Reviewed Hunting Jon Kabian

DarkSaber

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Character Name and Reputation Level: @Talon Vizsla; reputation Unknown
Character Rank: Unranked
Name (and link) of Plot:
Hunting Jon Kabian
Participants in the Plot (Character Accounts): @Dolworth; @Adenn Rytt; @Etr Wyara Belong to @Kenico, @Timmen, @Timmen respectively.
Intended Outcome of Plot: To gain initiation in the BHG for all 3 characters except Etr Wyara (No intended outcome for him).
Any PvP or Staff DMing involved? No.
Link to Dice Roll Thread (if applicable): N/A
Link to Desired Item/Power/Etc (if applicable): N/A
Relevant Threads and a Description Per Thread in Chronological Order:

  • The Meeting - Hunters arrive on Ord Cantrell and begin search for associate.
  • The Interrogation - Hunters capture associate before using his computers to locate target.
  • The Flight - Hunters fly towards designated planet and repel an attack by the 3 of the criminal's associates in Tie Fighters.
  • The Hunt - Hunters followed lead to hidden location of target, encountering numerous associates bent on stopping them.
  • The Capture - Hunters find and capture target alive, defeating an AT-ST along the way.
  • The Turn-In - Hunters turn target in and haggle for reward, making a bet in an attempt to gain a higher reward.
 
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So I had to take a long, hard look at this plot to figure out what to do with it. Here's the verdict:

You're trying to get four people into the BHG by bringing in one target. As @Painus mentioned in his review, the plot should be approximately equivalent to 2-3 threads per person trying to gain entry. This plot was approved with 6 threads for 4 people, and I might have been willing to let that go if the plot was exceptionally long.

However, after reviewing the threads, I don't find it compelling to approve entry for four people into the guild at this time. Although the threads have many posts, many of the posts are 1-2 sentences at most. Comparing them to some of the other plots submitted for evaluation thus far in the timeline and the rewards gained in comparison to one another, I'm going to give you two options:

1. I can approve two members into the guild for bringing in the bounty now and let the other two submit a separate plot to gain entrance by hunting another target.

OR

2. I can reject this plot for the moment, let you hunt another target (another 3-4 threads), and then approve all four of you for entrance for bringing in two targets.

Let me know which one you would like to choose @DarkSaber
 
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DarkSaber

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Ermmm @Phoenix,
Quote my post,
"To gain initiation for all 3 characters except Etr." So we're just trying to get initiation for the first 3. Etr came in on the last 2 threads. He has nothing to gain by the plot.
As told by @Painus, we did a 6 thread plot to get all 3 into the guild.
Hope it's cleared up now.
I apologize for our short posts, but some of the threads were very long and I believed this to have justified an occasional quick post.
 

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Hmm, admittedly, I didn't catch that it wasn't for all four characters. In that case I'll go ahead and approve this. The length does compensate a bit, but in the future please try to avoid 1 sentence posts at least for plot threads.
 
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