Critique my character?

[lizziie]

I've been working on my first character for a few days now and she's finally to the point where she's not done, but she's laid out in a biography.
I'm not familiar with Star Wars role plays or any clichés or tropes involved so I'd love if someone could read her over and offer some suggestions.
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[Wit]

I'd suggest posting the character in the Workshop area to get feedback.