Darri Vosk

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NAME: Darri Vosk
FACTION:Jedi Order
RANK:Knight
SPECIES:
Mirialan
AGE: 24
GENDER: Male
FORCE SENSITIVE: Trained

APPEARANCE:

Green skin, with square shaped black tattoos tattoos on the out sides of his eyebrows and semi circular shapes under his eyes, and a solid black line from his bottom lip to his chin. 5'6", with broad shoulders and a well kept muscular structure. Piercing blue eyes, and brown lips. Has a ponytail, and nearly shaved hair on the sides of his head. His body shows many bruises and scars from constant physical sword practice. He also has a large circular tattoo on the back of each hand. Is usually seen wearing lighter tan robes with touches of darker elements such as his obi and boots, but his robes are rarely seen with sleeves Darri also has a leather mask with yellow circular lenses and black mesh over the cheeks that he is never seen without, whether it hangs from his belt or is worn on his face. Also usually is seen carrying a light weight brown messenger bag unless practicing combat


ATTRIBUTES:
Darri has focused on keeping a balance between his physical and mental abilities, but usually relies more on his strength more than the force in a battle. He is also quite gifted with battle strategy, and being able to adapt his strategy as needed based on the situation. Darri is dexterous and flexible both physically and mentally in almost any situation. He is more reliant on defense in his personal battling style, but he has dabbled in all forms of light saber combat which he has practiced ever since he was quite young. Darri is known for laughing or cracking a smile even in serious situations. Is often experimenting with lightsabers,trying to find ways to improve their designs, often searching for materials or new ways to make certain components or to help focus the blades.
Darri is really bad at keeping a poker face, not the kind of person you would want to tell your secrets to. He will often loose himself in the moment, and try to go all out even when it is not necessary. If there is no immediately noticeable threat he will usually loose all form of focus and become quite curious about his surroundings and will try to collect various knick knacks from his surroundings and foes as a reminder of a moment or intense battle. He will often take the lead and follow his own instincts even if instructed otherwise, believing the force will guide him to the correct path. He is a fan of teaching others, even if it would prove dangerous in the end to make a battle fair for his opponent.

PERSONALITY:Almost always sports a winning smile, that seems to intensify in the thick of battle. Will often seem to fall into small fits of laughter, and trys to stay light hearted even in the most serious situation. He rarely talks of his own emotions and trivial thoughts, worrying about others before himself. He is always curious, and rarely cold, but a cunning person in general. Would accept any challenge with in reason just to prove it can be done.


BIOGRAPHY:

Left with the jedi at a young age on the planet of Ilium, Darri has always had respect for the force and its pull on the world. He was raised by the jedi, and was soon found even at such a young age to be force sensitive. When he started his jedi training he was incredibly fascinated by the light sabers he saw held by older jedi, and their ability and function, itching for the day he could build his own, studying the way of other jedi knights and masters before even being able to handle a saber of his own. When he finally was able to construct one at the age of 7, he constructed a quite simple saber with a blue blade. He practiced with his new dearest belonging daily, even if only in simple exercises until he would not be able to use the saber any longer. At the age of 10 Darri discovered from his master that his parents had left him with a mask made of leather with yellow circular lenses, a reminder of the parents he would never remember, and with it a yellow crystal which Darri decided to make into a new lightsaber that matched the stylized patterns of the mask, and began practicing dual wielding lightsabers.

Several years later, Darri decided to study how the lightsaber operated and how different ways of placing pieces and sections of the saber could change the blade and its focus using dejected, old or broken lightsabers as a form of experimentation, his own specia way of studying the force. Usually, he would even offering to repair the sabers of his friends and peers just to see what made their weapons special. He trained with any form of the weapon he could get his hands on, including light pikes, adjustable bladed sabers, saber staffs, cross guard sabers and curved hilt sabers, becoming addapive to their styles of sword play with them slowly but surely as time went on, sparing with different knights several times a day, and even helping train younglings.

One day, Darri decided to make a game of his practice, teaming up with other knights to go into battles against several opponents at once, where he started to form team based strategy that focused on the skills of his comrades paired with his own.

Darri’s force practice was something he took pride in, but not for the usual ways of using it. He prefers to use the force to help him find things, and to focus his saber skills, letting it flow through him and change his focus on a dime as he was taught by his master.


SKILLS:

Swordsmanship(Being best with curved hilt, light pikes and average sabers)(specializing in forms 3, and light study in form 4) light saber knowledge & repair, strategy, material collection, meditation and general dexterity


GEAR:

One Blue Lightsaber Shoto


One stylized curve hilt yellow lightsaber


Leather mask with yellow circular lenses


Two pairs of jedi robes in light tan/ light brown


A messenger style bag containing metals, crystals, saber repair kits and other collected trinkets


Heavy winter gear


Flexible sparring armor
 
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Hello Cole.

