Galactic Alliance Abrakhal Grisgoh

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  1. Styx

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    _N A M E
    ABRAKHAL GRISGOH

    _F A C T I O N
    JEDI ORDER

    _R A N K
    PADAWAN

    _S P E C I E S
    HUMAN

    _A G E
    23

    _G E N D E R
    MALE

    _H E I G H T
    190cm

    _W E I G H T
    92kg

    _W I N G S P A N
    183cm

    _F O R C E
    POSITIVE




    B I O G R A P H Y

    According to report #TH50...0212, Selene Roswell was assaulted by a Mandalorian listed as Jordgar during an incursion on Corelians and later gave birth on Dantooine. Ms Roswell was bedridden indefinitely until eventual death due to labor complications. Her sister Deirdre Roswell and husband Sam Morgan took fiscal responsibility for Ms Roswell up until death and her son Abrakhal thereafter.

    Multiple reports of disturbances detail an unstable home for Abrakhal and a toxic relationship between him and his uncle. Mr. Morgan's record includes domestic violence, public intoxication, and assault. Abrakhal's own juvenile record shows accounts of theft, vandalism, and assault. Some details even recount unusual and inexplicable feats, suggesting the boy wielded special powers. But without his mother's bedside to return to, Abrakhal turned to other activities, eventually reaching city and port, and finally fleeing the planet.

    A missing persons report was filed locally, but led to no official conclusion. Someone did take notice, however. Willhem Byrne, an old friend of Sam's from childhood long estranged, once sought refuge at the Morgan house and, with Sam on a bender, was sheltered by Deirdre. Willhem built a new relationship with the Morgans over the years, using their homestead in secret as a cache and to do his work nearby. The Rebel-in-secret felt little love for the Morgans as he grew to know them anew, but felt it was not his place to intervene. Though they had few interactions, Abrakhal had caught his eye, and when he disappeared, Willhem followed.

    Recruited into a vigilante cell led by Willhem, Abrakhal was added to Byrne's Electric payroll, a front for the Rebel operation. Abe, as he liked to be called, excelled in rebellious behavior alongside other disgruntled youth, drinking and fighting. He avenged what he perceived to be injustices and championed causes that felt right, no matter how small. Through moral theory and sometimes bizarre beliefs, Willhem struggled to father Abe's frustrations and troubled past into maturity. And despite their difficulties, it was the most stable relationship Abe ever had. Until one day, Willhem proposed his desire to bring Abe to a mysterious Rebel contact. Abe didn't take it well, thinking Willhem wanted to get rid of him, that all his indiscretions were too much for Willhem to take any more.

    Willhem managed to convince Abe to meet with his contact, but at the expense of their relationship. Abe never saw Willhem again. Abe was contented to be inducted into this new Rebel cell, despite his suspicions of being examined at every moment. News reached Abe that Dantooine was bombarded by the Empire. It was rumored that Willhem might've been there. In his grief, Abe's new comrades offered him a path of deeper meaning, eventually being recruited by one of the remaining Jedi into the smallest of Orders, searching for answers to all the suffering and to find meaning in Willhem's vision for Abe's future.

    Sources: Corellian News Network. Birth Cert. Dantooine. CBR Criminal Database. Dept. of Missing Persons. Imperial Criminal Catalogue. Byrne's Electric Accounts Dept. Trast Security Inc. Misc.


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    Psychology_Evaluation:

    Subject is increasingly subdued. Subject no longer responds to prompts related to Willhem Byrne. Intermittent outbursts indicate resistance to treatment, reluctance to elaborate on past events that may inform wellness protocols, and trepidation toward forming social connection and emotional bonds.

    Physical Note: subject complains of phantom pain and tremors in left hand. Inconclusive.

    Subject responds positively to battle reports. Recent acquisition of Kf-Series Labor Droid, named Richard, denotes improved disposition. Investigation into name: Richard in progress. Subject voluntarily details rigorous, daily fitness routine and diet plan, engaging in increased eye contact when given recommendations from database.

    Audio_File/redacted:
    They haunt me. In the dark. Those eyes, just staring back at me. But from me. I know they're not mine. But they are, somehow. I don't know. Rainier sees it when he looks at me. I know it. He councils meditation, but cautions against too much self reflection. Thinks I should focus on the pain of others, focus on finding them, out there. He's right. Whatever this is, there's more important things, there are people out there who need, who deserve more than me.


