Haklaami strode confidently amongst the rebel troops, her sandy robes billowing around her tall form. With a deft move she unclasped her cape, and was suddenly clad solely in the functional clothes of the fighter. Explosions rocked the horizon and the sounds of cries and screams filled the air...
Haklaami had been sitting back with her eyes closed in quiet pensive meditation until the other Jedi emerged to greet her. This was to be one of her first real missions for the advancement and rebuilding of the Order; an honour that rightly should have filled the padawan with joy but instead...
He deals in asset management and slavery mostly. Interesting combination, I know. I'd be up for helping in any way possible - he is an excellent schmoozer and very good at bluffing his way into places of trust.
Naboo. A world which had known conflict over the years, and yet had retained an earthy quality of calm and natural tranquility. Moreover, it was covered in grass - which was highly comforting to Haklaami, coming here from Shili. The grass represented the fresh life that still lived within the...
I actually remember reading this back story and loving it! Totally gripping, horrifying, captivating. I really like the whole thing. You really brought the whole 'horror' atmosphere to life and while cybernetically engineered kill-babes aren't exactly a totally new idea you added some enjoyable...
Like: realistic, reasonable stats and back story. Solid character with no Mary Sue or cliche.
Dislike: I feel like it could have some more excitement in its formatting, maybe some images.
Haklaami Ta, please!
Hi! Welcome to the site! I'm sure this will be an excellent opportunity to really develop your English skills (which aren't bad now anyway - certainly not the worst I've seen on an RP forum...)
Haklaami huddled back in the seat, closing her eyes softly. She had been glad to have been found by the Jedi Knight on Shili - after she had fled Arbra the galaxy had suddenly felt fraught with danger, and the only safe place seemed to have been within her mother's embrace. A small frown marred...
I'd be happy to get involved in anything businesslike, but my character is a member of the Hutt Cartel and I don't think that I would want to change that.
Thanks for the heads up! I've dealt with the more iffy stuff you mentioned, and I included something about a loss of fortune that I hadn't actually thought of myself. I think it works well.