretty sure that you can only start off as a Jedi Knight or Initate

I'd take a read at this link and this link. And for anything related to Jedi lore this timeline, please see here.

 

[Logan]

I can leave more thorough notes in a little while, but for now you should know that you cannot start as a Jedi Master. The starting rank is Knight. So you should probably... tone this guy down considerably to reflect that.

And to echo Lightspeed, we are currently 1000 years before the Clone Wars. So all of the history that involves that will need to be changed.

 

[AncientSanctum]

lol thanks, ill change my biography accordingly. So what era is this? Can you just give me some background on the current situation? (Dominating Empires, conflicts, social groups, etc).

 

[Dark child]

I am really liking the race choice for this character as well as the creativity of his abilities.

The following are opinions:

However, he is quite exceptional at everything. There are little to no flaws apparent in Lucelius, and while having flaws isn't mandatory, these traits help give characters a more organic aspect which often makes them more fun to play.

I would like to see his background expanded a little more. Lucelius has been around fore more than eight decades but his bio mainly focuses on his childhood with only a few sentences of what happened after he became a Knight.

Found below are things that must be addressed and corrected:

Our current timeline is set one thousand years before the events of the movies. Therefore the Clone Wars have not yet come to pass.
For more information on the timeline as well as the Jedi, please check out these links.
All Jedi can begin as Knights but the rank of Master must be earned through RP.
http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/getting-started-please-read-this-first.64715/
http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/the-story-dawn-of-the-republic.73611/
http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/faction-territories.73799/


As said before, I do like his abilities, but they must be toned down.
Healing in combat is something that is considered taboo on the site. It's a rather unfair mechanic and therefor any use of healing abilities will result in high scrutiny.

Cloning oneself through the force is essentially using NPCs to dominate an opponent, so I am going to have to ask that you remove that bit.

The use of light I love. Perhaps he can create something close to a flashbang effect through the force? Anything beyond that seems to be too OP in my opinion and creating weapons out of light is also a bit too much unfortunately.

Deflecting lightsabers with only your palms is generally a bad idea. I'm not saying that he can't do it, but if you try it in a thread chances are someone will call you out on it.

The armor is fine, just add a clause at the bottom of the profile stating something to the effect of
Lucelius's armor has the defensive capabilities of "Faraday" Heavy Armor.​

 

[Valen Pelora]

I was going to say a bunch of stuff, but then @Dark child said a bunch of stuff that I agree with. Tag @Relent or any member of the Jedi Leadership team once those first changes have been made.

 

[AncientSanctum]

I'll change my character accordingly. Thanks for all the links and feedback, I'm still new to this whole roleplay thing, although it is quite interesting. For the moment, I will try to read all those links and codexes. Thanks

 

[Logan]

I'll change my character accordingly. Thanks for all the links and feedback, I'm still new to this whole roleplay thing, although it is quite interesting. For the moment, I will try to read all those links and codexes. Thanks

If you have any questions don't hesitate to PM me here or on our discord!

 

[Narsi]

Hey
I really hate lumping stuff on you like this
But I would suggest reading this guide on the force for the site and then maybe list skill levels in each described category, instead of listing out specific force powers like you have now. You don't have to do it, but its just kinda the trend here and wouldn't limit you so much for the future.

 

[AncientSanctum]

Hey
I really hate lumping stuff on you like this
But I would suggest reading this guide on the force for the site and then maybe list skill levels in each described category, instead of listing out specific force powers like you have now. You don't have to do it, but its just kinda the trend here and wouldn't limit you so much for the future.

It's okay, the more I know, the better I can change. It's not called Constructive Criticism for nothing.

 

[AncientSanctum]

Hey
I really hate lumping stuff on you like this
But I would suggest reading this guide on the force for the site and then maybe list skill levels in each described category, instead of listing out specific force powers like you have now. You don't have to do it, but its just kinda the trend here and wouldn't limit you so much for the future.

Can you give me an example on what you mean by Skill Levels? I understand the force categories, but not the skill lvl part. Thanks!

 

[The Good Doctor]

Can you give me an example on what you mean by Skill Levels? I understand the force categories, but not the skill lvl part. Thanks!

So. I think what he means is. Just describe how good how your person is with those skills. Most skill levels a lot of people use would be something like

Novice - Adept - Expert - Master

 

[Narsi]

So. I think what he means is. Just describe how good how your person is with those skills. Most skill levels a lot of people use would be something like

Novice - Adept - Expert - Master

Exactly

 

[Apollyon]

Also, his sword cannot be comprised PURELY of refined Cortosis, it has to be a metal or alloy laced with Cortosis. Just something I noticed.