    Summary: Abrakhal Grisgoh is a compassionate man, eager for justice and diligent in his hunt to serve those starving for it. He is also a pained man, running from himself. He is a puzzle of torment, charity, and delinquency. Despite his virtuous motivations, his emotional outlets are often booze and brawls instead of genial conversation and stable bonds of friendship. He is naturally extroverted and boisterous, but often his emotional wounds trigger periods of unsociable behavior, unwilling to form connections beyond business associations. Contrary to his behavior, he seeks direction and enlightenment. He searches for meaning and understanding. He is very much interested in the Force, and suffers a longing for spiritual purpose.

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    R E L A T I O N S H I P S

    • Jedi Padawan Terria Cyrrl [LINK]
    • Independent Luno [LINK]
    • Kf-Series Prime Labor Droid (Richard) [Link]

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    E Q U I P M E N T

    • Lightsaber. Blue blade.
    • Guardian Hold-Out Blaster [Link]
    • Kf-Series Prime Labor Droid (Richard) [Link]

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    T H R E A D S

    [JEDHA]
    • Frozen Out of Fellowship (in progress) LINK
    • A Lesson in the Force (in progress) LINK
    • Costumbres (in progress) LINK
    [SHU-TORUN]
    • RENOUNCE MATERIALISM (complete) LINK
    [NAR SHADDAA]
    • Flicker and Flight (in progress) LINK
    • Plot: Pursuit of the Taboo in Tundra (in progress) LINK
    • Below the Surface (in progress) LINK
     
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  2. Wit

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    So there is no galaxy wide Galactic Alliance, it's very much a rebellion right now. So no GA corps and stuff like that. And the Jedi are also a very rare sight. So could you maybe give a short description of his bio as the format currently used is a bit vague and I am not sure if I'm getting the full picture. Can provide feedback accordingly.
     
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    Sorry bout that! All edited. I removed all references to a Galactic Alliance. No GA corps. And I removed references to the Jedi, but implied that Willhem was a Jedi. I'm hoping that I can keep this vague format cuz I'm partial to it rn, but I'll edit it again if need be to elaborate. Hope this is okay. Ty!
     
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    My bad actually, didn't mean for you to sit the format. Was just asking for a small TL;dr of the bio in the comments to clarify how the bio went.
     
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    Oh I see!

    So basically he's born amongst extended fam>runs away>is recruited by a Jedi (friend of the fam) run Rebel Cell>Jedi dies>and he continues the good fight. He'll have maybe a year's worth of Jedi training? But he knew he was Force sensitive since a young age. He's a good guy with some inner demons.
     
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    @Wit Made another edit! Had the Jedi mentor die in the Dantooine bombardment instead of a separate mission. Figured it made more sense that way. Maybe that helps?
     
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    So I tried going over the bio, and while I get what you're going from stylistically, there needs to be a little more information from a bio point of view. COuld you add a section where his bio and personality are listed in a more conventional manner? You can keep the current profile as it is and add sections for this.
     
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    Had trouble reconciling the issues, so I rewrote the bio in more standard tradition and added some details to fill it out better. Also added a 'summary' paragraph at the bottom of the personality section to give more information.
     
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    Okay, now that I am able to go through the bio I'm gonna have to ask for some changes. Wilhelm being a Jedi and training Abe from whatever time they were together unfortunately won't work. Specially if Abe knew that he was a Jedi before the events on Dantooine. Any Jedi characters must start off as having begun their training in the last 5 years IC, your character seems to know about the Jedi for longer than that. Maybe have Wilhelm be a normal rebel, who ultimately leads him to the GA and there Abe runs into one of the first 5 Jedi who recruit and train him.
     
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    Done! Willhem was a normal rebel who led Abe to the GA and eventually was found by a Jedi with Willhem's info on Abe, and then recruited to the Jedi.
     
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    Also, per the new announcement: @Logan @Wit @Dread
     
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    Just to be clear

    So, after making the initial post you made edits and you get no response in five days, then it's fine to bump your thread. Wit last posted yesterday

    No biggie here though, just thought I'd clear that up :)
     
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    Oop! Dope! Sorry...
     
  14. Wit

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    "Willhem attempted to guide Abe, even introducing him to the Force from an average man's perspective."

    Please remove the above and as I said earlier make it so that Willhem took him to the rebels but did not introduce him to or tell him about the Jedi. Have the Jedi discover him once he's already a rebel, even then they were very secretive about their existence.
     
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    Yessir! Removed the above and changed it exactly as you say so that Willhem didn't say anything about the Jedi, took Abe to the rebels, and then Abe was discovered by the Jedi after already becoming a rebel.
     
  16. Wit

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    Approved!
     
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