Atraxis Aburay

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NAME: Atraxis Aburay
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FACTION: Sith Empire

RANK: Sith Acolyte

SPECIES: Human

AGE: 24

GENDER: Male

HEIGHT: 6'2

WEIGHT: 245

FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, Trained.





APPEARANCE:

Standing at 6'2, he possesses an above average musculature due to the nature of his training by his 'Master'. Stripped of his Sith Warrior gear, he is pale skinned due to his connection to the dark sid eof the force, and his eyes have begun to tinge yellow in places. As a former slave, he was branded with a barcode on the back of his neck which is covered either by his hood, or by his unkempt medium length black hair when his is stripped of his armor. His body is lightly scarred due to mistreatment as a child and the hard work he endured throughout his adolescent and teenage years.


ATTRIBUTES:

Atraxis is an above average intelligence despite his lack of common educational knowledge. His mental strengths lie in problem solving of the more physical nature and an innate understanding of people due to body language and speech patterns, though this betrays him time to time when he meets a trained deceiver. His mental fortitude built by years of slave labor and harsh punishment have hardened his mind to mental attacks that would enduce pain or delusion.


Atraxis's physical capabilities are far higher than his mental ones, having been trained from his youth by his origins to endure harsh conditions with a resilient vigor. Before his force training, he was strong and fast and capable of working harder than many men his own age. With his training, he gained a savage determination and a will to succeed with the force as his ally. He is capable of many astounding physical feats with the force empowering his body and heightening his physical senses. He is trained in Single saber combat known to all Sith Warriors, and possesses a unique compatibility with the style. His master had a firm belief he would make an excellent juggernaut, should he live long enough.


PERSONALITY:

Atraxis learned at an early age to listen first, question never, that is until you have the strength to endure what comes when you question your superiors. Having been a slave since birth, he learned to be passive and to wait with patience. He is non-aggressive in most circumstances, yet his hidden aggression comes out in full force in combat. He is quick to engage when he believes that it is the right time, and willing to go to any lengths in order to succeed. He is determined, relentless in his pursuits for something beyond what he has known. He Hungers for something more.


BIOGRAPHY:

Atraxis was born on a small plantation world within what used to be known as the Old Empire of the Sith. The planet had always served as a food production world for the Capital world, and it had no shortage of slave plantations and Sith Masters to run them. The planet belonged to a Sith Governor of which Atraxis had no personal knowledge of. He was a slave under the eye of one of the Sith Crusaders in service to the Planet Lord, he along side his fellow slaves worked the fields every single day from the moment they turned 8. This would continue for over 14 years before the incident.


Shortly after what would be his 22nd birthday, Atraxis came back in from the fields to see a group of acolytes dragging out a few of the older slaves, having been deemed by the production management staff to be more costly to maintain than the product they managed to produce covered. This was not a new sight to Atraxis, but what really changed this day was the moment he saw his father being dragged away alongside them. Filled with a dread he could not fathom, he for the first time in his life did something that no slave should ever contemplate, disobey.


He had stepped out of line, running after his father for a few moments before he felt a heavy weight set on him pushing him into the mud below. A Sith Crusader, the one in charge of his group in fact had stopped him. Atraxis was doomed, he could feel it setting in as the gentle hiss of a blood red saber ignited behind him. Yet the anger boiled within, his calm demeanor had been shattered by the turn of events, and all he could feel was the boiling rage of his powerlessness even as the heat of the saber drew closer to the back of his neck. He could feel it inside him, like a thin strand holding him together had been frayed to far before it snapped.


The force holding him down shattered, letting out a wave of force pressure around him. The pressure from such an explosion caught the crusader off guard, causing the blade he held close to fly into his helmet with great force. The blade burned through the armor, almost slicing his head vertically in two as Atraxis stood up from the mud, not fully understanding what had just happened. With a deep searing burn, the Crusader replied with a bolt of force lightning, rendering the newly awakened force sensitive unconscious.


Following this event, he was forced into apprenticeship and joined many others on the planet in training. He was eventually given to a Sith Crusader for more aggressive training, honing his innate rage into a weapon that could be wielded with deadly efficiency. He soon advanced to acolyte, and started to grow more powerful with each passing day. Over two years had passed since his first kill, and he had become talented enough to hold his own on the world. His final trials before he was granted true freedom were at hand.



SKILLS:

Trained in the single saber style, a general combat technique available throughout the empire. Through use of the force, he has learned to empower his body and stretch his senses further than any normal living being, in effect supercharging his body's capabilities.


GEAR:

Basic Acolyte gear, Basic Saber (Red Lightsaber)

ROLE-PLAYS:

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RELATIONSHIPS:

Father- Deceased

Mother- Unknown

Siblings- Unknown

Current Master- Unnamed Sith Crusader



SHIP:

N/A


DROIDS:

N/A

PETS:

N/A


KILLS:

N/A

COMBAT:

N/A
 
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Can you link the armor to a write-up to the tech boards? And another gear (besides normal melee weapons like the lightsaber) gear to write-ups as well?

The planet belonged to a Sith Lord of which Atraxis had no personal knowledge of.

I'd change this to a Sith Governor instead of a Sith Lord, the only Lords we have are actual player characters.

The description of him blasting the Sith Crusader towards the end seems alittle Starkiller-esque. A person that hasn't been aware of their force-sensitivity until that point might be able to wound the Crusader by surprise, but not sure about killing and then shattering a block's worth of windows all in one go. I'd tone it down to heavily wounding.

Other than the above, biography looks good. Whenever you are ready for me to take another look you can tag me.
 

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My apologies, the moment I sent you that I started making the edits. I didn't think to ping you again, so that was my fault.
@Faster Than Light

Thank you for your assistance so far in this, have a nice night.
 

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Ok, after a quick look everything looks fine now. I’d link the armor write-up on the profile though

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