Yane was pushed out onto the street, and he felt one of his teeth slice into his lip as he landed awkwardly. He jumped to his feet and weighed his options. It was obvious that without some better weaponry, this battle wasn't going to go anywhere. He sighed. Rolling his eyes, he decided to...
((How on earth does Zembron know Yane's name? Might want to change that.))
Yane simply leaned out of the way, his hands going for the brass knuckles hidden in his clothes. "Tell me," he said, jumping out of the range of the shoto-user. "Who do you think will be in hot water when the officials...
"Oh, great, a philosopher," Yane grumbled. "I'm not interested in your beliefs. Drop them or I will kill you, and by hell, I'll enjoy it too." He cocked his head at the man. "I know that you Force types think that you're immortal, with your reflexes and glowing swords. Tch. I haven't met a...
Yane calmly sipped at his drink until a rogue shot shattered the glass, spilling his drink all over his clothes. Sighing, he rose, drawing weapons. He recalled an order that he'd received from CARD's higher-ups - capture force-sensitives for research. He allowed himself a grim smile. Being able...
"That wasn't a bad song at all," a Zabrak said from beside Lance. "Never heard it before. Tell you what. In return for singing a song that didn't make me want to gouge my eardrums out and feed them to you, I'll buy you a drink, 'kay?"
Without waiting for a reply, Yane signaled the bartender...
PLEASE do. It looks quite odd.
However, you'll probably want to add more to her profile, as it's about as sparse as my appreciation for yaoi.
Meaning not at all.
I updated his allegiance, equipment, and bio for his acceptance into CARD. Please tell me if I made any mistakes with the equipment or anything similar.
Interesting. You may want to put more into the backstory, though it's not really all that necessary.
The only thing that I think that you'll really need to expand upon is the force powers section, as 'basic abilities' is rather vague. Does she specialize in any particular area of force powers...
Name: Yane Ctarr
Age: Early to mid-thirties
Species: Zabrak
Criminal Background: None, barring mercenary activity, which isn't so much a 'crime', per se, as it is 'war'.
Desired Post: Somewhere in the Legion, choose whatever you think suits the new character of the n00b. If I missed something (I...
Hee hee, the newbie's acting like he knows something. The newbie being me, of course.
Anyhoo, you wrote the introductory paragraphs exceedingly well. I got chills just thinking about it. Day-umn, but that's one creepy kid.
“The Force, superweapons, armies... Hah. They're nice and all, but the only thing that you really need is a knack for survival.” - Yane Ctarr
NAME: Yane Ctarr
FACTION: Independent, CARD.
RANK: Sergeant.
SPECIES: Zabrak
AGE: Early to mid-thirties.
GENDER: Male.
HEIGHT: 1.75...