Interesting character. :)
Can I offer a few suggestions?

Filling in the faction and rank is what people usually do, even before the character has been approved.
Also, add the Jedi prefix. :)

Just after Personality, remove:
"In one to two paragraphs (six sentences each), describe your character's personality. Be sure to update this section as the role-play continues. This section requires a minimum of 50 words upon the posting of the profile, even if the profile is a work in progress."

Maybe list any Force skills that he has. Does he only know meditation, because that is all you have listed under 'Skills'?

...handle a saber of his own. When he finally was able to construct one at the age of 7, he constructed a quite simple saber with a blue blade. He practiced with his new dearest belonging daily, even if only in simple exercises until he would not be able to use the saber any longer. Soon after this... began practicing dual wielding lightsabers.
A young child practicing wielding two lightsabers? Seriously?? ;)

Several years later...
He trained with any form of the weapon he could get his hands on, including light pikes, adjustable bladed sabers, saber staffs, cross guard sabers and curved hilt sabers, mastering them slowly but surely as time went on
Mastering all these weapons by age 24? Seriously unbelievable, I'm sorry. And using the word 'including..' indicates there are even more.
Maybe list the weapons he can use and how proficient he is with each?

he has dabbled in all forms of light saber combat which he has practiced ever since he was quite young.
Maybe be a bit more specific?
How proficient is he with each of the forms?

I get the impression you are trying to make some kind of perfect weapon master, who can use any type of saber and any lightsaber form.

Disclaimer: All of the above is purely my opinion. Except the bits that are definitely facts. ;)

Seriously, with a few changes he will be a great addition to the site, I am sure. :D
 
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Cole

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Hello Cole.

Interesting character. :)
Can I offer a few suggestions?

Filling in the faction and rank is what people usually do, even before the character has been approved.
Also, add the Jedi prefix. :)

Just after Personality, remove:
"In one to two paragraphs (six sentences each), describe your character's personality. Be sure to update this section as the role-play continues. This section requires a minimum of 50 words upon the posting of the profile, even if the profile is a work in progress."

Maybe list any Force skills that he has. Does he only know meditation, because that is all you have listed under 'Skills'?


A young child practicing wielding two lightsabers? Seriously?? ;)


Mastering all these weapons by age 24? Seriously unbelievable, I'm sorry. And using the word 'including..' indicates there are even more.
Maybe list the weapons he can use and how proficient he is with each?


Maybe be a bit more specific?
How proficient is he with each of the forms?

I get the impression you are trying to make some kind of perfect weapon master, who can use any type of saber and any lightsaber form.

Disclaimer: All of the above is purely my opinion. Except the bits that are definitely facts. ;)

Seriously, with a few changes he will be a great addition to the site, I am sure. :D
Hello! thank you for your notes, small edits made. Hes not supposed to be a perfect swordsman, rather hes supposed to be well balanced in all forms of saber combat, with specialties in certain sections. And besides when you really enjoy something you try to get better at it, especially if it could save your life one day.
 

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Hey Cole, digging the new character.

I do have to agree, there are some serious questions about his skill levels in lightsaber combat. Most Jedi in lore would focus and master one form, maybe have some skillful working knowledge of a second to draw from, and a sort of "I know the most basic stances and first katas" of the others. You not only have him specialized in 4 forms of Lightsaber combat, but also specializing in some of the most esoteric lightsaber styles. It's not only kind of OP, it's wholly unbelievable given his age.

You also describe him as being level-headed and then demonstrate in subsequent paragraphs how not level-headed he is so it's a somewhat glaring contradiction of the characters persona.
 

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Hey Cole, digging the new character.

I do have to agree, there are some serious questions about his skill levels in lightsaber combat. Most Jedi in lore would focus and master one form, maybe have some skillful working knowledge of a second to draw from, and a sort of "I know the most basic stances and first katas" of the others. You not only have him specialized in 4 forms of Lightsaber combat, but also specializing in some of the most esoteric lightsaber styles. It's not only kind of OP, it's wholly unbelievable given his age.

You also describe him as being level-headed and then demonstrate in subsequent paragraphs how not level-headed he is so it's a somewhat glaring contradiction of the characters persona.
Thank you for the comments, i made some fixes to make it less OP, trust me when i say that making him op was't my original intention. Any more notes before it can be made official?
 

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Awkwardly creeps.
 
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